IELTS Writing Task 1: a real process description

You might find it useful to read a real process description from this website about insulation manufacturing. The extract below looks very similar to a paragraph from an IELTS essay!

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. The raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. The smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. The droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. The mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

Task:
Can you find the passive verbs in the paragraph above? Can you improve the paragraph by adding some sequencing words (firstly, then etc.)?

Comments

[Jing]

Recycled, melted, created, filtered, cleaned, spun, added, hardened, cut, required.....

Thank you very much, Simon

[Mi]

1. The passive verbs in the paragraph:
- recycled
- melted
- filter
- cleaned
- spun
- added
- hardened
- cut
- required
2. For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. At the first stage of the process, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. Then, the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. After that, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Next, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.
Thank you, Simon

[Atif]

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. First of all, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. At the same time, the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. In the next stage, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Then, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. After that, the mineral wool is ((then)) hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

PS. In the picture I couldn't see the process of filtering the smoke and flue gases, so I have used " at the same time." Is that alright?

[deepa]

are melted
is filtered
are cleaned
are spun
are added
is cut

[Farhan]

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[Trang Le]

1. The passive verbs are:
- recycled
- melted
- filtered
- cleaned
- spun
- added
- hardened
- cut
2.For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process.In the first place, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. After that, the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact.Then, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Next, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Lastly, The mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[Cincocielos]

are melted
is filtered
are cleaned
are spun
are added
is then hardened
is cut

[la violette]

are melted
is filtered
are cleaned
are spun
are added
is hardened
is cut

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. Firstly, The raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. The smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. Following that the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. In this stage small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[mahdi]

Dear Simon,

Thank you very much for your useful lesson.
I have a question regarding the word "between" used in the essay. It is introduced that : "The raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C."
Would you please tell us how should we use this word in our essays. I think it could be ' between 1300 and 1500" not "between 1300 to 1500".
I think we can write "The row materials are melted in a furnace at a high temperature, typically in a range from 1300 to 1500"

Regards,
Mahdi

[Tayfun Kurt]

Hi Simon,

- recycled
- melted
- filtered
- cleaned
- spun
- added
- hardened
- cut
Best Regards,
Tayfun

[Simon]

Hi Mahdi,

Good point! I recommend that you always write "between... and".

You might see / hear native speakers occasionally using "between... to", but I'd say that "and" is better.

[Charanjit]

Hiee Simon... M following ur blogs.. It's really helpful for me.. I want to ask you one question that WHAT IS THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN OVERVIEW AND CONCLUSION IN WRITING TASK 1.. I have heard one webinar that overview is necessary to be in the structure of task 1 of Academic writing. I hope you would reply me
Would be really greatful

[Son Vu]

Passive verbs:
recycled, melted, created, filtered, cleaned, spun,added, hardened, cut, required

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. First of all, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. The smoke created during this process is then filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. After that, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. Next, the mineral wool is hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. At the final step, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[Rosie]

Passive verbs in the sentence is:
- The raw materials are melted
- is filtered
- are cleaned
- are added
- hardened
- cut
For glass wool, firstly the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. Secondly, The raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. During the process,The smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. The droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. In addition, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[sjm]

Charanjit

An overview is required in Task 1. There is no requirement for a conclusion, so don't do one. If you don't know what an overview is, look at Simon's samples and it is the second paragraph.

[Sumit]

Dear Sir,

I use lots of connectors in writing task 1(However, On the other hand, similarly, Whereas) and it sometimes puzzle me. It is a good practice to use these connectors. How much these impact the scoring. My requirement is 7 band each.

[Sumit]

Dear Sir,

Also, please guide as do we need to present all the information of graph. I try to cover mostly all the figures and exceed the 20 minutes timer. Also, I am trying to perform the writing task through 9 sentence as per your approach.