Here are some sentences about this week's writing task 1 question. Can you find and correct the mistakes? Not all of them are grammar mistakes!
- There were 51 million pmt incidents than 35 million pmt injuries by bus.
- In general, both the figures for serious fatalities and injuries were dramatically higher for the demand response field.
- The number of people having injuries showed the more popular level than that of people having incidents.
- There is a somewhat difference between the number of people using heavy rail and light rail.
- The bar chart illustrates the amount of passengers who were been incidents and injuries travelled by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
- The bus, which is used by almost 80 people, tallied 66 injuries.
- In three types of rail, being lower than light rail, heavy rail surpassed commuter rail in the amount of incidents and injuries.
- Injuries by bus was went up approximately 4 times than commuter rail.
1. more than
2. high
3. show
4. delete the somewhat
5. delete the who
6. tally
7. surpass
8. delete the was
Posted by: like | June 09, 2012 at 10:41
HELLO SIMON SIR,
HOW IS THIS????????????
1-There were 51 million pmt incidents than 35 million pmt injuries by bus.
There was 51 million incidents and 35 million injuries per 100 million passenger miles traveled by heavy rail.
2-In general, both the figures for serious fatalities and injuries were dramatically higher for the demand response field.
Both the figures of incidents and injuries were dramatically high for those traveled by the demand response.
3-The number of people having injuries showed the more popular level than that of people having incidents.
The number of incidents was higher than injuries in all transportation.
4-There is a somewhat difference between the number of people using heavy rail and light rail.
There is a slight difference between the number of injuries per 100 million passenger miles traveled by the heavy rail and light rail.
5-The bar chart illustrates the amount of passengers who were been incidents and injuries travelled by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
The bar chart illustrates the number of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles traveled by five various means of transportation including demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail and commuter rail in 2002.
6-The bus, which is used by almost 80 people, tallied 66 injuries.
The number of injuries for every 100 million passenger miles traveled by bus was 66.
I may be wrong here!!!!!! but i don't think injuries are included in the incidents as your question is saying that out of 80 (76) incidents, there was 66 injuries. Actually, I am not clear about this.
7-In three types of rail, being lower than light rail, heavy rail surpassed commuter rail in the amount of incidents and injuries.
Among the three types of railways, the figure of incidents and injuries was lower for heavy rail and lowest for commuter rail as compared to the light rail.
8-Injuries by bus was went up approximately 4 times than commuter rail.
The number of injuries for every 100 million passenger miles traveled by bus was four times as high as the commuter rail.
WHAT DOES TEH NUMBER OF INJURIES OR INCIDENTS PER 100 MILLION PASSENGER MILES TRAVELED BY ..... MEANS? i AM MORE CONFUSED NOW?
In my view, it is the number of injuries or incidents for every 100 million passenger in every 100 miles traveled by ....... Am i right or wrong?
CONFUSED!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: nisha | June 09, 2012 at 12:03
Hi simon i took my ilets today. The question i writing task 2 almost goes this way - people doesnt need to know the latest news because theyre not related to them personally.reading the news is just a waste of time. To what extent do u agree or disagree? My introduction for this was - there are diff views about the importance of reading, watching and listening to news reports on tv, newspapers and radios but i strongly agree that news reports are very important . Then in the subsequent paragraphs, i wrote on the advantages and importance of news in our lives. My question is, did i give the correct point of view regarding my stand especially in the intro? Did i say my view correctly or i was off-point somehow because i should have written - "i completely disagree that knowing the latest news is not a waste of time...." Please let me know your expert opinion. Im quite worried and anxious because it seems that i didnt stick to the argument.
Posted by: Raine | June 09, 2012 at 12:50
1.There were 51 incidents and 35 injuries on buses.
2.In general, the figures for both incidents and injuries were significantly higher for the demand response field.
3.The number of people injured was at higher level than that of people having incidents.
4.There is a somewhat difference between the number of people experiencing incident and injured on heavy rail and light rail.
5.The bar chart illustrates the numberof passengers who had incidents and were injured when travelling by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
6.The bus tallied almost 80 incidents and 66 injuries.
7.In three types of rail, being lower than light rail, the numbers of incidents and injuries on heavy rail is higher than that of commuter rail.
8.Injuries on buses was approximately 4 times more than commuter rail.
I'm not very sure about the correction, because I don't know how to use some word such as surpass and tally.
Posted by: Ohya | June 09, 2012 at 14:05
1. There were 51 million pmt incidents and 35 million pmt injuries by bus.
2. In general, the figures for both serious fatalities and injuries were dramatically higher for the demand response field.
3. The number of people having injuries showed the less popular level than that of people having incidents.
4. There is somewhat of a difference between the number of people using heavy rail and light rail.
5. The bar chart illustrates the amount of passengers who had incidents and injuries travelled by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
6. The bus, which had almost 80 incidents, tallied 66 injuries.
7. In three types of rail, having been lower than light rail, heavy rail surpassed commuter rail in the amount of incidents and injuries.
8. Injuries by bus went up approximately 4 times more than commuter rail.
Posted by: Gwang-eun | June 10, 2012 at 04:06
There is a mistake in my answer above.
both serious fatalities and injuries -> both incidents and injuries.
Posted by: Gwang-eun | June 10, 2012 at 04:10
dear Simon
i got 8/7/7/7! just wanna thank you for all the work you've done for us, thank you for being selfless and sharing so many valuable and useful information regarding ielts with us! i really appreciate that!
wish you all the best!
Posted by: Joy | June 10, 2012 at 11:00
1. There were 51 million pmt incidents than 35 million pmt injuries by bus.
=>There were 51 incidents PMT and 35 injuries PMT by bus.
2. In general, both the figures for serious fatalities and injuries were dramatically higher for the demand response field.
=>In general, both figures of incidents and injuries were higher with Demand Response.
3. The number of people having injuries showed the more popular level than that of people having incidents.
=>The numbers of incidents were higher than those of injuries. (The chart does not show “number of people” but the number of incidents and injuries)
4. There is a somewhat difference between the number of people using heavy rail and light rail.
=>I don't understand this sentence well. But I would write something as following.
Light rail had much higher rate of incidents and slightly higher injuries number than heavy rail.
5. The bar chart illustrates the amount of passengers who were been incidents and injuries travelled by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
=>“the amount of passengers” is where both grammatical wrong and doesn't make any sense.
The bar chart illustrates numbers of incidents and injuries by five type of transport, namely demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail and commuter rail in the year 2002.
6. The bus, which is used by almost 80 people, tallied 66 injuries.
=>There is no need to have “the” in front of bus as it is not referring to specific bus. Also, the meaning of the sentence doesn't reflect to what it is shown on the chart.
I would write something as follow.
Bus was seen with 76 incidents and inflicted 66 injuries.
7. In three types of rail, being lower than light rail, heavy rail surpassed commuter rail in the amount of incidents and injuries.
=>“being lower than light rail” was supposed to be put at right after “heavy rail”. Also, the word “ amount” should be replaced by “numbers” as incidents and injuries are countable nouns. Finally, the use of “surpass” doesn't sound accurately.
8. Injuries by bus was went up approximately 4 times than commuter rail.
=>Injuries by bus were nearly 4 times of those by commuter rail.
Posted by: Ed | June 10, 2012 at 12:50
help me out!!1 i dont know where to post this question. So I am posting here. is this two question similar or completely different? I am confused. Please clear this out for me.
Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefiting them as individuals. agree or disagree?
Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
help me out please please please!!!!!!
Posted by: nisha | June 10, 2012 at 15:48
Hello simon please respond of my query
I just took the IELTS exam today. Although I think that the most answers I gave to the listening section were correct, something worries me a lot.
I know that you must write the first letter of some specific words like the name of countries in capital letters (e.g.; England) in the answer sheet, but I’m wondering that if you used capital letters for other words in this manner, it would be considered wrong? For example if is the answer is "red meat" or "fieldwork" and you write them as "Red Meat or Red meat" and " Fieldwork" will test markers consider them wrong answerers. I'm very worried about it because some of my answerers are written in this style and there was nothing about it in the instructions written in the exam booklet.
Does anyone know the answere?
Posted by: Karthik | June 10, 2012 at 16:08
1. There were 51 million pmt incidents by …. more than 35 million pmt injuries by bus.
2. In general, both the figures for serious fatalities and injuries were dramatically higher than ones for the demand response field.
3. The number of people having injuries showed the more popular level than that having incidents.
4. There is a somewhat difference between the number of people using heavy rail and light rail.
5. The bar chart illustrates the amount of passengers who were been incidents and injuries when travelling by five types of transport such as demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail, and commuter rail in 2002.
6. The bus, which was used by 76 people, tallied 66 injuries.
7. In three types of rail, being lower than light rail, heavy rail surpassed commuter rail in the amount of incidents and injuries.
8. Injuries by bus went up approximately 4 times more than commuter rail.
Posted by: hoami882 | June 10, 2012 at 17:39
CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:
Problems:
1. There were NOT 51 million incidents. There were 51 incidents per million passenger miles.
2. 'Incidents' does NOT mean 'serious fatalities'.
3. Don't use the word 'popular' when talking about negative things like injuries.
4. You can't say 'a somewhat difference'. Also, the figures don't show numbers of people USING the services.
5. "who were been incidents and injuries travelled" = bad grammar. Also, only use 'such as' when you give a few examples, not when you mention ALL of the items.
6. The bus was not USED by 80 people. Don't use 'tallied' in this way.
7. Strange sentence organisation - especially the use of "being lower than light rail".
8. Don't use 'went up' - you can't talk about increases or decreases when the items are different and no times are shown.
Corrections:
1. There were 51 incidents and 35 injuries per million PMT on buses.
2. In general, both the figures for incidents and injuries were dramatically higher for the demand response field.
3. The number of injuries was higher than that of incidents.
4. There was a small difference between the number of incidents and injuries on heavy rail and light rail.
5. The bar chart compares the number of passengers who were involved in incidents and injuries on five types of transport in 2002.
6. There were nearly 80 incidents and exactly 66 injuries on buses.
7. Of the three types of rail service, light rail services saw the highest number of incidents and injuries, followed by heavy rail and then commuter rail.
8. Injuries on buses WERE approximately 4 times higher than those on commuter rail services.
...
Congratulations Joy! Great scores.
Posted by: Simon | June 11, 2012 at 11:07
hello sir, i just want to clear some confusion. Can anybody help me?
3-i think the number of incidents was higher than that of injuries.
5-The bar chart illustrates the number of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles traveled by five various means of transportation including demand response, bus, heavy rail, light rail and commuter rail in 2002. i think this is too long. but i want to make sure is this correct?
8- you have used 4 times higher than but i want to ask you can we use four times as high as...?
hoping positive response from your side.......................
Posted by: nisha | June 11, 2012 at 18:03
Hi Simon my name us shama and am going to give my ielts this month and I bought ur book target band 7 but still I am confuse could u Plz give me some solutions thanks
Posted by: Shama Mehta | June 14, 2012 at 13:41
@ sharma mehta- don't worry. you just have to put on your full effort. It will take some time. Just PRACTICE, PRACTICE AND PRACTICE.
Don't lose hope.
@simon- can you give some suggestions about low/less/little/few/much/more in next session, if you got time? please. HOPING TO HEAR FROM OTHER AS WELL other than busy simon.
is there difference for the use of low and less? confused...!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by: nisha | June 15, 2012 at 07:57
Hi Shama,
Target 7 is not my book.
All of my best advice and materials are here in the lessons on the site. Keep practising!
...
Hi Nisha,
I'll try to cover those things in a lesson soon.
Posted by: Simon | June 15, 2012 at 11:07
dear sir simon:i am going to take ielts exam in this month.i bouth taqrget7 but in this book only tips.that good but i need practic.i confus where can find all type of parctic matireal.web side on enternet it take too much time.what can i do for fast prepration.thanx
Posted by: habib | June 15, 2012 at 21:04
Hi Habib,
Target 7 is NOT my book.
All of my best advice and materials are here in the lessons on the site.
Posted by: Simon | June 18, 2012 at 14:48