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July 10, 2013

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Dear Simon
I attempted academic module 2 times then secured 6.5 at first time(discuss both views essay type)then 6 in second time(to what extent do you agree and disagree essay essay type). However,task-1 was nearly the same in terms of difficulty.Personally i think that,second type as you mention above is seems to be more difficult to organize content and convey reliable arguments to support the presented view.IS IT RIGHT?
How can i improve my writing? Please help me.

HI
SIMON,
personally, i think that,second type of essay as you mention above seems to be more difficult to organize content and convey reliable answer to support the presented views.Is it right?
I scored 6.5(on first type)
6.0(on second type)
Could you suggest me how can i improve my writing?

Hi Simon
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Hi Simon,
For the first type of essay I would organise my essay as:
1st para - short introduction
2nd para- discuss first view begin with on the one hand
3rd para- discuss second view begin with on the other hand
4th para- conclusion and my own opinion
For second type of essay if I agree/disagree:
1st para - introduction and my opinion whether agree or disagree
2nd para - Lines on my view
3rd para - real life examples about my view
4th para - conclusion
If partially agree/disagree:
1st para - intro and say i partially agree with topic
2nd para - discuss 1st view
3rd para -discuss 2nd view
4th para - conclusion and again state my opinion.


For the Discussion question:-

Introduction: Short intro and stating my openion

BP1:discuss the first idea about government should finance creative artists and add supporting ideas/examples

BP2:discuss the second idea about other resources of financing such as private/donation/special funding authorities

BP3:State my openion and support it with examples and supporting ideas.

Conclusion:Short conclusion and restate my openion.


For Opinion question:

Introduction: Short intro and stating my openion-Disagree with that statement

BP1:Supporting idea No 1. Art is important to a countire's history and furture+ Example+Nopel Prize

BP2:Supporting idea No 2.Art is important for individuals/society .Importance of discovering artistic talents+ Example

Conclusion:Short conclusion and restate my openion.

Hi Simon,
I like this topic. I'm having this problem and I would to understand the difference between the two.in my opinion, In summary, the first type requires to cover both,while the second one is either one.below are the outlines of the essays:
Simon, pls correct should the approacch is not structure:
1)
First question:
Intro:
To cover both intro +state my opinion
Para 1: Discuss opinion 1,
Para 2: Disuss opinion 2
Para 3: Explain my opinion
Conclusion
2) Second question
Intro:
To state my agreement or disagreement
Para 1: support point for agreement \disagreement ,
Para 2: support point for agreement \disagreement
Conclusion
Many thanks

guys, make sure to send your essays as attachments. Use MS word...that should help you check spelling errors and spacing. I do not do GT letters.

For 1st question:

1st Para - Introduction without my opinion.

2nd Para - Explanation about how Government can help to artist with it's benifits.

3rd Para - Explanation about how alternative sources can help with it's benifits.

4th para - Conclusion with my opinion.

2nd Question:

1st Para - Introduction with my opinion - agree or disagree.

2nd Para - 1st reason to support my opinion with explanation and example.

3rd para - 2nd reason to support my opinion with explanation and example.

4th Para - Small explanation about - Government can utilize the revenue generated from art for hospitals or schools or any other services.

5th Para - Conclusion + restate my opinion.


Hi Simon,

Is it ok to use personal pronounce in task 2 such as "We...", "..us...", "Our..."?

Thank you very much

Hi Simon & all,

I tried to write draft

---Discussion version----
**Intro**
People have different views whether government support creative artist by using revenue.While some good argument in favor of supporting artist by nation,I believe that artists should be given financial support by individual.

*1st para**Advantages
help development of culture,
marverous art work entartain people and gives happiness.
attract visitor and encourage tourism

*2st para** opposite point
Difficult to select artist receiving support
Possibility to abuse money by artist
Attractive art can be fund by individual using internet

**Conclusion**
To conclusion, I belive it is better artist would be receive the fund not by government but by their supporter who loves their art work.It becoming more easy to using internet


---Opinion question version----
**Intro**
There are good argument both for and against government should support art, however I agree with opinion that government should not use money to further art as for several reason.

*1st para** reason why that
Some people willing to pay money to merverous art work , but it's not all.
Government should use revenue to more public problem.

*2nd para** reason2 and alternative way
Difficult to select person who receiving the fund.
Great work is consisted great idea,no matter the amount of fund.Artist can gather the fund from individual to publish their art work online.

**Conclusion**
For the reasons mentioned above,I disagree with government support art using revenew ,but I believe artist can be receive fund by individual.

Thank you

Dear Simon

I want to ask in writing task 2, if the question asks me whether this is "a good thing or a bad thing",and I kind of wanna say both because I can not think enough reasons for either "Good"or"Bad". how should write the intro? can I say "this trend is with advantages and disadvantages"? I got this topic from a real IELTS exam topic in AU as flowing:
today, young people are using mobile phones extensively. In your opinion, the popularity of mobile phones (cell phones) is a good or bad development?

Dear Simon
I got an topic like this
"Today, young people are using mobile phones extensively. In your opinion, the popularity of mobile phones (cell phones) is a good or bad thing ?"
Can I say it is both? in my introduction I wrote there are benefits and drawbacks for this trend, is it ok to write like this ?

many thanks

I would have thought the same structure for both kind of essays. So, to give my opinion in the introduction it is necessary to say "I agree, I partially agree"? Or there is another way, more elegant, to give my opinion?

hi Antoine,

In response to your question, you can find answer yourself very easily by just reading some of the essays in this website. And you can conclude yourself.

good luck!

hello Friends
my IELTS exam will be held on 27 july ...
please give me advice on writing task and reading task ...
I want to get 6.5 band overall and not less than 6 band in any module

Can anyone please send me some topics and eassy materials on my email id
mozy0202@gmail.com

Dear Simon sir
Headsoff to you for such advices

Hey Manoj,

Best of luck..

Even I am also going to appear on 27th July GT - IELTS.

I need 7 in each..looks tough but finger crossed:-)

Trupti

Hello All

Manoj and Trupti i am also going to appear on 27th July and I need 6.5 in writing and my preparation is not enough could you send me material if you have arranged thanks manuvirk2008@gmail.com

Some people believe that the government should stop spending money on the arts. Instead they should use this money to improve vital services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
____________________________________________

I disagree with this idea that the government should stop provide financial support to the arts. Instead I believe that the government should play a pivotal role in supporting all types of arts and raise the awareness of the significance of the arts to the whole society.

The main reason why I think that the arts should be supported by the government is the social importance. No one can deny that all kinds of arts are a form of pleasure and enjoyment by itself .For example music arouses emotions in a way that words cannot do. In addition, Novelists and poets are recognized locally and internationally because of their great contribution to improve the sense of taste of literature arts such as Naguib Mahfouz-The Egyptian Novelist- who was granted Nobel Prize and became a role model for all story writers in Egypt and the entire Arab countries.

A second reason why I believe that the government authorities should spend money on the arts is the cultural significance. Traditional art is a symbol of a nation’s history; it expresses the culture and customs of the country and connects us to the past and form part of the cultural identity. For example, The Egyptian Pyramids, which are considered one of the World’s Seventh Wonders, is a unique destination for all tourists from all over the world. It turned to be an icon of Egypt in the minds and hearts of all people in the world.

Finally, from an economical perspective, museums and historical sightseeing can be a great source of income to any country. The first-world class nations such as France and Spain pay close attention to their historical treasure because they know it generates a lot of income to the country. For example, millions of tourists and visitors travel to the “Louvre museum” just to see the amazing” Mona Lisa portrait”.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I think that the government authorities should dedicate a decent amount of money to spend on improving and maintaining the arts as it produces several social, cultural, economic benefits to the country.


Hi Simon,

I have few clarifications while writing task 2. Request you to please clarify

- Can't we use "ing" forms while writing task2.
- Is it okay if we use Firstly, Secondly, finally while writing task2.
- While writing, which tense we need to follow, is it future tense?

Hi Simon. I would like to ask for your advice on how to handle this topic:
" The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothing and comsumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement"
Thank you so much!

Hi Simon

I have one question, can I write my own opinion in the introduction in discussion topic?

Many thanks!

(1)
The first question is about discussing both views, so I may fist discuss why artists should be funded by alternative sources (1. most artists can earn money and support themselves by selling their works; 2. Government should focus more on public sectors, eg. education and healthcare.

Then, explain why government should provide support to artists in the next paragraph (the importance of artists: 1. cultural importance; 2. they provide enjoyment to the public; 3. Prevent talent from going overseas, etc)

Conclusion: While I accept that artists can support themselves through alternative sources, I personally believe that the government should provide financial support to them in order to create a more interesting society.

(2)
Disagree with the statement and provide three main reasons.
1. Cultural significance (Tradition preservation)
2. Provide enjoyment to the public
3. Prevent talent from going overseas and help the industry to remain strong

Hi Carriie,

I would like to thank you for your great,logical outline and ideas for the 2 essays.Can you have a look on my essay and get me any feedback.

ALSO IF you are interested we can exchange writing topics by e-mail.If yes, let me know .

Thank you,
Soha

hi soha im willing to get in touch with you. :) perhaps we could exchange thoughts and comments on each other's writings, especially for task 2. My email is tinnitusmedia30@yahoo.com

Hi guys, I have been a silent reader of this forum. I really admire the effort put in by all memmbers and simon.Recently I attempted academic module and failed to achieve required band score.Now I am preperaing myself for a another go in couple of months.I wish best of luck for all memmbers appearing for test in coming days.Thank you

Hi Simon,
I would be organizing my essays as below. Could you please give me some comments?

Discussion question:
1. Introduction + My opinion: Government should give financial support.
2. The point of opposite side: Money should be used for vital development for more people to get benefits.
3. The point of my side: Disagree opposite side because the art works can be part of country development for tourism. Example is Austria's support on Musicians and Wien becomes a famous city for tourists who love music.
4. Conclude my opinion: Government should fund artists.

Opinion question:
1. Introduction + My opinion: Government should give financial support.
2. The 1st point of my side: Art works can be part of country vital development as it can boost tourism. Example is Austria's support on Musicians and Wien becomes a famous city for tourists who love music.
3. The 2nd point of my side: Money funded by alternative sources would lead to commercialized art products and prohibit creativity. Example is even Beethoven was criticized by his teacher that his symphonies were not suitable for selling to the rich people.
4. Conclude my opinion: Government should fund artists.


Thanks, Vivian

when we write a task 2 question If we express ourself the formate of essy might become in formal. for example, if we mention I believe rather to wirte it if belive.

can you give some information about plaes.

Hi Simon,

Please give me feedback on the following writing:

Inner Art expression to public in an understandable format is an extremely complex task and seeks heightened creativity. Painters and musicians contribute significantly to the development of a nation through their creativity quotient. I personally support the idea of governments offering financial support to artists who bring out their soulful creativity in the form of paintings or through music.

History has witnessed a number of incidents where fine artists, whether painters or musicians, have taken their nations to a level of international prestige through their work. For instance, Paris is renowned for its artistic heritage. By offering financial assistance, the governments are allowing the national youth to be creative and step into the world of uniqueness. This financial assistance brings more focus towards artistic careers in the national youth. In addition to it, an elevated financial support reduces the requirement of these artists to work sideways, in order to earn small amount of money to support their livelihood and allows them to focus entirely on their creativity.

On the other hand, it can be a challenging task for the governments to identify which artists genuinely deserve the financial assistance. This financial help from governments can wrongly inspire people to adopt such creative careers, even in absence of real inclination towards these arts. Moreover, people can start exploiting this financial help by numerous indecent ways in lack of specified control over release of financial assistance.

There are benefits if government's offer the discussed financial assistance to creative artists, but the process of releasing this support must be carefully drafted. It must be ensured that the financial support reaches the right artists only and people should not be able to steal from the government through this support program. The financial support would help governments in identifying and training the most appropriate regional talent to contribute to nation's cultural and social heritage.

People have different views about who should pay for creative arts. Although there are many good arguments in favor of governments should pay for creative arts, however, many people argue that individual should arrange financial support for creative arts. In this essay, I will precisely discuss both the aspects before giving my opinion.
On the one hand, most of the experts- educationalists and researchers- profoundly believe that governments should pay for creative arts. They have got a lot of stance in their support. In the first place, it certainly encourages artists to do good things for country. Many artists throughout the world have done lots of imperative works for their country. In Malaysia, for example, there are numerous architectures and statues which make cities very beautiful and attractive. Besides, these artworks represent culture, heritage and history of country to others through their arts. Not only this, it can be way of earning which helps artists to survive in life and it also can remove unemployment rate from the country.
There are, however, many think-tanks and pragmatists who do not agree with the above concepts and ideas. They firmly admit that artworks should arrange their financial support for their creative arts by themselves and governments should not pay for them. They have own prominent logic to support their views. Firstly, governments have many duties for general people. Every government has to ensure good food, health, proper education and housing for country people. In addition, many people, for instance, in India and Somalia are illiterate and poor, they do not get sufficient food and housing amenities and facilities to live. So, governments should address these problems first instead of giving support for curative arts.
In conclusion, after analyzing both the aspects, I do admit that government should pay for creative arts for the sake and the betterment of the country after solving basic needs of general people. I thing it certainly can bring far reaching impact for the country and nation as well.

hi Simon,
How are you? Are Chinese-featured ideas that are quite different from western-perspectives allowed in the essay?

Please comment on my writing:

"The given graph shows the main sources for the USA in 1980 and 1990"

SAMPLE ANSWER:
The charts illustrate the information about the principal energy resources in the USA in two separate years including 1980 and a decade later.
The thing that stands out is oil was the major power source in the two years while hydroelectric power was the opposite.
More specifically, oil supplied the largest percentage of energy in 1980, being at 40% in 1980, which declined by 9% ten years later. The second most popular energy in 1980, natural gas, also saw a dip in 1990 though it was only a minimal one, from 26 to 25%, respectively.
It is also noticeable that coal was responsible for just over a forth of the total energy in 1990 despite its being a little bit lower in a decade before, at 22%.
In addition, hydroelectric and nuclear power produced the least amount of power, totalling 10% in 1980 and just a bit higher in 1990, at 15%.

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