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June 22, 2011


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Thanks for your good essay!
I studied from your essay that, with these kinds of question, the 2nd paragraph show opinions (agree or disagree) and the 3rd paragraph give advices or suggestions. Is it OK? Please help me to understand it clearly.

Thank you very much

Hi Tom,

No, it's not really 'opinion' then 'suggestion'.

I just wrote 2 different reasons why I disagree:

Paragraph 2: it's not realistic or practical
Paragraph 3: it's not fair

Hope this helps

hi Simon
your essay is so organized and perfect , i really appreciated for sharing the ideas. One thing can you arrange any essay related to senior citizens(elderly peoples)?

hello Simon,
Its really a nice easy. Thank you very much for sharing.Would you please tell us which are band 7 vocabularies here.I heard vocabulary helps to get higher band.

Hi Shahla,

I've got a list of topic requests from different students, so it might take me a while before I can do a lesson about that. There's a section about 'old people' in my ebook if you want some ideas right now.


Hi Lubna,

Good point. I'll write a list of the band 7 vocabulary in Sunday's lesson here on the site.

Hi simon , could please give me a feedback for this essay ?
Sohuld empolyers have an equal number of their staff?
To what extend you agree or disagrre with this statement?

Some employers are eager to promote the equality in recruiting their staff from male and female. Having given the job opportunities to one gender rather than another is discriminatory and illegal act with probable consequences on the reputation of the workplace. However, being a diverse incorporation or company is a closer step to achieve success in several aspects like wider range of knowledge and skills with encouraging aim of modern and acceptable trend in distributing the job chances for applicants.
Many employers face some complicated obstacles to take on the workforce. For example, employment should be based on the qualification and experience rather than sex .If any candidate looks for a specific job; they would fill out an application form, requiring information on sex and marital statue. This could lead to discrimination in the offered job opportunities between male and female. Furthermore, in some countries, it is illegal to accept women instead of men or vice versa, because this could bring discriminatory reputation to the company.
On the other hand , however ,experienced managers should take into account some features in their employees such as accuracy, loyalty and practice in specific profession with a high-recorded profile to ensure a promising result in the future of their workplace. It is quite widespread to find some sectors like building projects, engineering and heavy- lift jobs are lacking women , which are frequently at men hands, while nursing ,teaching systems present more chances for women. Due to the nature of each gender, applicants could be distributed accordingly. Thus, successful work leaders should hire a equal, renewable, skilful and knowledgeable workforce.
To sum up, it is worth mentioning that employment technique must be based on the skill and experience rather than gender. Personally, I think, it would be better for employers to hire the appropriate person in the right position. Also, they should be paid and treated equally to ensure a certain improvement in the social statue of the workers in their workplaces.

Hi Simon,

I sat IELTS today. The topic in writing part 2 was:
" Early technological developments have brought more benefits and advantages to the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments will ever have."

To what extent do you agree/disagree?

I wanted to share it.

I learnt many from your advices even in a short period.

Thank you

this topic is bit confusing me.As early technical developments are invention of wheel ,invention of telephone.Recent development mean internet penetration and its effect?

Early technological developments have brought more benefits and advantages to the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will.hi simon ,please,can explain this topic for me. i had exam yesterday.and i could not understand it . thank you for your lessons. i appreciate your work.

Hi Simon
Can you please comment on my introduction?

The topic is:Scientists and the news media are presentig even more evidence of climate change. Governments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibilities of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage. What are your views?

The introduction :
In our contemporary world the issue regarding the phenomenen known as "climate change” remains as a source of bone of contention among all walks of life. The problem is talked much, however, there is a strong dispute whether individuals or governments should take action in order to solve the upcoming disaster of a global scale. However, before drawing a conclusion all the pros and cons have to be assesed at length.

My questions:
1. Is the use of idiomatic vocablury ok? Especial the "bone of contention" part.
2. Speaking question. There is a chinese web-site and the author is an IELTS examiner as he claims. http://ielts-yasi.englishlab.net/index.htm He says that the cue cards (Speaking part 2) can be predicted though the range of cue cards is 70. Is this true? Hope the answer is positive =)
Thanks in advance will wait for your reply.

Hi Aumda,

I'm afraid I don't give essay feedback or scores. If I did this, everyone would send me their essays.


Thanks Muzaffer.


Hi Deepika and Rasha,

I looked at that question with my students. We decided that both early technologies (e.g. forms of transport like cars or trains, and certain medicines) and recent developments (Internet, new medical technologies) have been equally important in our lives.


Hi Bekzod,

'Bone of contention' is ok, but I probably wouldn't use it myself.

One tip: you'll get a better score if you present your opinion in the introduction and then use the rest of the essay to explain and support it. Saving your view for the conclusion is not the best technique.

I'm not sure about the exact number of cue cards, but it's true that they tend to repeat the same ones.

Hi Simon,

Through the information I have read while preparing for the IELTS, I have seen that some people say that one paragraph of the body should be dedicated to give the reasons why the point of view opposed to yours has some importance and truthfulness in it.

Do we have to include that in our essay?


Hi Aldo,

No, it's not necessary to do that. You can if you want, but it's definitely not necessary.

hi simon plz give a dscirption essay about the essay"earlier technological developements brought more benifits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent development ever will"

Hi Dpesh,

Have a look at this lesson:


Respected Simon,
I am a new entrant on your site. I am glad to have found your site for ielts preparation. As I am a new comer, I don't know where to start. Would you please guide me. what is the most appropriate way to get maximum benefit from your posted lessons.I am optimistic about a wonderful tip from your side.
Thanks a lot.

Hi Munir,

I'm glad you've found the site.

There is no special order, so just have a look around and see what you find. Try to follow the daily lessons, and look back to previous lessons whenever you have time.

Good luck!

Hi Simon
Im wondering why you in your essay wrote this sentence "If a university decided to fill courses with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each gender"
and didnt write If an university...

thank you for your tips which you have written

Hi Mh,

We don't say/write "an" university. We put "an" before a vowel sound, so there are some examples that might seem strange e.g:

We say "an MP" because the sound of "M" is "em" (MP = member of parliament).

We say "a university" and "a unit" because the sound is "y", but "an uncle" because the sound is "u".

thanks Simon I didnt know it .Am I right when the letter u has sound "you" it doesn't considered as vowel like " a Utopia"
?? but we have to say " an urgent"

Thank you again Simon

That's right Mh.

Hi Simon I wrote an essay about this question and I borrowed some phrases from yours such as " if half of them needed to go to males" or "fewer qualifications". I submitted my essay to a writing corection servie, however they crossed them out wrote their recommendations instead such as "are reserved for" instead of"needed to go to"; "less qualifications" instead of "few qualifications" and im really confused and frusted. because of these corrections, my score has been signifcantly impacted.

Hi Christina,

I can tell you that "less qualifications" is grammatically wrong. "Less" is used with uncountable nouns e.g. "less money". I'm not sure how reliable that correction service is if they wrote "less qualifications".

All I can say is that everything in my essay is 100% correct.

i need help with this IELTS question

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Hi Amarkhan,

I'd write that both have an equal influence. This allows you to write one main paragraph about the influence of our genes, and another paragraph about the influence of the experiences we have.

Have a look at this lesson for some ideas:


I really learn something from your Blog,thanks.

Thanks Vivian. It's always nice to hear that my lessons are helping.

hi simon.i do not understand that your good essays are readible,but most essays i saw in ielts cambridge books that they are difficult to explain to a level of understanding.plz write yor advices to me what ways are good.

Hi Ramin,

Good writing should always be readable. For example, if you read a good newspaper article, it should be well-organised and easy to follow.

In my opinion, the problem with the Cambridge model answers is that they all follow a different format or method. I think they are probably written by different people, and this makes them confusing. Hopefully, my essays are easier because I always write them according to the same method, and this might make it easier for you to use them as models for your own essays.

many thanks.you just encouraged me .

Hi Simon,

Your essay is really helpful, and it gives me hope to achieve band 7 in writing task.

I have a question about a sentence in your essay.
"if a female student IS the best candidate, it would be wrong........"
In this conditional sentence, i think "was" might be more appropriate with "would", could you explain it?


Hello Simon,

I had my IELTS exam on July 27. The topic for writing task 2 was similar to this one and I just wanted to share.
"Nowadays some workplaces try to have exact numbers of men and women. Do you think it is a positive development or negative development?"

Thank you for your helpful blog!

Good evening,who said that your essay is eligible to take or score a band 9?first of all you must not put your opinion or your preference at the beginning entirely!you must put at the last paragraph always.
Secondly,each paragraph you should start it with s topic sentence then you can discuss it in details!
Your ideas are accepted .
The vocabulary is not complex, then you should use more complex vocabulary? And you should use more complex sentences.
These are my concerns only
Thank you

Hi Schneider,

I'm speaking as an ex-examiner. I'm afraid you have the wrong idea about a few things:

First, if you save your opinion until the end, you will get a lower score because the mark scheme states that the "candidate's position should be clear throughout the essay". Examiners want to see a clearly stated position (opinion) which is then supported in the rest of the essay.

Second, both of my main paragraphs DO start with a topic sentence. The main (topic) ideas are: 1) it is unrealistic 2) it is unfair.

Although I like to use 'topic sentences', I should point out that there is nothing in the examiner's mark scheme that says they are compulsory. It is certainly possible to write a band 9 essay without them.

Third, what do you mean by 'complex vocabulary'? Big, strange words that native speakers never use? This is not the key to a high score. The essay above is full of good chunks of vocabulary (collocations and phrases that are relevant to the topic). In terms of grammar, there is plenty of variety in the essay, and I don't think you'll find any mistakes.

Please believe me: the essay above is BETTER than anything an examiner would expect to read - it's EASILY a band 9 essay. IELTS is an exam for learners of English, not for professional writers!

Hi simon
I am confused by this sentence "it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications."
I think it would be better to be " .. to reject her and be in favour of .." . Can you explain it ? Thank you

Early technological developments have brought more benefits and advantages to the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will.hi simon ,please,give me an essay about this topic for . thank you for your lessons. i appreciate your work.

hey simon i am facing problem in identifying the type of question , please help me out

Thank you for sharing your essay

Dear Simon, the essay is really nice not only in the words chosen but also the ideas written. Thank you so much

I have a question regarding conditional sentences that you have used in your above essay.For example this one "If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications". My question is this, shouldnt be "If a female student WAS the best candidate.. ? I appreciate your answer. Thank you.

Is is required to write both views if the question is about something to agree or disagree?

Hi Faheem Here*its very well organized essay ..you did not use complex or complicated so even lay man understand.But u did not use good vocabulary words ??y



thank you very much

I have a book for ielts essay examples, it has the same topic, but the example essay in this book is less understandable than yours, and, the ideas are not creditable too.

Hi simon,
I wanted to know that in an essay that contains "what are your views on the issue?" should we write it in the argumentative essay style (describing only the side we support)or in a discussion essay (describing both sides)style?

Hi Simon,

My IELTS exam will be held on 7th of January 2017. I want to know that in writing both the tasks 1 & 2, the word limits are 150 and 250 words respectively. While writing a letter or an essay, if the word limits exceeds a bit, say from 150 to 165 nd from 250 to 265 or 270, Does this going to affect the marking or the bands? Thanks

Great teacher!!!thx,simon,I'm crazy about you!

Paragraph 3: it is not fair

'If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it is surely wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications.' I think this sentence might be off the topic .

better say: it is surely wrong to reject her and admit a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications, just in order to reach equal percentage of gender admission.

how do you guys think ?

I think 'Paragraph 3: it is not fair' has something wrong.

'If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it is surely wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications.' I think this sentence might be off the topic .

better say: it is surely wrong to reject her and admit a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications, just in order to reach equal percentage of gender admission.

how do you guys think ?

Oh good old days . Times you had enough time to reply those comments (even some nasty ones lol). It seems to me that not everyone is able to understand CLARITY comes with SIMPLICITY . I wonder what is behind that crave for complexity ? Personally I would not even read a book or an article which overcomplicates the meaning on purpose by using old Latin or Old Testament vocabulary . We are general public not literary scholar or biblical rabbi . Ok come to the sentence structure . Who told you to design a puzzle ?

Thx God for sending you to teach us how to write otherwise I would never ever learn to write in my own style and bored to death before I get a 7 . You ignited that passion in me .Yes I can write and Yes 9 is possible :)

Stay blessed Simon :)

Universities should accept the equal number of male and female students in each subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.?

There has been a lot of controversy pertaining to the concept of educational institutes should allow the same statistics of men and women in every subject. I am in favor of equal educational opportunities for both genders.However, I disagree with the idea of equal enrolment of both male and female students in every university subject.

In reality, it is almost impossible to have the identical number of students in every subject. There are various professions that require one gender, more than other to cater it’s specific requirements. For example, Civil engineering requires male students, who can perform outdoor activities and heavy physical work at construction sites.Due to the need of greater physical strength in such vocational courses, female students may not be the suitable candidate. Similarly, the Gynecology( a subspecialty of medical field), is heavily dominated by female student doctors because women patients are more comfortable with a doctor of the same gender, especially in the context of sexuality.
Apart from the idea expressed above, I also believe that it would be unfair to admit students for tertiary education solely on the basis of gender. Universities should select the best candidate according to their qualification.A gender-based selection may lead to mediocrity. For instance, in a particular university, where there are 50 seats in the economics course and they have to pick an equal number of male and female students. In spite of the fact that university doesn’t have qualified male aspirants, but in name of gender equality, they choose non-deserving male candidates.It causes loss of opportunity for a bright female student, who could have been selected if there was no gender-based selection system.

In conclusion, I believe that selection of university students should be based on their excellence and gender-based enrolment in professional courses should be discouraged as it is both discriminatory and impractical.

P.S:-I have posted this essay to one paid correction service and they have given 6 band. I have actually just tweaked your essay .I would like to know your honest opinion .Is it really a 6 band essay? I was expecting a better score.
Thanks in anticipation,
Dr.P. Srivastava

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