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January 09, 2015

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1.My main goal is to become a doctor
2.i hope to achieve this goal by hardworking asap
3. Even though, the steps are extremely challenging, but i am looking forward to get over them
4.i am required to get a high score for applying the scholarship
5.Being specialist in my own field has always been my priority

1.My main goal is to be a doctor.
2. "as soon as possible" at the end of the sentence. =>...as soon as possible.
3. "Although" don't come together with "but". So just use one of them.
4. Apply for sth. => Apply for a scholarship.
5. ...comes always first. (not very)

I want to be a doctor

I hope I will achieve my goal through hard-work

Although the steps to become a doctor are harder but I m looking forward to face them

I have to get a high score in order to apply for scholarship

Getting in to my profession which I desire is always my first priority

1- My main goal is to become a doctor
2- I hope to achieve this goal by hardworking as soon as possible
3- Inspite the steps are difficult , but iam looking forward to get over them
4- I have to get a high score ,so I can apply for scholarship
5- Being profession in my field has always been my periority

1-My main goal is assign as a doctor.
2- I hope I achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
3-Although the steps are hard but I am looking forward to IT
4- I have to get a high score in order to apply scholarship.
5-Getting in my profession comes always very first.

1. My main goal is to be a doctor.
2. I hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by working harder.
3. Although the steps are complex, I am looking forward to them.
4. I have to get a high score in order to apply for the scholarship.
5. Getting into my profession always comes first.

1 My main goal is to be a good doctor.
2 Through hard working i will achive this goad nearly in future.
3 Even though steps are very hard but i will looking forward to them.
4 I must have to get enhance score to apply for scholarship.
5 Getting in to my profession always comes first.

1. My goal is to be a good doctor.
2. I will achive it in future through hard working.
3. Even though steps seems to be hard but i will look forward to them.
4. I need to get good result to apply for scholarship.
5. Getting in to my profession always comes first.


1- My main goal is to be assigned as a doctor.
(That was my mistake)
2- I hope that I will achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
3- Although, these steps are hard, I am looking forward to passing them.
4- I need a high score in "noun" to apply for scholarship.
5- Getting into my main profession comes always my first priority.

My main goal is to become a doctor.
I want to achieve this goal by hardworking,asap.
Even though its very challenging but i want to achieve them anyhow.
I need to get a high score to apply for scholorship.
Getting into my proffession is my first priority.

1.my main goal is to "be" a doctor.

2.i hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by "work hard"

3.Although the steps are hard "yet" i am looking forward to them

4. i "am to" get high score in order to apply scholarship.

5. it is my first priority to engage in my profession.

Through hard work or by hard work..hard working is an adjective.

To be assigned as a doctor?...whats this
To become a doctor is more natural..why should we use pompous words while we dont know how to use them


My main goal is to work as a doctor.
I do hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
Although the doing this job is hard but I am looking forward to them.
I have to get a high score in order to get scholarship.
Getting in to my profession always comes first.

1. My main objective / goal is to be able to work as a doctor. / I aspire to be a doctor. / My main goal is to work as doctor.

2. I hope, by working hard, I can achieve / accomplish this goal as soon as possible. / By working hard, I hope, I can achieve my goal soon.

3. Although, the steps are hard, I am still looking forward / committed to achieve them.

Although and but are not used in the same sentence.
(( although, I love to use " although" and " but" together in the same sentence))

4. I need to get a higher score in order to apply for / get scholarship. / It requires to get a higher score to get a scholarship.

5. Getting into my profession is my first priority. / I would prefer to work in my own profession.

Although, the steps are hard, I am looking forward to it.

I need to get a HIGH score...

1. my main goal is to be a doctor.

2. I hope to achieve this goal by redoubling my effort as soon as possible.

3. Although the steps are hard, I am looking forward to them.

4. I need to get a high score in order to apply for scholarship.

5. Getting in to my profession comes always the first.

Hi Simon,
I sat for today's exam in melbourne australia , academic version. I want to share writing task two question.

Most of the organizations are run by older people, some people think that it might be better to give leadership role to younger people. To what extent you agree or diasgree.

I used my own words to describe the idea of question.

And about listening, i believe i practiced its first part at home from cambridge book
Itis discussion abt fruit picking job details.

I did my writing best ever after following the advice of Simon and i recommend all you guys to work hard on these techniques.
I spent $4,000 for preparing exams with different tutorS but nothing happened. I decided to self study and follow this great web site. Today, iam so happy with my performance. I wish, i could utilize that money travel to England to prepare test in Simon"s class.
Thanks

1. My main goal is to assign as a doctor.
-> My main goal is to become a doctor.
2. I hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
-> Through hard work, I hope to achieve this goal ASAP.
3. Although the steps are hard but I am looking forward to them.
-> Although the steps are difficult, I am looking forward to get over them.
4. I have to get a high score in order to apply scholarship.
-> I have to get high score to apply for scholarship.
5. Getting in to my profession comes always very first.
-> Getting into my profession always comes first.

My main goal is to assign as a doctor.
- to assign = to become
I hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
- by hard working = by working hard
Although the steps are hard but I am looking forward to them.
- the steps are hard= the steps have a lot of obstacle
I have to get a high score in order to apply scholarship.
- i need to have a high score to apply scholarship

Getting in to my profession comes always very first.
=> getting into my profession always comes first

CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

First, I'll explain the problem with each sentence:

1. You can't say "assign as a doctor".
2. We don't say "by hard working".
3. We don't use "although" and "but" together.
4. After "apply" we need the word "for".
5. We don't say "very first".

Here are my suggested answers:

1. My main goal is to become a doctor / qualify as a doctor / work as a doctor.

2. I hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by working hard.

3. Although the steps are hard, I am looking forward to them.

4. I have to get a high score in order to apply for a scholarship.

5. Getting into my profession is my main priority.

These are my suggestions. Other alternatives may also be correct.

Thanks for your positive words Princess chopra. Good luck!

wow.i am close with your answer. as i answered above Simon.haha thanks


My main goal is to work as a doctor.
I do hope to achieve this goal as soon as possible by hard working.
Although doing this job is hard but I am looking forward to them.
I have to get a high score in order to get scholarship.
Getting in to my profession always comes first.

Hello everyone !!! I am started studying IELTS ..Can everyone advice me? How get higher at Speaking section? I mean what i should use in my speech with a view of getting higher score ?

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