IELTS Writing Task 1: life cycle essay

Here's my full essay for the life cycle question:

The diagram illustrates the various stages in the life of a honey bee. We can see that the complete life cycle lasts between 34 and 36 days. It is also noticeable that there are five main stages in the development of the honey bee, from egg to mature adult insect.

The life cycle of the honey bee begins when the female adult lays an egg; the female typically lays one or two eggs every 3 days. Between 9 and 10 days later, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears.

During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. This moulting first takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days later, and again another 9 days later. After a total of 30 to 31 days from the start of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting stage, and in the space of only 4 days it reaches full maturity.

(169 words, band 9)

Comments

[Naveed Ahmed Alizai]

!!!!!Simon is simply the best!!!!!

[thangngovan]

Hi Simon
when i read your essays, i really feel that it is simple and clear to understand, good at coherence and cohesion. However, i know that a mistake in writing task 2 is using informal word. So could you tell me how can i avoid this mistake but also write a simple essay?
Could you answer me one more question about length of writing task 1. What number word of the task 1 essay is the most suitable?

[Rakesh]

Dear Simon,

First of all I really want to convey my gratitude towards you from the bottom of my heart to running this wonderful website which is providing a tremendous amount of knowledge and skills to the people who want to do well in their IELTS exam.

Actually, I have just received my IELTS score and I am very happy to share this with you, because I have learnt a lot from your lectures.

Well, my score is as follows:-

L - 7, R - 8.5, W-7.5, S - 8, O - 8

Regards,
Rakesh

[ellen]

dear simon,
i have been told that i can only stick to one side in opinion essay while both sides have to be considered in argument question. the question below is really popular and i even don't know which type is it.
In some countries, the parents expect children to spend long time on studying both in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?

[ellen]

Dear Simon,
I bought ur book some months ago. The ideas are excellent and thanks for that.
My score used to be 6 or 6.5 however i need 7. I took the latest test and only get 5.5 which really shocked me.
One examiner says pick one side and stick to it while another says mention both side otherwise u r task achievement will be low.
I am really confused and even don't know how to start now, pls give me some suggestion.
q.Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
this is one of the exam question. after introduction, i wrote a paragraph that training courses are beneficial for children , after that i wrote in another paragraph however it does not mean that all parents
should attend the course bcz blabla . then conclusion.
i m confused bcz someone says u should one opinion and stick to it, while others believe u should mention both parts otherwise u have not address the full task.
i don't know what is the right logic.
Academic Writing Task2: In some countries, the parents expect children to spend long time on studying both in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?
this is another question i met.
i wrote introduction, then body one---its bad for children mentally.body 2---bad for children physically. body3 bad for society. then conclusion.
is it wrong to write like this?is there other better ways?
q.People who read book for pleasure can be better developed in imagination and language skills than watching TV, to what extent you agree or disagree.
this is a v confusing question that i even don't know where to start.if i say i don't agree , do i need to mention other sides?

thx!!!

[Suman Chandra Das]

Hi Simon:)
After Reading your ebook, I feel really much better on writing task 2. Now in the same time I am wondering if you could suggest me or give some tricks like task 2 for writing task 1. It'd be really helpful for me to prepare task 1.
Hope to hear from you.
Have a great day:)
Reagard's
Suman

[Susan]

Hi Simon,

I really appreciate your effort on this website where I learn a lot for ielts writing. Regarding academic writing task 1, your example of life cycle is only one graph, however, in cambridge 6 test 3, there are two graphs which contain life cycle and process as a combination. It is a bit complicate to write an concised essay. Can you please give me some suggestions? Thanks a lot.

Susan

[Winnie]

Hi Simon,

Do you know if we have to put titles in the essays?

Thanks,

Winnie.

[dr ali ahmad]

Dear simon
your way of writing is really perfect.

Thanks

Dr ali ahmad

[Nati]

Ellen ,
You should choose only one side in this type of questions,for example,you agree with the statement,you should first write a clear introduction and should support your side with the examples or ideas in the following two paragraphs.Then you can rewrite your thesis or overall idea in the conclusion.
P.S. If you agree with the statement,don't mention why you don't disagree,just write and support yourself why you agree with the statement.

[Blixa]

Ellen,

I had the same doubt. But in the first example you provided, they are asking for positive and negative effects (pros and cons) so according to Simon, this wouldn't be a problem since you can write a pro paragraph and another paragraph against. Nevertheless, you are expected to state if you are for or against the topic, and reinforce your view in the paragraph which contains the opposite point of view from yours.

By doing this, your essay would be balanced and as far as remember while attending high-school and also an IELTS training, a balanced essay would be scored higher.

Hope it helps.

[Sumit]

Hi Simon,

Please suggest as this is my first writing answer..
How many band do you give to this answer(Please it will be very motivating and help me to know my writing approach).

The given diagram illustrates the complete life cycle of Honey bee.
We can see that the process take about 34-36 days to develop the fertile egg into mature honey bee.

The female bees usually lay 1 to 2 eggs every three days and these eggs hatch after 9-10 days.
Five day after hatching the nymph comes out of the egg shell. After 7 days it began to grow in size and after 9 days the nymph takes the shape of bee. During this period the nymph shed the old feathers, hair and skin 3 times for new growth.

After completing 31 days, it finally emerges as young adult bee and in next 4 days it reached to the maturity and fully developed as honey bee.

In conclusion, the life cycle of honey bee is very complex and full of rapid transformation.

[Sumit]

Hi Simon,

Please suggest as this is my first writing answer..
How many band do you give to this answer(Please it will be very motivating and help me to know my writing approach).

The given diagram illustrates the complete life cycle of Honey bee.
We can see that the process take about 34-36 days to develop the fertile egg into mature honey bee.

The female bees usually lay 1 to 2 eggs every three days and these eggs hatch after 9-10 days.
Five day after hatching the nymph comes out of the egg shell. After 7 days it began to grow in size and after 9 days the nymph takes the shape of bee. During this period the nymph shed the old feathers, hair and skin 3 times for new growth.

After completing 31 days, it finally emerges as young adult bee and in next 4 days it reached to the maturity and fully developed as honey bee.

In conclusion, the life cycle of honey bee is very complex and full of rapid transformation.

[Sumit]

Hi Simon,

Please suggest as this is my first writing answer..
How many band do you give to this answer(Please it will be very motivating and help me to know my writing approach).

The given diagram illustrates the complete life cycle of Honey bee.
We can see that the process take about 34-36 days to develop the fertile egg into mature honey bee.

The female bees usually lay 1 to 2 eggs every three days and these eggs hatch after 9-10 days.
Five day after hatching the nymph comes out of the egg shell. After 7 days it began to grow in size and after 9 days the nymph takes the shape of bee. During this period the nymph shed the old feathers, hair and skin 3 times for new growth.

After completing 31 days, it finally emerges as young adult bee and in next 4 days it reached to the maturity and fully developed as honey bee.

In conclusion, the life cycle of honey bee is very complex and full of rapid transformation.

[anita]

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[Sujitha]

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[Simon]

Sujitha,

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[arnoldzhen]

This diagram illustrates how bees start from an egg to adult bee take place.

It is clear that the whole process involves five steps and takes up around 34 to 36 days. The nymph has to moult three times as it grows.

First, female bees lay 1 to 2 eggs every three days. Then the life of a new bee start from egg hatching. It usually needs 9 to 10 days before eggs turn into small bees. Secondly, new small bees grow for another 5 days as they become larger. At the third and fourth steps, similar growths are seen after 7 and 9 days respectively. They shed or lose their old features like hair or skin.

As a result of step 4, young adult bees emerge. Finally, with another 4 days, they are fully matured. Female bees could give birth to new eggs and the new round of life cycle begins.

[Mohit]

Never write "we can see that" its wrong to write in task 1. You will never get good band if you say We can see that.

[smarty kaushik]

good evening Simon Sir
i have a doubt regarding writing overall whether we should write overall in process chart or not.
Awaiting your prompt response.
Thank You very much