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June 30, 2011

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Hi Simon
I follow your advice and here are 5 different sentences describing "first marriages"
- Around 330,000 couples first married in the UK in 1951
- Around 330,000 first weddings took place in the UK in 1951
- In 1951, there were around 330,000 first marriages in the UK
- In 1951, the number of UK first marriages stood at about 330,000
- in 1951, the figure for first marriages in the UK was approximately 330,000

Hi Simon,
I follow your advice as well and here are my answers about remarriages
-around 100,000 couples got remarried in the UK in 1951.
-around 100,000 re-weddings took place in the UK in 1951.
-In 1951, there are around 100,000 re-marriages in the UK.
-In 1951, the number of UK remarriages stood at about 100,000.
-In 1951, the figure for remarriages in the UK was approximately 100,000.

The whole task 1 is like that
The given graph illustrates the information about overall UK marriages, first marriages and remarriages between 1951 and 2009.

It is clear that trend for all marriages and first marriages are almost similar for the whole period.However remarriage increased in later period of time.

Around 400,000 marriages took place in the UK in 1951.The figure reached at its peak to nearly 500,000 in 1971 and then decreased gradually below 300,000 in 2009.First marriages in the UK followed the same pattern, first reached to at peaks nearly 400,000 marriages in 1971 and then decreased to below 200,000 marriages in 2009.

In 1951, there were about 100,000 marriages in the UK.The figure remained same for next two decades and then raised above 100,000 marriages in last 40 years of period. In 2009, the figure for remarriage stood at 100,000.

Hi Simon
I'm gonna sit for IELTS very soon.The problem is sometimes i score 7.5 in reading sometimes i score 5.It's totally disappointing.You told us not to worry about listening and reading.I face the same problem in listening.Particularly in section 3.Can you suggest something for me?
Thanks

Hi, Simon.
Can I use "describe some basic information about..." to replace " give some information about"?

Thank you...

Good work Ngan and Shahla.

NOTE: You can say 'remarriage' but you CAN'T say 're-wedding'.

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Hi Sania,

I think I answered this question in another place.

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Hi Adverb,

I'd use "shows some basic information about". I think a graph or chart "shows" rather than "describes" something.

The chart shows the number of marriages in the UK over a period of about six decades ending at 2009.

Generally, it is apparent that the tendency to get marry has declined steadily since the last quarter of the previous century. As can be seen the number of all marriages that stood at about 400000 in 1951 experienced a gradual increase to just under 500000 in the beginning of 1970s, dropping to about 270000 couples in 2009. Following the similar pattern, the maximum initial rise in the figure for those who classified in the category of first marriage was about 50000 couple in 1971. This number gradually reduced, terminating at under 200000 at the end of period.

As for as the remarriages are concerned, a slight growth was noticed in the number of these couples over the period from under to about 100000, with remaining almost plateau for the most of the time after 1972.

The chart shows the data about first marriages,remarriages and total number of marriages taken place in the UK between year 1951 and 2009.

It is clearly can be seen there is a upward trend in first marriages until 1971 whereas it shows a decrease in first marriages from 1971 to 2009.The figure remarriages is seems to be fluctuated around 100 000 couple.

Overall,total number of marriages peaked in 1971 at just below 500 000 before it reaching its lowest point at just below 200000 in 2009.In 1951 the number of first marriages stood at more than 300000 compared to the remarriages at just under 100000 in the same year, a three fold increase.While slight increase in remarriages is noticed at the beggining of the 3rd decade given period it remained steady in the rest of period.

The number of all marriages has declined over the shown time period peaked at nearly 500000 a rise of 100000 weddings in the UK.

To sum up,although there is no any remarkable changes in remarriages first marriages have decreased steadily causing lower number of total weddings end of the time period.

hi simon is this writing method ok?

Hi Ahamd and Deepika,

Thanks for sharing your essays. Just one tip: try to follow my 4-paragraph approach: introduction, summary, details, details.

The line graph illustrates the information about the total number of marriages took place in the UK over a period of 58 years.
It is clear from the graph that the figure for all the weddings stood highest between 1951 to 2009,while the number of couples who got remarried remained lower throughout this period.
In 1951,there were around 400,000 marriages in the UK.The figure stood steady for the next decade.In 1969,the figure rose gradually to 450,000 and had reached to its peak at around 500,000 in 1972.The figure fell again to 400,000 in 1978 and decreased gradually to below 300,000 in 2009.
The proportion of couples who got married for the first time had follow the similar trend as the total marriages for the whole period.Starting from 300,000 in 1951 and had reached to its peak at around 400,000 in 1969 and then gradually fell below 200,000 in 2009.
However,the number of British people who got remarried stood just under 90,000 in 1951.This figure remained steady for next two decades.In 1972 the figure jumped to 120,000 and then remained around 100,000 until 2009.

Hi,Simon,I am so glad to find your blog, it really did help me improve my Ielts. A few weeks ago, I really lost my faith on my ielts because I have been take it for a year but I still could't get all 7. My average is 8, but sometimes just lack of a little luck. The time I decide to give up, my friend gives me your blog and I find it really inspiring,and then I decide to do the test again. It is my 11th, and I don't want to just give up.Thanks S!

You've got the right idea Jiya.

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Hi Melanie,

Thanks for writing. It's nice to know that the blog has inspired you to keep going. I'm sure you'll be successful if you don't give up! Good luck!

Hi, Simon
Sometimes when I am working on a Task One essay, I get confused about how to use the following two words. One is "proportion/percentage", the other is "population". For example, I looked at the question from Task1 Cam.5, and I don't know whether to use sigular or plural of these words. This is what I wrote:
"The line graph compares three countries in terms of their proportion of elderly people from 1940 to the present and the expected figures for the future."

Should it be proportion or proportions? percentage or percentages?

Hi Adverb,

Don't worry too much - both are possible, but I'd probably use the singular like you did.

Hi, Simon.
I really appreciate your answering so many of my questions and I am gonna take the test soon.

Here is another question:
I know there is a set phrase" see an opposite trend" which may come in handy from time to time. But the problem is that I don't know how to use it.

For example, in the following context:

It is clear that people tend to study for interest as they grow older and that...

Answer 1:
the proportion of study for career reasons sees an opposite trend.
Answer2:
people who study for career sees an opposite trend.
Answer3:
the proportion of people who study for career sees an opposite trend.

Which one is right? Thank you very much.

Hi Adverb,

I wouldn't use that phrase in those ways. Just use it like this:

"The/an opposite trend can be seen in the proportion of..."

OR: "We can see the/an opposite trend in the proportion of..."

Hi Simon,

this is my introduction and overview
please correct me if wrong or !!!


The chart provides information about all weddings, first marriages and second time marriages in UK, in thousand between 1951 and 2009.

It is clear that all weddings and first times marriages were initially rose but it fall in later period. However, there was a steady increase in second time marriages during the time.

thanks
kb

Hi Kb,

You've definitely got the right idea about how to do the introduction and overview.

Thank you Simon

Hi,Simon.
could you help me to figure out if there are mistakes in the following paraphrase?

QUESTION:The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

RESTATEMENT:The table compares the amount of distance travelled per person using different modes of transport in the UK over a period of 15 years.

THANK YOU!!

Hi Adverb,

It looks perfect to me!


respected sir is the following sentences correct ?

There were nearly 400,000 marriage rates in the UK in 1951.

Approximately, 400,000 marriages were recorded in the UK in the year 1951.

The number of marriages in the UK in the year 1951, stood at about 400,000.

Hi Simran,

2 and 3 are correct (but remove the commas after 'approximately' and '1951').

The first one is wrong.

The bar line graph shows the three types of
marriages in the UK between 1951 and 2009.

Overall, the figures are describe in thousands and the trend among the three categories of marriages are not constant. However, the trend between all marriages and first marriages are quite similar, they differ in numbers. Of all the three types of marriages, the people who remarry again is the least.

In 1951, there were about 400,000 marriages in Britain, which made marriage popular at that time, while remarriage was at the bottom, at nearly 100,000. In contrast, to first time marriage that started at over 300,000.

Meanwhile, in the early 1970s, there were slight rise in the figures for all the three types of marriages but a steadily decline in number for both all and first time marriages,at around 380,000 and 280,000 respectively at the end of the period. Contrary to UK citizens who chose to remarry, the rate remained unchanged in 1971 onwards.

Please check my written work. I would really appreciate it. thanks in advanced



The bar line graph shows the three types of
marriages in the UK between 1951 and 2009.

Overall, the figures are described in thousands and the trend among the three categories of marriages are not constant. However, the trend between all marriages and first marriages are quite similar, they differ in numbers. Of all the three types of marriages, the people who remarry is the least.

In 1951, there were about 400,000 marriages in Britain, which made marriage popular at that time, while remarriage was at the bottom, at nearly 100,000. In contrast, to first time marriage that started at over 300,000.

Meanwhile, in the early 1970s, there were slight rise in the figures for all the three types of marriages but a steadily decline in number for both all and first time marriages,at around 380,000 and 280,000 respectively at the end of the period. Contrary to UK citizens who chose to remarry, the rate remained unchanged in 1971 onwards.

Please check my written work. I would really appreciate it. thanks in advanced.

Sorry If I posted it again because I made some correction.

Hi Rommel,

You seem to have the right idea, but I'm afraid I don't give essay feedback, corrections or scores. If I did this, everyone would send me their work. Try to find a teacher who can give you some individual help.

Best of luck!


strating sentence with there, is it good ,sir?

there were nearly 400,000 marriages in 1951. after a slight fluctuation until 1961 , there was an upward trend, peaking well under 500,00 in 1971. however, there was a downward trend until 2009.

Hi Simran,

I'm afraid I can't offer a grammar correction service. If I offered grammar correction, everyone would send me their sentences, paragraphs and essays. If you want detailed correction and feedback about your writing, you really need to find a teacher who can help you face-to-face.

Hi Simon,

Here is my exercise for your this lesson:

1.Describing the "first marriage" figure for the year 1951:
-Nearly 350,000 couples first married in the UK in 1951.
-The number of UK first marriages in 1951 stood at around 350,000.
-1951 saw about 350,000 first marriages in the UK.
-There were around 350,000 UK couples getting first married in 1951.
-The figure for first marriages in the UK was approximately 350,000 in 1951.

2. Describing the "remarriages" figure for the year 1951:
-The number of remarriages in the UK stood just below 100,000 in 1951.
-The figure for UK couples getting married again was around 100,000.
-About 100,000 couples remarried in the UK in 1951.
-There were approximately 100,000 remarriages in the UK in 1951.
-1951 saw that around 100,000 weddings which were not the first one took place in the UK.

Please have a look at my exercise.
Thank you very much for your useful work.
Have a nice day!

Great work UT. This is the kind of sentence practice that students need to do!

Dear Simon,
I found your web site in a few days ago and i really glad for that because your lessons and advices are totally useful and i appreciate for your kindness..thank you so much

Hi Simon,

This is Doris. A writing task that I am currently working on looks at the average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel. Is it compulsory to mention "the average distance travelled" in each description? Can I replace "average distance travelled" with "the number of miles moved"?

Thanks a million!!

Hi Simon,
I'm writing a report on "China and America birthrate".
Is it alright if I use the phrase "a baby boom" or the word "explode" in Writing Task 1.
For example: "Between 1945 and 1950, both country saw a baby boom. Particularly, in 1950, the US birthrate rose considerably to 15%, and the birthrate in China exploded, at 20%."

Thank you!

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