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1- Opening paragraph:
Over the past few decades feminism , which is the most famous social trend towards women's equal rights to men, has caused to even more fathers take the chief responsibility of children at home. Also even less physically-demanding occupations have influenced this situation considering the different capabilities of genders. The disadvantages outweigh the positive results from the upbringing aspect and also by considering country's economic growth.

Thanks a lot Simon.
That was a good challenge for me.
I wrote this, I agree that it is a little long, but I couldn't squeeze it more. I welcome any comment and suggestion, particularly from you sjm.


These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

It is true that due to different changes in world’s trend towards the new millennium, now more men prefer to be a homemaker rather than doing a job out of their house. There are several factors involved in this tendency and I believe it can be seen as an advantage.

There are some reasons why more men want to stay home. In modern world more women have a better chance to extend their academic and social prospect, so that they might have better job opportunities than men and this can keep men away from working outside of their home. The better gender equality sometimes offers higher salaries for women than men and it would be more convenient for family to only one person income. Furthermore, considering managing the household as a full-time job, somebody should take responsibility for this task and this can be the male partner.

Personally, I believe that being a man homemaker can have numerous benefits for both man and his family. The main advantage of man housekeeping is his direct contribution on nurturing of the kids. As an example, I learned most of household skills such as gardening, doing groceries and plumbing in years when my father was away from his work due to some health issues. Another development for family while man is at home is the fact that they start to learn some skills such as cooking, sewing or taking care of the children. On the other side, there are also abilities that women can learn while working out of the home. These abilities can vary from changing the car’s flat tire to making a financial decision on family’s mutual fund.

In conclusion, there are many reasons to argue why more men choose homemaking as a full-time job nowadays, and it seems to me it is a good decision.

Hi Aria,

I have a question for you...Haven't you taken IELTS exam yet??? Your English is pretty good...

The main reason for this trend might be that in today's society men and women can have the same job opportunities as women are more likely to find decent jobs as men due to the increasing gender equality in today's job market. This allows women to find a job outside and support their family with the salary they earn.Also, today more women have got the chance to receive higher education, which allows them to develop their knowledge in the fields of studies that were traditionally dominated by males only in the past. For example, we can see more women working in industries such as banking, engineering and Information technology as women are well-equipped with key skills to compete with men in these job markets and many of them earn a higher salary than their husband do.

In today’s society, we see a rise of male parenting while women are responsible for bread earner. There are various reasons that cause this trend, and I believe that the benefits of this development are overwhelming.

There are several reasons involved in this trend. To begin with, during the period of pregnant, some husbands began to quit their jobs so that they could stay home taking care of their wife. In other words, they had decided to sacrifice their career to devote all the time to their families. Furthermore, high income of females is another factor that causes men to become a stay-home father. These days, females share the same gender equality in workplace, and this allow them to access to higher position and earn decent salaries. As a result, sufficient income can well cover family expenses, so men could better devote time and energy to parenting instead of worrying about money issue.

The primary benefit in relation to this trend is that father can nurture children the ability of handy skills. For example, Gardening, fixing household equipment as well as changing a flat tire are the tasks mainly undertaken by men. Therefore, growing up with father can grab the opportunity to learn these useful skills, which will be also beneficial in their future life. Moreover, males give children more freedom in many ways than their counterparties. In many Asian families, for example, women will force their children to attend certain courses and tutorials for improving academic performances, while men are more likely to allow children to pursue their own interests and hobbies such as sports and music. If children are given more freedom to discover their own passion, they will become more confident and live with more optimism.

In conclusion, several factors contribute to the causes of rising male parenting, and I believe that it is a positive trend.

Can anyone please leave comments on my above essay.

is it possible to get a band 7 for that one.

Hello Ieltsbuddy,
In my opinion, I think your essay is good enough to get a band 7.

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

With the changing trend of lifestyle, parenting is also amongst the one that has significantly rehabilitated. It is nowadays common in families where mothers are breadwinners for the family and her role is played by the father in upbringing children. There are several reasons of this transformation and I believe it has positive consequences for the whole family.
There are various causes of fathers staying at home and nurturing their kids. Firstly, women in the modern society are offered higher salaries due to gender equality based on their higher qualifications, as compared to men. This truly benefits the family and switching the job is wiser rather than limiting the basic expenses in routine. Secondly, independence of women in this culture has helped her in dealing the outside matters more efficiently and patiently instead of being aggressive like men.
Considering the above explanation, I believe this new trend is actually creating a profound influence not only in the societies but among the families as well. By doing the household activities and looking after children, men can realize the arduous job of his wife that can make him more respectable towards her. This leads to a strong relationship among them that positively affects the children as well. Learning each other tasks is yet another progressive factor that arises by exchange of jobs. For instance, cooking, washing, spending within the budget are important skills learnt by fathers staying home.
In conclusion, I personally support this newly formed trend of fathers in up bringing their children while staying at home. This is truly helpful in propagation of equality among all members of the society.

hi please tell me is it a band 7 essay .. my 3rd attempt on 28th march

IN my opinion it is a 6.5 essay can not reach 7

I try to solve first one by following your two-part question and 13 sentence arrangement.

It is true that mothers of children are doing outdoor jobs instead of rearing their child and this responsibility is only for father. Fathers are becoming a vital part in managing home for a range of reasons, and I think this development has both advantage and disadvantage.
There are many causes for such a change. Firstly, women are doing good results in their academic as a result, they are getting more expected job in competition with man. Secondly, at present, most of the organizations prefer women as a colleague because they are more professional and responsible to their work. For example, if you look at the defense sector women are showing much better performance (n) and efficiency (n) than their men counterpart. Finally, our government gives them (women) equal right for participation of any development activity and this helps to open the door of women enrolment in every sector than previous.
I believe women empowerment has both advantage and disadvantage. It contributes to increase our national economy and decrease social discrepancy among people. It also influences a positive impact of their children’s development as a good member of a society because of their mother is more educated and conscious than before. By contrast, we have heard that some children go to astray due to their mother’s lack of responsibility to their child though their parents stay at home. For instance, if mothers are busy all day long then their child fill lonely and don’t share all the matter with their parents and as a result they do offensive work in their life.
In conclusion, women participation in job sector is increasing for many reasons and it has both positive and effects on child. [word 283]

Here are my results after searching on internet:
1. Stay-at-home father.
The reasons: 1) High unemployment rate in the time of recession; 2) The father want to take care the family at home; 3) Staying at home due to illness or disability; 4) Men stays at home by choice; these reveals a structure change in gender roles in family and at work.
Negative development: 1) on my opinion, a husband is responsible for his family’s needs; 2) this trend show economic condition is not getting better; 3) I think children should spent more time with their mother, because naturally a mother has better parenting skill; 3) In some culture, it is a shame if the father just stays at home while the mother works outside.

2. Whether children that under six or seven years old should be allowed to stay at home or to go to school.
Advantage of going to school sooner: 1) children will learn how to get along with their peers; 2) children are taught with more language skills and a broader knowledge base; 3) to introduce the idea that learning can be fun; 4) prepare children spent more time away from their parents.
Advantage of staying at home: 1) staying and playing at home would strengthens the closeness between children and parents; 2) parents can teach the children individually; 3) eradicate boredom due learning is specifically tailored to individuals; 4) parents can provide safe learning environment, the children are not exposed to teasing, bullying, negative peer pressure, bad influences, and in some cases, bad or misbehaving teachers.

Here are my results after searching on internet:
1. Stay-at-home father.
The reasons: 1) High unemployment rate in the time of recession; 2) The father want to take care the family at home; 3) Staying at home due to illness or disability; 4) Men stays at home by choice; these reveals a structure change in gender roles in family and at work.
Negative development: 1) on my opinion, a husband is responsible for his family’s needs; 2) this trend show economic condition is not getting better; 3) I think children should spent more time with their mother, because naturally a mother has better parenting skill; 3) In some culture, it is a shame if the father just stays at home while the mother works outside.

2. Whether children that under six or seven years old should be allowed to stay at home or to go to school.
Advantage of going to school sooner: 1) children will learn how to get along with their peers; 2) children are taught with more language skills and a broader knowledge base; 3) to introduce the idea that learning can be fun; 4) prepare children spent more time away from their parents.
Advantage of staying at home: 1) staying and playing at home would strengthens the closeness between children and parents; 2) parents can teach the children individually; 3) eradicate boredom due learning is specifically tailored to individuals; 4) parents can provide safe learning environment, the children are not exposed to teasing, bullying, negative peer pressure, bad influences, and in some cases, bad or misbehaving teachers.

Hi,

tried to take other side(disagree with men staying at home).

Housekeeping which traditionally has been female-dominated now increasingly taken by men . While some may consider this trend as a positive development, I see some disadvantages into it ,as will now be argued.
The major reason for increasing of men houseworking is economic crisis seen in the whole world. More and more men are dismissed every year ,forcing them stay at home and taking care of their children, while their wives turn to breadwinners. Thanks to the modern world, women now are highly educated and fully qualified, while in most cases recruiters find them less paid employees, making them as favourite targets for employers. This leaves women with less time to take care of their children and put this old-fashioned responsibility on men shoulders.

There are some problems inherent in men house working . First, some believe that the main women responsibility is upbringing children. They would more likely have less time to set for their children if they had have other professions. Besides, some careers are really proper for certain genders. Upbringing children, for example, among those jobs that I think women are dealing better with than men do, as this job requires them to stay long hours at home which I feel men are not good at it. Raising children also requires a lot of patience which women as mothers inherently have more than men do.

In conclusion, much of this reversal of traditional gender roles is relied heavily in the economic recession and changed approach toward employment which world is now experienced, but I don't think that this trend leads to benefits to a society as whole.

Wow wow wow! What lovely VIEW POINTS I could read , some of them are quite interesting and made me laugh!! Thanks guys for sharing your fantastic essays. I m really not good at writing essays, i dont know how should I write essays based on the following ideas:
1: fathers staying at home is not a problem as long as they do not force women to bear all the financial burden. Especially if men want to work from home and do not deny their responsibilities sometimes it might be good for the family.

2: children should start school as early as possible may be from the age of three or four years old. However, I do not support the trend for setting strict criteria and having very high expectations right from their early age. Eventually mislabeling them and raising false alarms and create a panic.

3: Men and women are equally responsible to raise their children. Although, I think that bringing up children should be the priority for mothers as some men are naturally not so good at it, I do not think that women should spend MOST of their time raising their children. If we learn to manage our time properly parents or lets say mothers can do plenty of other useful things.

PS: superficial findings or research can lead us astray and we might not be able to achieve a good score for our work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hi again, Just wanted to share a website to help with articles

1- http://www.edufind.com/english-grammar/definite-article/

Plus the following one that my teacher recommended once:

2- http://library.bcu.ac.uk/learner/Grammar%20Guides/3.11%20Articles.htm

I have tried the first and third essays. I find it hard to write them. This type of essay makes me off track easily and lose confidence in writing.

Hi Simon,

Please would you give the skeletons of these three essays like you did previously with some other essays? I really want to know how to remain on track. It will be much appreciated.

Thank you

Hi Thanks,

It seems quite absurd to laugh at some essays. No one here is a native speaker nor do you, if someone were perfect he/she would never come up here.

If you have any comments on essays you could leave it here. Do your best and try had to achieve success.

Dear KK. Sorry, I think I chose the wrong word laugh instead of smile, as u already know I m not a native speaker.. so that was a wrong choice of word. I just meant to say that I enjoyed reading these essays, they are written in a very natural style, for example someone has mentioned that in many Asian families women force their children to attend certain courses... Being an Asian I just found it spontaneous and that made me 'smile.' I really appreciate those who shared their essays. If I were that smart I would have shared mine. Unfortunately, you didn't notice that I paid my thanks for sharing their work.

Good work guys...

Advantages of early age schooling: 1. Early completion of education leads to faster career progression.2.Convenient to parents who are both employed as they do not have much time look after kids at homes.3.schools offer opportunity of having fun and entetainment for kids who are stayed homes with baby sitters or nannies,they might find this interesting.

Disadvantages of early age schooling: 1. Lack of closeness between kids and parents.2.kid might be influenced by peers rather than parents.3.bereavement for kid of getting parents love and cuddleness may hinder psychological development.

Hi, everybody
I think it is a good way to share the ideas. Thank you very much for doing it so well!
However, it will be better for the result if we can accumulate all the vocabularies for each essay. This process will help us study faster in term of widening our vocabulary.
Sincerely!

Attention Everyone

i have a topic' cultures around the world today are more similar thant hey used to be. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negatiive development?

can anyone come up with some ideas?

cheers

Hi Simon,
I found the third topic is pretty difficult. Could you please share some instructions here please? thanks!

Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly major problem for families that fathers take the responsibility of their children by taking care of them at home instead of mothers. I believe that this is obviously not good trend for today as it stems from various reasons.

There are several reasons why it is increasing tendency for fathers to bear responsibility of their immature children. Firstly , it could be the lack of appropriate job for men as we witness the high rate of unemployment that cause many unskilled people live without job. In addition to this, women are more successful in finding a reliable job compared to men as it has, in fact, been proved that women candidates for any position prepare well before going to an interview in comparison with men which is the main reason why they almost find themselves in engaging with working while their spouse are forced of taking good care of pupils. Furthermore, some people may have an incurable diseases and have no other choices to make a contribution to their family members to cope with difficulties.

Although it would be unfair to prejudice these people for their choices, but it could be better to encourage them to be involved in active works as they should take more challenges to provide their families with reasonable quality of life. There is no doubt that fathers staying with children all day are becoming time by time less sensitive to family values .For example, in my country , people try to do their best to support their families by working even though in worst conditions and women are not usually allowed to go out to work in order to earn money to cover family needs, however, sometimes they may be allowed in engaging some works which is not so much hard to take and has almost no pressure and I think it is more understandable that females is a delicate creatures of Earth.

In conclusion, it seems to me that although there may be observed several causes of being at home for taking care of children, but I believe it would be better to motivate those kind of people to become more careful for their women.

Ielts buddy
A few ideas for reasons, but for an essay we would have to develop just 2 or 3 ideas as reasons.
(I think this trend has advantages as well as drawbacks... A matter of subjective opinion,of course)

Reasons:
1.availability of same satellite TV channels which are watched throughout the world.
2.Increase in tourism, people travel more now than they ever did in the past.

3.Popularity of social media and the internet, as people from different parts of the world share their values and become friends with each other.
4.A trend for watching movies, for example the hollywood movies are quite popular throughout the world and then people try to imitate the style of their favorite characters.
5.Ease or expansion of marketing so the same brands are available in different countries.

Similar culture globally : reasons:1.modern inventions like satellite tv,internet,social media,smartphopes are giving rise to culural integration.2.globalization of economy is also promoting this culural merging process. Efftects:: overall positive for dominant culture and negative for minority culture.

After thinking of ideas the next step is really tricky and that is how we incorporate good vocabulary to achieve a higher score, as PTT has mentioned ...a few comments above.

1) These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Answer: well, let me think about it. As far as I’m concerned, there are some reasons as following :
+Firstly : We’re living in the wolrd where everything is changing so fast including the more and more women become the breadwiner in their families. It seems almost peple acknowledge that each person should focus on what they good at. To be more detailed, If a mother is better than her husband in making money, the women should go to work and the man should stay at home to take care of their children..etc
+Secondly: It has something relate to education. We cant deny that almost people can go to school to get knowledge without any barrier like finacial statement or lack of schools, universities…and certainly to be trained about their career, job well. Therefore, everyone has their own job skills and willingly take part in job labour no matter they are man or woman.
+Thirdly : Nowadays men and women are equal.

2) Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer:
In case children stay at home and play until they’re six or seven years old. As far as I’m concerned, they can develop their intelligence through some games like Ego…
On the other hand, if our children have chances to access school as soon as possible. They will be more familier with social than staying at home, this will help them to be more interactive with their friends and their teachers. In some extend, they can learn about soft skills through some activities like singing, talking on the class, raising their hands to give out their demands..etc
In my own oppinion, Im in somewhere between these two cases. I mean it’s difficult to assume that every childen should go to school before theyre six or seven or not. In my mind, it’s sophisticated because some reasons :are Our children talented? Do our children get some mind troubles, disease or are our children healthy enough…etc. So to decide whether we should allow our children go to shool when they are 6 or 7 years old depens on many criterias..
3) Some people think that mothers should spend most of their time raising their children, and therefore the government should support them financially. Do you agree or disagree?
I’m totally support this oppion for two reasons.
Needless to say,mothers take a nessesary role for children and so hard to subsidise. But as I said before, everyone can go to work so if they can be supported by government in tems of finance it would be good for them and for our society.

I try to solve second one and organize ideas, If anybody can get any dissimilarities in writing pls. comment.

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Discussion question)

It is often argued that children whose age is less than six to seven should encourage to remain at home for play. While others think that it is a proper time to send them school as quickly as possible, I believe that both should be practiced.

A child who plays regularly can get more benefit from it. It helps to flourish mental development by participating in a team that means they have a team leader within a team, say for football each individual have a selected task that have to do with other. This team works also helps to develop leadership and they can match any other child at any situation. Besides, it’s a physical exercise and it keeps body and mind fresh which increases brains activity. For example, a healthy child is attentive for his/her work whatever he/she is and this is proved by all.

At the same time I believe that it is necessary to permit child to go to school at their early age because they can learn a discipline which will work well in the future life. Firstly, they can get a friendly environment with many more children instead of staying at home alone all the day. Secondly, their parents are busy for outdoor job, so it will be a much better place for them. Finally, they can learn timeliness and responsibility for work as a team and it helps then to respect each other. For example, a child who goes early at school will become a more confident and professional in their practical life than other counterpart who doesn’t.

In conclusion, I think for proper development of a child both playing and schooling are equally important.

I have also organizes the third one-

Some people think that mothers should spend most of their time raising their children, and therefore the government should support them financially. Do you agree or disagree?

Mothers who give their time to the development of their child without doing other financial activities should support by our government economically. Personally, I completely agree with this view.

A child who is reared by their mother has more benefit not only for a family but also for a society. Mother can understand their child more than other that means mother can understand their child’s need, desire and so on. The child can get a good environment as their mother is responsible for the take part of them and they learn the thing which is more memorable and interesting for them. For instance, a child who grows up with the care of their mother they will be more practical and positive minded in the future life. As a result, it will bring a positive change to revamp our society and all people will enjoy a good society.

I think government should support the mother of child to financially for achieving a long term benefit. They are doing to make a child as a good member of a society instead of doing outdoor job and are helping to make a society more favorable place for all sorts of people. Therefore, no offensive and subversive activities will be occurred by the child, and our nation will be introduces as an educated and developed one. If government should give them proper financial support, they will be more satisfied for this though they are highly educated in their field. For instance, a great philosopher said that “if you give me an educated mother, we will give you an educated nation” and this was really logical and we have all reached the same consensus coming to this time.

In conclusion, I believe that our state administrator should give financial benefit to the mother of child for long term benefit of a nation.

Feel free to correct or ciriticize me.

Nowadays,fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work.The reasons lie on the ground related to social structure.In my view,this is quite positive thing to evolve more modern society.


First and the most important reason is women rights rise upon every nation and every country except some extremist regions which are still ruled by patriarchy.There is an increase at worker mothers because they seem not home slaves who rest their life to look after their children and being obligated to not step forward out of the house.These rights are enables them to have the choice of the course of their life.They could work out of home and hence morhers go out to work and also there is no shame to fathers to stay at home if they have to.It depends on the situation of family.For instance, my uncle once got sick then couldn't even go to work so my aunt had to find a job to work.It was not an absurd circumstance.Nobody despised my aunt for going to work while her husband was not.In that reason women rights is the key reason.


Second, it seems to me the increase of the part time jobs hold the another key to be more fathers staying at home while mothers go out to work.As far as i'm concerned, full time jobs force people to live under stress.In that reason most of people,who have suitable qualifications,tend to work at part time rather than full time.Some fathers may prefer to work in a part time job then when it is over they have to stay at home until to find another job.


All in all,after above that i discussed, several reasons practice influence on the topic.As long as our civilization gets a grasp that equality of gender, arguing of working mothers or fathers or who stays at home become absurd.I opt to approach positively that event.There is no difference working mother or father.We must get used to it.

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

WHAT TYPE OF TASK 2 QUESTION IS THIS ????
IS IT DISCUSSION TYPE ??
OR
ADVANTAGES/DISADVANTAGES TYPE ???


Hi Everyone

please give some feedbacks about my essay, which i think it can worth for a higher mark.

Cultures around the world today are more similar than they used to be. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In today’s society, people find that culture in everywhere becomes standardisation. There are several reasons that cause this happen, and there are both advantage and disadvantage in relation to this trend.

Media is thought to be the main reason that affects culture. Nowadays, most Asian countries can easily access to western culture through media platforms. For example, people are more likely to enjoy watching Hollywood movies rather than movies produced from their own countries. Additionally, tourism and migration are another factor that can have impacts on people’s beliefs. Those who have studied or travelled around the world could adapt to different lifestyle from other countries. For instance, people become independent in many ways including living alone and not relying on their families, because they have used to the western lifestyle when they went abroad.

However, it may cause people’s concern that exposure to western culture from media could hinder the use of language of a country. If audiences are constantly watching foreign movies, especially with the language of English, their native language may be abandoned as they speak and read in English predominately. Nevertheless, I believe that it is a positive trend that people could adapt to the other’s culture. For example, Asian food such as sushi is widely accepted in many western countries, and they are not only love the food but also enjoying using chop sticks. Therefore, food becomes a bridge that is connected between western and eastern, allowing people to have fun by sharing the other’s culture.

In conclusion, various reasons can cause culture become more similar, and I believe that the benefit of this development outweigh its drawback.

Hi everyone,
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I would highly recommend everyone to draw attention to this book.
Thank you, Simon!!!
Had it not been for this site I might have never get such a result!
Good luck!

In recent years, it is not uncommon to see male parenting and women serving a family as a bread earner. In my view this trend merits enormous upsides what I shall explore below with pertinent examples and arguments with elaborating the reasons of this happening.

To begin with, there are myriad factors of this overwhelming conspicuous trend. One of its pivotal causes lies in that fact that women unlike past getting better education, social status, own identity and so on. This drastic change strengthen women power and allow them to acquire more and more. As a result employment fields such as mediacl, technical and even in male dominated areas it is easy to see a wide number of women. Another overt reason is that these days rarely men are concerned to have good job as they know now it's not that century where whole family used to depend on a single earner, thus enjoying the peace of life, thanks to the modern era.

Considering that women are enjoying much equal rights and leeway unlike earlier in life benefits all a child, a mother and a father in enormous ways. On the one side, famales' participation in family decisions are equally meant and since women are much concerned in rearing a child, their social vicinity gives them vital source and knowledge what they use to instill their lil ones effectively. This will in turns augments horizons of both the child and a mother. Male parents are not much bother to do the same even if employed, they consider child upbringing is a responsibility of a mother, thus remain occupied at work. On the other, a mother's instinct are so tender and dealing with patience what allow them to have a good bond with a child even in busy schedule. So, male counterparts remain at home with baby have that opportunity to maintain a wealthy reltaionship with their kids. As such, this is a win win situation for all.

In conclusion, the reasons and supporting view points in favour of man at home nurturing children and women at work shows a positive way in dealing with the current scenario. Nevertheless, both parents play a crucial role in a child's overall development, be it physical or physiological.

Could someone please give me feedback on my essay..

did I stay on topic with this essay?

With the advances that occur in the modern world, it cannot be denied that several domestic changes, particularly that which involve family roles, has been happening. These can be directly linked to the equal access to job opportunities among men and women. In line with this, the question as to whether this brings more advantages over disadvantages will be discussed in this essay.

There are some reasons why fathers end up being the home caretaker while mothers get employed to earn for the family. One for instance is that with the advent of women empowerment, job opportunities with good salaries are now equally available among genders. If the mother acquires an opportunity that will be more rewarding to meet the everyday necessities of the entire family, then the father has to give way in taking care of the children and other household demands.

This shift in familial roles clearly has some drawbacks as it has long been regarded for mothers to run the household. As a matter of fact, women tend to be more loving, caring, patient and persevering in terms of child upbringing. They are more meticulous with even the most minute details of attending to the needs of their children. This is why majority still believe that parenting skills are more inherent among women as it has been passed on through generations.

Although women are more equipped with the characteristics suited for a household work, this is something that men are likely to learn. With this kind of setup wherein men take charge of the household, they will learn to appreciate the sacrificies of women raising children. Also, fathers will have a more direct participation in raising children as they become more hands-on with their needs.

To conclude, this paradigm shift may be difficult for most to accept at this point but it must be remembered that men and women are equally responsible for raising their children. Given this, the idea of fathers ruling households having more disadvantages over advantages should not be heavily focused on.

Can anyone give me advice for my essay ? I will take the IELTS exam next month, and I'm currently studying by myself. So I do not know how to improve my writing skill. :(


In this day and age, as female-dominated trend has been growing faster and faster, there are several men choose to look after their children rather than to be breadwinners. There are many reasonable reasons for this changing trend, and while others believe this transformation can bring positive effects, I believe there are significant disadvantages coming along with this new trend.

To begin with, becoming a breadwinner for a family requires many important skills and characters. For example, while women seem to solve their work with emotional feelings, men show their strength and the abilities to focus more than women do. As a result, they can work for longer hours and increase the effectiveness of work than the opposite gender. Additionally, men can create more bussiness relationships. Although working in the same occupation, male have higher salaries than female do in some specific fields such like bussiness, laws or science.

Furthermore, a mother's instinct is tender than father's. Consequently, children should spend more time with their mothers. Besides, people should focus on improving what they are good at, in order to provide the best. Upbringing children requires a lot of patience, which women as mothers inherently have more than men do. An illustration of this reason is in many Asian countries, it is the female responsibilities to upbring children, because naturally mothers have better parenting skills.
All in all, I personally do not support this newly formed trend of male parenting and raising kids while staying at home due to several factors.

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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion


Children as young as two years of age are widely accepted in today's school system. The attractiveness of the school program which involves early learning programs, particularly design for children below the age of three has generally attracted young working parents.

In view of this, some opinions about children staying at home until the age of six or seven have cause for concern. To begin, the vast of number of deaths involving young children in school premises alarmingly increased. Secondly, studies have shown that the children's brain at age 6 months to 5 years behaves like sponges, cunningly absorbs everything from the environment. As an example, a child is fast to copy what the adult do and speak, for this reason, how do we control others adult to behave in front of our young ones. Finally, children who stay at home seldom get sick, therefore, decreases the risk for them to contract fatal diseases.

On the other hand, in my view, young children should go to school quickly. Firstly, schools provide a healthy environment, quality programs design for young minds which can teach the subconscious mind to mature early. Secondly, the young child will get a chance to expose both socially and physically. For example, young children grouped together will learned to make friends and play together, this way, they'll soon overcome their shyness and fear. Thirdly, dyslexia has become an issue for watchfulness, where better to detect it if not from the train eyes, the teachers themselves. Finally, the child will become independent at a very young age which solely fit the purpose of sending of early to school.

In conclusion, I believe it is the parents personal preference to decide whether to send or not to send their young children to school.

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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Taking care of children, especially in their first years of life, is being argued among parents. While some believe that their child should be sent to the school even they are under six-seven years old, others think it is better to leave children to develop naturally by staying at home and playing whatever they want. In my opinion, each view has its own rationale and it is useful is both of them are combined to raise children.
In the intense modern life, when both parents must go out for work, more children are sent to kinder garden. This affords children receiving enough care from the skillful teachers rather than hiring a home baby- sister who is not specialized in educating children. From what I have seen, this is also a precursor for further development of children later. At school, they will have interaction with other children at the same age preparing them the ability to manage in the community. Teachers also discover their own aptitude thank to a variety of activities at school.
On the other hand, one rising problems in deciding whether sending children to school, particularly in young parental couples, is financial problems. In my country, school fee is often even higher than father or mother’s paid salary. Therefore, children could be cared by grandmother or one of parents who sacrifices their career. Staying at home is beneficial to children’s growth in some aspects. First, it is undeniable that no one can take care of children better than their family. Secondly, there is a correlation between children’s emotional development and time spent with their family, the more care and playing time that children receive from parents, the closer relationship they have.
Generally, children are ideally allowed to play freely in their first years old, receiving the take care from their family until they are around 3 to 5 year old, and have ability to realize the world around adapting themselves into the school environment with new friends, teachers and even regulations.
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in my opinion it is not a bad idea if parents are doing job at the same time.Because we are living in the era where inflation is on its peak and one has to do over time jobs.but if both man and woman are working for their livelihood it could be advantageous for the family health and growth.but there is an other factor which is being affected by the absence of parents is the children who are left alone at home.it could be a dark side for that mental growth cause a child needs his parents attention,love and affection.and they could'nt get it if both parents are busy in their jobs.some parents keep nannies or care takers for their child so they can teach them etiquette.But in my opinion the parents are best the teachers.

People have different views in regard to the question of in what age young children should go to school. Although there are some benefits to sending children to school early, I would argue that it is better to wait until they are old enough to enter school curriculums.

The main advantage of going to school at rather early years could be that starting school as a younger means finishing school at a younger age. This leads younger children to acquiring more academic attainments or professional skills than their peers who are at the same age but with lesser achievements in these areas. In terms of career prospective, younger children should have advantages to have access to more and better job opportunities at their late 20s, at the age most individuals are working, and as a result, there is more time for those successfully completing their studies at a younger age to earn returns on their investment in education. Since wages depend on human capital, they depend on skills acquired in school and skills developed through work experience after schooling.

On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for children to start schooling at older age. Normally, school curriculum includes a wide range of subjects such as language learning, reading and mathematics with different task complexities. For younger children, this usually appears to be complex and stressful task to handle in order to keep pace with other older classmates. As a result, they are more likely to fail to reach crucial academic attainments and make it hard to successfully pass exams to go to next grade. At the same time, for primary school children involving in schooling requires certain amount of self-reliance and character which helps them resist some potential damages to their self esteem and mental health. And sometimes it is hard for children to develop these vital traits due to particular circumstances of the family.

In conclusion, early schooling may bring some benefits to younger children’s future, I believe taking care of children’s emotional well-being should be a priority.

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People have different views with regard to the question about whether or not the government should help mothers during the time of upbringing their children.While I agree that mothers should definitely receive assistance from the state, it should also be the responsibility of the whole society.

On the one hand, the government should afford an adequate quality level of life to mothers while raising their children because it has advantageous to the children’s health and society’s development. Mother’s would be more encouraged to breastfeed their infants long enough which will help the children to have a strong immunity system and bone’s structure. Many researches have shown that mother’s milk is essential to have a healthy and strong body and can not be competed with any other artificial baby’s nutrition .Another reason, it has a great impact on the nation’s growth. Children require a safe learning environment and should be prepared before they come into contact with the outside world. Mother’s main role at this stage would be to teach their children the positive attitudes in a funny way through telling stories about the angles and evils which can demonstrate the good and bad acts.

On the other hand, the community should support mothers for upbringing their children. One way to do this is by continuing paying taxes to the state. part of the tax-payment should go to the baby-caring mothers. Also, employers should be fair by paying working mothers salaries and granting them a paid-leave until their children are old enough to go to school.

In conclusion, both the state and the community should financially support mothers and I believe this would help to have a fully functional future generations.

problem one:
Main paragraph: the traditional view that men are breadwinner in the family is changed; mothers in some family can earn more money than men, it’s more economical that men take on role of looking after babies; more men are willing to spend more than with family after spending several years on working.

Main paragraph: positive effect: the family can deposit more money, and men can enjoy more time with family, contribute to equal rights movements; offer same opportunities to men and women

problem two:
Planning:
Main paragraph: children can enjoy more time with parents and have comfortable life, benefit children’s growth; lose some opportunities to learn knowledge in school; may have some difficulties to get along with other partners

Main paragraph: help children obtain formal and professional education at a more young age; put them under pressure and are harmful to their growth; the younger the children are, the more difficulties they will face in study

problem three:
Introduction: it is true that parents should spend more time with their children and this can benefit the growth of children. In my opinion, either mothers or fathers can take on the role of looking after their children and families should obtain financial support from government according to family conditions.

Main paragraph: women should have equal rights with men, so who takes care of children is up to personal preference and economic condition of the family.

Main paragraph: government should offer financial support to these families. In order to maximum outcome of financial support, so it should offer support according economic condition of families and number of children.

In conclusion, either mothers or fathers can choose to stay at home and look after their children, and the families should be supported financially according to their conditions

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