Here is my full essay for last week's question.
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The first picture shows the layout of an art gallery, and the second shows some proposed changes to the gallery space.
It is clear that significant changes will be made in terms of the use of floor space in the gallery. There will be a completely new entrance and more space for exhibitions.
At present, visitors enter the gallery through doors which lead into a lobby. However, the plan is to move the entrance to the Parkinson Court side of the building, and visitors will walk straight into the exhibition area. In place of the lobby and office areas, which are shown on the existing plan, the new gallery plan shows an education area and a small storage area.
The permanent exhibition space in the redeveloped gallery will be about twice as large as it is now because it will occupy the area that is now used for temporary exhibitions. There will also be a new room for special exhibitions. This room is shown in red on the existing plan and is not currently part of the gallery.
(178 words, band 9)
hi simon
in the third paragrah the new gallery plan shows (and) education area and a small sotrage area is that wright.
Posted by: [email protected] | March 31, 2011 at 20:59
He could mean:
The new gallery plan shows (an) education area and a small storage area.
Posted by: Salih | March 31, 2011 at 22:03
Thanks for noticing - it's "an", not "and".
Posted by: Simon | March 31, 2011 at 23:17
I suppose that's what he meant...(an instead of and) typing error
Thank you so much Simon,you know what,I really struggled while writing about these 2 diagrams before.Mine was not even close to your's:( 'coz you wrote it perfectly and yet so simple. Any way you taught me so much through this,thankx again.
Posted by: Maya | March 31, 2011 at 23:31
Hi Simon,
Can you please help me in correcting folowing sentence.
"Secondly, as there is a tough competition everywhere, and youngsters can be seen less capable of taking challanges. As the result of this youngsters are dependent on their parents for longer."
Thanks
Posted by: Gp | April 01, 2011 at 02:06
Hi Simon,
I have one question and wonder if you can help me out. I got some advices from a book on doing Listening Part, as we know,some of the answers are required to be capital with their first letters,so the book recommend that answers can be totally written in capital to avoid mistakes if confused
Thanks for your time. And look forward to your reply
Posted by: Steven | April 01, 2011 at 02:42
From you experience, Is that allowed ?
Posted by: Steven | April 01, 2011 at 02:44
No problem Maya. I'm glad you found my essay useful.
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Hi Gp,
Secondly, there is tough competition everywhere, and youngsters can be seen as less capable of facing challenges. As a result of this, youngsters are dependent on their parents for longer.
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Hi Steven,
That advice is out-of-date (old). They don't care about capital letters in the listening exam now - probably because everyone started writing everything in capitals!
Don't worry about capital letters in the listening test.
Posted by: Simon | April 02, 2011 at 13:53
hello simon
i prepared electronic version of question for "IELTS Writing Task 1: four pie charts essay" and putted it in this address:
http://up.iranblog.com/images/8qc43xynpjbfp34csio.jpg
Posted by: esmaeil | April 02, 2011 at 17:52
Hello Simon,
Can you please post more questions where we are asked to describe about existing and proposed plans for different sites.I tried searching online,there are lots of Graphs,pie chats etc but not this type of 'building plan' essays.
Thank-x
Posted by: Maya | April 03, 2011 at 23:59
Thanks Esmaeil!
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Hi Maya,
I know, it's difficult to find this type of question. I'll see if I can find another one soon.
Posted by: Simon | April 04, 2011 at 18:32
Thank-x for being such a sweetheart Simon !
Posted by: Maya | April 04, 2011 at 23:26
No problem.
Posted by: Simon | April 06, 2011 at 17:00
how about describing a map?
Posted by: Regine | June 03, 2011 at 20:39
Hi Regine,
I've done some lessons about maps:
http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/07/ielts-writing-task-1-describe-a-map.html
Posted by: Simon | June 06, 2011 at 15:36
when u trust your aim Get M
Posted by: mahendra Kumar | August 11, 2011 at 12:40
hi simon
cani write introductin as follows:
the figures compare present and future floor plans for renovation of an art gallery.
Posted by: sohaib | January 10, 2012 at 12:18
That's fine.
Posted by: Simon | January 11, 2012 at 12:24
Hi Sam,
How about using the directions to indicate the positions? like:
the entrance will be relocated from the east to the north side...
The original lobby and office in the right hand side of the art gallery...
cheers!
Posted by: HUNG CHOU | April 11, 2012 at 15:14
Yes, that's a good idea Hung.
Posted by: Simon | April 13, 2012 at 11:32
Hi Simon,
when your essay includes "and visitors will walk straight into the exhibition area",although its a fact, does it not tantamount to giving opinion which is a strict no-no for task 1. please enlighten me.
Thanks
Posted by: Mohit | September 05, 2012 at 15:41
Hello Simon
This is the introduction I used:
The building prints given are of the current and suggested floor plans for the modification of an art showroom
1. Is it right to paraphrase "diagrams" to "building prints" and "art gallery" to "art showroom" in such a question?
2.Instead of Saying " The entrance opens to the Parkinson Court side of the building" I used the entrance to the gallery is now on the northern side which opens directly to the Exhibition area", is that going to cost me marks??
2.
Posted by: Salah Khalid | July 02, 2014 at 10:19
Hi Simon,
I hope you're doing well. First, I must say that I admire all the work you've done here. Of all the ielts sources I've gone through, you're the best ever!!
Second, I have a question related to this "building plans" essay. Simon, as far as I understand then both of them are plans: 1 is existing plan, the other is proposed one. However, it seems like you take them as a current situation and a plan for change.
Please correct me if I'm being wrong!
Best regards,
Thi Hai Ha Hoang
Posted by: Ha | April 18, 2015 at 00:27
Yes, that's right Ha. The proposed plan is for changes.
Thanks for you positive words about my work!
Posted by: Simon | April 19, 2015 at 09:20
thx
Posted by: sue | October 02, 2016 at 20:35
Hi Simon,
Can you comment on my essay below
The first picture shows the layout of an art gallery, and the second shows some proposed changes to the gallery space.
It is clear that significant changes will be made in terms of the use of floor space in the gallery. There will be a completely new entrance and more space for exhibitions.
At present, visitors enter the gallery through doors which lead into a lobby. However, the plan is to move the entrance to the Parkinson Court side of the building, and visitors will walk straight into the exhibition area. In place of the lobby and office areas, which are shown on the existing plan, the new gallery plan shows an education area and a small storage area.
The permanent exhibition space in the redeveloped gallery will be about twice as large as it is now because it will occupy the area that is now used for temporary exhibitions. There will also be a new room for special exhibitions. This room is shown in red on the existing plan and is not currently part of the gallery.
Posted by: Elif | November 20, 2016 at 13:07
Hi Simon,
can you please comment on my essay below
The figures show the current and proposed floor plans of an art gallery.
It is clear that after the redevelopment is completed the total area of the art gallery will be larger. Also with the implementation of the proposed plan the entrance to the gallery will be relocated.
In the proposed plan art gallery is enlarged with the addition of a new wing which in current layout is not a part of the gallery. It will include a large space for special exhibitions and a small exhibition store. Also with the new floor plan the permanent exhibition space is planning to be enlarged by the addition of two rooms which currently are used for the temporary exhibitions.
In the current plan entrance to the gallery is on the side through a lobby. However, the new plan proposes it is relocated on the front through Parkinson court. After the relocation of the entrance, the two rooms which are currently lobby and the office are planned to be changed into an education area and a store plant.
Posted by: Elif | November 20, 2016 at 13:08
Hi Simon, I'd like to ask - is "Parkinson Court" the name of the whole structure shown on the diagram or just the facility attached to the north side of the building? Because If the name refers to the whole building then I think it would be better to change this sentence ;
"However, the plan is to move the entrance to the north side of the building".
Posted by: Cavid | May 09, 2017 at 09:54
The map shows the comparison between existing plan and proposed plan of an art gallery.
It is noticeable that more space and function area will be put into use in future gallery. The permanent exhibition space will be doubled, lobby and office area will be replaced by education space, a new special exhibition space will be built.
In the existing plan, entrance is located at the right of gallery. By contrast, it will be moved to the middle of building and open towards the Parkinson court. A whole new education area and store/plant are planned in the area of lobby and office of existing gallery layout.
A significant change is suggested in the middle of gallery. It is divided into one permanent and two temporary exhibition space now, however, all of them will be converted into one large permanent space. The left part of building is not part of existing gallery, while it will become a special exhibition space with a store in the proposed plan.
Posted by: arnoldzhen | June 14, 2017 at 09:35