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January 06, 2011

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Hi simon
I have a grammatical question:
I wander which one is true:
"on one hand" or "on the one hand"
and after that
"on other hand" or "on the other hand"
regards

Hi Simon

I WROTE THE FOLLOWING

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of Australians attending cinema at least once a year between 1990 and 2010.
As can be seen from the graph, the percentage of all age groups went to the cinema increased over the last 2 decades. The highest increase was for people aged 35-49 (25%), this is followed by those aged over 50 (20%) and about 15% for the group aged 25-34. In spite of it was always the highest percentage of all groups (90%), the change in the proportion of increase of the teenage group who went to the cinema was the lowest over the same period (8%).
In 1990, almost 90% of 14 to 24 year olds went to the cinema at least once a year. Cinema attendance was about 30% lower than this among people aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49, while the figure for those aged over 50 was the lowest, at only 40%. Five years later, the percentage of the three groups aged over 25 increased by about 10%, whereas the figure of the group aged 14- 24 decreased by about 5%, then it returned to 90% in 1995 and remained at this figure from 1998 until 2008 and peaked at 95% in 1996 and 2010. The proportion of groups aged 25-34 and 35-49 increased gradually to cross at 70% in 2006, then in 2010, it decreased by about 7% for the first group and increased by approximately 5% for the second group.

THANKS

In 2010, almost 100% of 14 to 24 year olds went to the cinema at least once a year.
Cinema attendance was about 10-20% lower than this among people aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49, while the figure for those aged over 50 was the lowest, at only 60%.

hi,simon.
could you tell me what the difference between in meaning between the following sentences is ;
1,I will do my homework next week.
2,I will be doing my homework next week.

Hi Simon,

I have a question, if I write only about 1999 and 2010, Do you think that is enough and I will get a high score in the exame?

Many Thanks,
Sara

Hi Bahare,

You can say "On one hand" OR "On the one hand".

However, you can ONLY say "On THE other hand".

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Hi Mhatab,

You've got the right idea. Don't forget to keep mentioning "cinema attendance". From "5 years later" you didn't mention it.

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Hi Choung,

Excellent, you followed my advice perfectly!

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Hi Ahmed,

The first sentence is a plan/intention.

The second sentence means you will be doing your homework when something else happens e.g. While you are at the party, I will be doing my homework.

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Hi Sara,

You could do quite well, but it's best to write something about what happens "in the middle" too. Look at the link below to see a full example.

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/06/ielts-writing-task-1-line-graph.html

Hope this helps

Hi Simon
I think the question is the prediction to 2010 so we should use future tense. Am I right? I mentioned to Choung's writing.

Regards.

Hi Simon
According to your advice, I wrote the pragarph 2 for 2010 as follow:

The figure for the age group of 14 to 24 is predicted to continue significant increase of nearly 10% between 1990 to 2010. Cinema attendance will be 10% lower than this among people aged 35 to 49, but 10% higher than those of the age from 25 to 34. Meanwhile, it is projected that the lowest percentage will still take up by the age group over 50, at 60%.
Regards.

Hi Simon,
is the following introduction ok?

The line graph shows the number of Australian people in four different age groups visiting cinemas at least once a year between 1990 and 2010.

Thanks a lot

thanks a lot dear simon

Hi Simon! Could you please post your essay for writing task 1, test 4 of cambridge 6? I have tried doing it but I just can't correlate the 2 bar charts. they don't jibe especially becasue for bar chart 1, the number of divorces increased while in chart 2 it increased. Hope you can post your essay before my exam on January 22. I'll really appreciate it. Thanks a lot!

Hi simon,
it is very urgent. Tomorrow will be m exam.
The ques is when in task1 in bar chart has not showen any time then how should I write? I meant past simple or present simple. Please ans my question.

Hi Long,

Yes, this test was obviously written before 2010, so it would be better to use the future to predict for 2010. Your description is very good.

As we are now in 2011, the past tense is also acceptable, but in the real exam there will be no confusion.

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Hi Karin,

Yes, that's a good introduction.

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No problem Bahare.

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Hi Grazilda,

For that question, you can write a separate paragraph about each chart. Even though the topic is similar, you cannot compare the 2 charts because they show completely different information - the first shows millions but the second shows percentages. Different years and categories are also shown.

I'll try to do a lesson about this soon, but hopefully it helps you to know that you can describe each chart separately.

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Hi Sharmeen,

If no years are shown, use present simple.

Thank you
sharmeen

No problem Sharmeen. I hope it went well today.

In 2010, almost 98% of 14 to 24 years old went to the cinema at least one a year. But index of people aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49 in that period was considerably discrepancy (73% and 88%) while the figure for those aged over 50 was the latest at only 60%.

Hi Asselkz,

You've got the right idea, but you can't say "index of people" or "latest".

Hi Simon
I want to thank you alot because I get a benfit from your websit and your advice

so thank you so mach

Hi Simon
I wrote the introduction

The line graph show a group of people a

round 14 to 50 years old in Australia who

attendence cinema almost once a year

between 1990 to 2010. AS the graph explain

their was dramataclly change in percentage

of age groups people last cuple of years.

thank you
sara John

Hi Sara,

I'm glad you like the site.

You have a few spelling and grammar mistakes in your introduction. I don't check mistakes on this site, but I think you should show your work to a teacher so that you can get some help and have your mistakes corrected.

Thankx alot but over all i am agood in writing or not

Hi Sara,

I don't give scores here on the website, but I'm afraid I can't say that your writing is "good". It's not bad, but you need to work to improve it.

Hi Simon,

This graph is exactly what I have problem with. It is almost easy to compare the figures at the beginning of the period, as we are comparing data at a specific point of time. However, it is very difficult to compare them during the whole period as they follow totally different trends.
I so so much appreciate if you give a complete answer to this graph.
I am addicted to your website and have found it the MOST useful teaching method EVER.

Thanks Sam!

I'm not sure when I'll have time to write the full essay, but I'll try to do it soon.

Keep up the good work

hi simon,

I need your help. I do not know how start my paragraph. when ı look at the chart,ı am confused because ı do not know where ı can start from ? Could you please give me some tips about writing task 1.

Thank you..

Hi Ed,

There are many tips and examples in my task 1 lessons. If you work through them, I'm sure you'll learn what to do.

A sample answer,comments are welcomed.

The graph compares the popularity of cinema in Australia among four different age groups between 1990 and the present (assuming 2006 as the present!),with projections to 2010.

It is obvious that 14-24 years old enjoyed going to cinema most during the period while Australians older than 50 went for movie least often.The activity is expected to become more popular among all age groups except in 25-34 group by the year 2010.

(Next 2 paragraphs to support this overall picture and trend )

You've definitely got the right idea Phoyazar.

can we write;
14 to 24 years olds people...
between aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49...
and also
for those age over 50 years.. what is refer to 'those'...

Hi Smush,

No, I'm afraid we don't say "14 to 24 years olds people".

You can say "between age 25 AND 34".

"those" means "the people"

hello Simon,
the line graph illustrates the attendance proportions for four different age groups in a cinema from the year 1990 to 2010.
IS IT TOO COMPLICATED OR CAN I WRITE LIKE THIS??
pls do reply..
thanks in advance

It doesn't look too complicated to me.

Hi Simon,

- lower than this among
- for those aged

what 'this' and 'those' are referred to?

hi Simon

Can you please check I used your model applied with this paragraph

In 1940, around 9% of Americans were aged 65 and over. Elderly people was about 2.5% lower than among Swedish, while the figure for those lived in Japan was the lowest, at only 40%.


Cambridge IELTS book 5 (page 29).

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

thank you

I'll try to answer:

Boon,

'this' refers to the number in the sentence before (90%), and 'those' means 'the people'.

Zen,

I think you should write "the proportion of elderly people was about 2.5% lower..." in the second sentence (not just "elderly people was...")

thanks Jim :)

HI SIMON
Can I just write ”Cinema attendance among people aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49 was about 30% lower than this “ ?

Hi Simon,

Could you please check if I got the right idea?

This line graph shows the changes of cinema attendance in different age groups in Australia over a period of 20years.

It is clear that all of the age groups attending cinema was increased, although there were certain period which decreased. The proportion of people at the age of between 35 and 49, and over 50 were increased most remarkably.

In 1990, the percentage of people aged 14 to 24 ages was the highest, reaching almost 90 %. But only about 40% people who are above 50 years attended the cinema at least once a year, while each about 60% of two group, 25-34 year and 35 year olds, went to cinema.

The third age group in the graph exceeded the second age group in 2006 and kept rising until nearly 85%. By contrast, the second group fell to almost 70% in 2010. But the other two group, 14-24 year olds and above 50 year olds, rose to nearly 100% and 60% respectively.

Hi Simon
You wrote "14 to 24 year olds". I am not sure do you confused because as far as I know, it is "14 to 24 years old" (year --->years)
Thank you very much.

Hi Simon,
I wrote the introduction and the overview of the line chart. Can you can an eye over mine, please? I will appreciate it.

The line chart illustrates the percentage of Australians in four different age groups going to the cinema at least once a year between 1990 and 2010.
It is clear that the 14 to 24-year-old group had the highest rate of cinema-goers, at nearly 100% in the year 2010. However, the figure for the those aged over fifty remained lowest over the period shown.

Thanks a lot.

Sorry that I made some mistakes in my previous comments. I would like to correct it.

The line chart illustrates the percentage of Australians in four different age groups going to the cinema at least once a year between 1990 and 2010.
It is clear that the 14 to 24-year-old group had the highest rate of cinema-goers, at nearly 100% in the year 2010. However, the figure for those aged over 50 remained lowest over the period shown.

Hello simon,
thank you for your help!
Can i write "In 2010, almost 99% of 14 to 24 year olds went to the cinema at least once a year. Cinema attendance was about 20% and 15% lower than this among people aged 25 to 34 and 35 to 49 respectively, while the figure for those aged over 50 was the lowest, at only 50%"
thank you so much, simon!

Hi Simon, Can you please post the complete answer of this question......


The graph gives the percentage of cinemagoers according to their age group in Australia from 1990 to the present, with forecast to 2010.

It is clear that the cinema attendant in all groups (except in 25-34 year olds group) has increased and is projected to increase compared with the initial amount in 1990.Also, It is noticeable that enthusiasm for going to the cinema among 14-24 year olds group has been significantly higher than other groups and the same trend is expected to 2010.

In the year 2010, almost 95% of those aged 14 to 24 went to a cinema at least once a year. Cinema attendance was about 10% and 20% lower than this among the 35-to-49-year-olds and 25 to 34-year-olds. The figure was lowest for those aged 50 and above, atjust over 60%.

Can we not write numbers in overall

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