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July 14, 2011

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thanx simon ...............

Hi simon hope you r doing well? simon i have written task 1 from cambridge book 5 test 2.But i found it very difficult b/c i cannot write properly whether i should write seperate two para about young and old age students.Or do i need to compare plz can you do this task here i would be gratfull to you.
thanx
regards
reema

At the beginning of the period (1951)there was a total of 400.000 marriages. This was greater than first marriages and remarriages by less than one fold for the former and almost threefold from the latter . The gap between all marriages and first marriages became wider during the period and almost two times bigger in size than the gap which was at the first year of the survey, whereas the size of the gap between all marriages and remarriages decreased to third

The trend of first marriages indicates a substantial rise in the total marriages with almost 500,000 in 1971 before it dramatically declined all the way to 2009. This pattern of this trend is mirrored by first marriages category trend. Regarding remarriages , there was a slight decline at the first 2 decades then it increased slightly in 1971 to continue at the same level till the end of the period(2009) with some fluctuation accounting less than 100,000 marriages.

Hi reema ,
Yes it is difficult. I have tried it once

Thanx Sulaiman if you have written can you just share it.on this site.

The line graph shows information about the number of all marriages, first wedding together with number of remarriages that took place in the UK over the period of 1951 to 2009.
Initially a gradual increase could be very well observed in all marriages and first weddings followed by a fall in later period. However, remarriages plummeted to a certain period with steady increase in subsequent years.
In the year 1951,inspite of sharp fluctuations the number of all weddings and first marriages were approximately 400,000 which soared to a new peak in the year 1971 reaching approximately 500,000 but these figures fell dramatically in 1973 and number of marriages dipped several times before sinking to a new low at the end of 2009.
The number of second marriages in 1951 were recorded just under 100,000.After 1971, a steady increase could be analyzed in number of remarriages reaching more than 100,000 but it fell below 100,000 in 2009.

Hi Reema,

For that question, it's best to do a separate paragraph about each bar chart. Try to compare the age groups and the reasons for study, but it's not necessary to make connections between the 2 charts.

I'll do a lesson about that question, but I'm not sure when it will be.

The graph presents the general trend of marriages numbers in The UK over the period 1951-2009 in thousands. Also, the line chart provides a comparison between the first marriages and remarriages at the same period.

Initially, the number of all marriage decreased markedly by 30% to reach nearly 280,000 in 2009. Whereas, there was a dramatic fall of first marriages from the end of 1960s to record under 200,000 marriages after five decades. Therefore, It can be seen that there was a direct correlation liking between all and first marriages.

Moreover, the remarriage figures leveled around 100,000 over sixty years. It could be noted the changes in numbers of remarriages didn't affect on the general trend on all marriages.

To sum up, the lack of desire for marrying among young people contributed to reduce the numbers of all marriages over the period 1951-2009. In addition, the first marriages decreased by over 50% percent to form the main reason of dropping in all marriages. In contrast, remarriage numbers remained stable for the same period.

hi simon,
i have recently found ur website and it is exxxxxxxxxtremely useful for me..i m going to give my exam on july16th..need ur blessings...

i have got a doubt that can i write intro as
'opinions on (topic) may vary tremendously among the individuals'
or
opinions on ...may vary tremendously from individual to individual.

thanks in advance,

gaana.

hi i wana know...wt about raw score of ielts reading and listening of both module out of 40???

plz give me detail about all band detail of out of 40.??/

hi ahmad
could you please tell me how did you calculate it to be 30percent?
Thanks in advance.

Hi Simon thankyou very much.

hi simon. i have to take 5.5 in IELTS and i have 2 months :/ what should i do ? i am upp-intermediate in my school. pls give me some advice :/ thx..

Hi Gaana,

I'm glad you found the site.

Your second sentence is best: "opinions on ...may vary tremendously from individual to individual."

Good luck tomorrow!

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Hi Jay,

Look at this lesson:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/08/students-questions-reading-scores.html

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Hi Mehmet,

You just need to keep practising and working hard. Try to follow the daily lessons on this site, use the Cambridge IELTS books for test practice, and try to find a teacher or native speaker who can check your work, correct your mistakes, and help you to improve.

thanks a lot simon...
gaana.

HI, Simon
Am I using the increase/decrease vocabulary correctly in the following sentences?

1.Housing prices in three cities subsided radically.
2.The average values improved marginally.
3.The average house prices shrank only in Tokyo.
4.The values picked up in the remainder of the cities.
5.New York experienced an obvious upturn by 5 percent.

thnx simon

gr8 site and institution found.....

thnx a lot

Hi Adverb,

I wouldn't use 1 or 3, and be careful with "improved" (e.g. don't say something like 'unemployment improved'). 4 and 5 are fine.

Hi Simon.

This is my version of this task 1.

The line graph shows the numbers of marriages in one country from 1951 to 2009.

Overall, it is clear that there was a considerable decrease in the figures for all marriages and the first marriages, while the numbers of remarriages rose slightly and remained stable for the rest of the period.

At the beginning (1951) the numbers of all marriages had approximately 400,000 people, at the same time the figures for first marriages was 320,000 people, whereas the trend of remarriages had just under 100,000 people. In 1971 there were a peak in the numbers of all marriages (nearly 500,000) and first marriages (around 400,000), while the figures for remarriages increased rapidly and it showed roughly 120,000 situations.

Then, there were big differences in each trends from 1971 to 2009. The trends of all marriages and first marriages felt significantly, almost twofold dropped. At the end of the period they showed approximately 270,000 in the figures for all marriages and around 190,000 in the numbers
of first marriages. As regards the trend of remarriages, it remained stable around 100,000 people these period of time.

Hi,

This article is very informative since it was clearly stated the first and second detailed paragraph. This is beneficial to those who will take the IELTS exam since they can get a lot of information here.

Thank you.

The line graph tells the information about the marriages in the UK between 1952 and 2009.

Overall,the total number of all marriages was at its peak before it gradually declines at the end of the period. Likewise,it has also shown in first time marriages.Whereas, remarriages was at its lowest when it rose slightly in the middle of the period then stabilised onwards.

Meanwhile, approximately over 400,000 people got married before it rose to its highest figure in the history of UK, at nearly 500,000 in the year 1971.The similar trend can also be seen in first marriages, which started at just over 300,000 before peaking at almost 400,000, half way of the period.However, the figure in remarriages was different because it began with under 100,000 prior to rising to about 110,000 in 1970s.

Finally, from the year 1971 onwards, the number of people who got married for the first time declined gradually, where it fell to about 190,000 in 2009,as well as to the overall figure of all marriages, when it dipped to just under 300,000.In terms of remarriages, it remains unchanged until the end of the period.

Please check my essay. I would really appreciate it. tnx

Hi Gwapo,

You seem to have the right idea, but I'm afraid I don't offer essay correction and scoring. If I did this, everyone would send me their essays. Try to find a teacher who can help you face-to-face.

but Simon is this above average?please

The line graph tells the information about the marriages in the UK between 1952 and 2009.

Overall,the total number of all marriages was at its peak before it gradually declines at the end of the period. Likewise,it has also shown in first time marriages.Whereas, remarriages was at its lowest when it rose slightly in the middle of the period then stabilised onwards.

Meanwhile, approximately over 400,000 people got married before it rose to its highest figure in the history of UK, at nearly 500,000 in the year 1971.The similar trend can also be seen in first marriages, which started at just over 300,000 before peaking at almost 400,000, half way of the period.However, the figure in remarriages was different because it began with under 100,000 before it rose to around 110,000 in 1970s.

Finally, from the year 1971 onwards, the number of people who got married for the first time declined gradually, where it fell by about 190,000 in 2009,as well as to the overall figure of all marriages, when it dipped to just under 300,000.In terms of remarriages, it remains unchanged until the end of the period.

simon do you have your sample written work for this line graph? tnx

Hi Gwapo,

Your essay looks fine, but for detailed feedback, try to find a teacher who can check it carefully and point out your mistakes.

I haven't done a full essay for this graph, but I've done essays for some similar graphs. Try to analyse my essays carefully:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/08/ielts-writing-task-1-full-essay.html

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/06/ielts-writing-task-1-line-graph.html

is this( according to the line graph) a correct placement ?


the unemployment in the USA, according to the line graph, stood at 7% at the begining of the period. meanwhile , the figure for japan was lower at 2%,

Yes, that's fine.

Hi Simon,

Your website is enormously helpful, thanks for all informations.
Can you help me with the word 'peak' usage?

which one is true?

1)First marriages peaked in 1971 at about 400.000
2)First marriages has a peak in 1971

Hi Srp,

I'm glad you like the site. Your first sentence is the correct one.

Hi Simon

Here is my 1st detailed paragraph:
The first year of period saw that the number of UK couples getting first married was around 3 times more than the number of remarriages, at about 340,000 and 80,000 respectively. After that, the figure for the two increased gradually from 1951,and reached a peak of nearly 400,000 first marriages and 130,000 remarriages.

Thank you very much for your work.
Best regards,

You've got the right idea UT.

Hi Simon

I have read your all advice and they are really helpfull.I have IELTS exam next month but I'm not sure about is it possible to get 7 band or not!

thank you for all your advice
regards
(from Iran)

Hi Nastaran,

It's definitely possible. I wish you the best of luck!

Hi Simon, here is my report

The line graph gives the information about the general trend of marriage in one country between 1951 and 2009.
It is clear that the total number of marriage couple fell considerably after 1971. The most dramatic decrease was seen in first marriages, while in the remarriages, there was a slow rise till 2000.
Before from 1970s, in spite of minor fluctuation, the number of first weddings showed an upward trend that was approximately 350.000 people. After 1971, there was a sharp decrease of first marriage for about 30 years. End of 2000, it fluctuated marginally, but it stayed just under 200 thousands.
The remarriage was responsible for around 80.000 people over two decades which it plateaued, before starting to rise gradually in 1971. However there was a slight rise, it did not influence significantly the total number of marriages.
As far as overall trends, the figures show a dramatic fall in the number of all marriages, whereas the number of marriage couple, who married second time, showed a small increase throughout the 3 decades.

Thanks in advance for your help

Thanks for sharing Emel.

I'm afraid I don't offer essay correction or scoring. If I did this, everyone would send me their essays.

I don't konw whether anyone will see my comment or not.I have one question that make me feel confused.Can I put in the no.of all marriages in paragraph 3 and 4 ,too?
Thanks to anyone who willing to answer my question =)

Hi Yap,

Yes, when I talk about the "detail" paragraphs, I mean paragraphs 3 and 4. This is where you should put the numbers.

Overall, the number of first marriages was much greater than that of remarriages throughout the whole time frame despite the dramatic decrease of the first figure and steady increase of the latter one over the whole period.

In 1951 the total amount of UK marriages stood at just over 400.000, where almost three quarters comprised of the number of first marriages about 330.000. For the next 20 years there was a slight increase in both figures for remarriages and first marriages by almost 30.000 and 60.000 respectively before reaching a peak at 400.000 in 1971 for the figure of first marriages.

Following the peak in 1971 the number of first marriages suddenly fell by nearly 200.000 and stood at just over the number of remarriages at approximately 190.000, almost twofold drop over four decades. On the contrary, the number of remarriages after 1971 remained steady with a slight fluctuation and finished at just under 100.000, almost 20% increase over the whole time frame.

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