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1. Parallelism: More ...
2. Verb usage - By financially support?
3. Conditional tense: If V present, would..? --> will.
4. Parallelism: Locally made - foreign.
5. Discuss something.

1)The global film making companies have budgets for actions,special effects and spectacular locations.

2)Governments should promote local film industries by supporting the film makers financially.

3)If governments have helped the local movie industries,it would created more employment opportunities.

4)There could be several reasons why the locally made films are loosing their popularity to foreign films.

5)The following essay will discuss about the issue in detail.

The global film-makers companies has more budgets for action movies, special effects and spectacular locations.

Goverments should promote local film industry by supporting film makers financially.

New Employment opportunities will be creat if goverments set to the local film industry.

Locally made films have lost popularity to the foreign ones for several reasons.

The following essay will discuss the issue in details.

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Hi everyone,

Having come back to home after the exam, I remained unsatisfied with my performance in writing part.

Can anyone help me to find out how should I have written the essay or what did I make wrong in its structure?

Here is the question:

University students tend to focus on one specialist subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students a range of other subjects in addition to the specialist one.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

I considered this question the unusual one as it refers to the discussion type.

Here is my structure:

Although it is relevant to cover other disciplines, I would argue that it is most important for students to lay focus on specialist subject.

First paragraph: Benefits from other disciplines.
Second paragraph: Why it is so important to concentrate mostly on specialist subject.

Conclusion: partly agree that other fields of study advantageous, while I believe that only most attention being paid to specialist core discipline can lead to professional success.

Please don't hesitate to give some criticisms :)

Best regards


1)International filmmaking companies invests much expense for actions, special effects and breathtaking locations.
2) The government should promote local film industry by supporting funding for the film producers.
3) If the government helps local movie industry, it will create employment opportunities.
4)There are several reasons why domestic films are less attractive than foreign films
5)The following essay will discuss about this issue in detail

my suggestions are;

1. Global filmmaking companies have more budget to spend on action scenes, special effects and spectacular locations.

2.Governments should support local film industries by providing funds to the film makers.

3.If governments support local movie industry financally, it will create more employment opportunities.

4.There are several reasons why local film industry lose its popularity against foreign films.

5.The following essay discusses the issue in more detailed approach.

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2.local film industries should be supported financially by governments.
5.The following essay will discuss the details of the issue.
4.There are several reasons why locally made films lose popularity compared with foreign films.

4.There are several reasons why locally made films lose popularity compared with foreign ones.

1.The global film-making companies have more budget for spending on action, special effects and spectacular locations.
2.Governments should enhance/improve/upgrade local film industries by supporting the film makers financially.
3.If governments helped local movie industry, it would create employment opportunities.
4.There are several reasons why locally made films lose their popularity to foreign ones.
5. The following essay will discuss the issue in detail.

1.Global filemakers have more budget spending for action, special effects and spectacular locations.
2.Governments should support local film industry providing financial support to the film makers.
3.If governments help local movie industry, more employment opportunities would be created.
4.There are several reasons why locally made films lose popularity compared to foreign films.
5.The following essay will discuss about the issue in detail.

Here is my changing
1, Global filmmaking companies have invested more budget for action films, special effects and spectacular filming location.

2,Governments should highly support local film industries by giving further film funding to the film makers.

3,If governments help local movie industry, it would create employment opportunities for local people.

4,There are several reasons why locally made films lose their popularity to foreign films.

The following essay will be discussed in details about the issue.

The global filmmaker assisting companies have more budget for spending on action, special effects and spectacular locations.

Governments should financially support local film industries by subsidies as well as aids the film maker.

If governments were supported local movie industry, it would increase job opportunities.

There are several reasons to explain why locally made films less of popularity to foreign films.

An essay will discuss this issue in details as follows:

HI GUYS I AM SHARING ANOTHER ESSAY AND (INTRODUCTION & CONCLUSION)

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

Introduction:

It is certainly true that there is an alarming increase in the quantity of waste production on a day-to-day basis. While there are several reasons for this inevitable situation, I believe that plausible measures could definitely be taken by governments to mitigate the rapid proliferation of garbage that we produce in our lives. (51 Words)

Conclusion:

In conclusion, though there remains the unavoidable creation of residues owing to various reasons, it seems to me that governments should take necessary steps to tackle the problems of waste production. (31 Words)

1.Global filmmaking companies have more budget to invest in action, special effects and spectacular locations.
2.Governments should support local film industries by financing the film makers.
3.If governments could help local movie industry, it would boost employment opportunities for locals.
4.There are several reasons why domestic films lose its popularity in comparison to foreign films.
5.The following essay will discuss about these issues in detail.

The global filmmaking companies have more budget for action, special effect and spectacular locations.
Governments should support local film industries financially,to support the film makers.
If governments helped local movie industry, it would have created employment opportunities.
There are several reasons for locally made films lose popularity compaired to foreign films.
The following essay will discuss the issue in detail.

Global film-making companies have more budget for action, special effects and spectacular locations.
Governments should support local film industries by financially supporting the film makers.
If governments help local movie industry, it would create more employment opportunities.
There are several reasons why local made films lose popularity to foreign films.
The following essay will discuss the issue in detail.

My Answer;
1. The global film making companies has budget for action, special effect and spectacular locations
2. Government should support local film industry by support film makers financially
3. If government help local movie industries, it would create job opportuinities
4.There are several reason why local less popular than foreign films
5.The following essay will discuss the detail issue

My Answer:
1. Global filmmakers have more budget for action, special effects and spectacular locations.
2. The Government should support local film industries by providing financial support for the film makers.
3. If the government help local movie industry, it will create employment opportunities.
4. There are several reasons why local films lose popularity compared to foreign films.
5. The following essay will discuss the issue in details.

Thank you Simon, for picking up one sentence of mine. Here are my answers.
1. Global filmmaking companies provide more budgets to create magnificent actions, special effects and spectacular locations.
2. Government should promote local film industry by allocate financial budget to the film makers.
3. If governments help local film industry, it will encourage employment opportunities.
4. There could be several reasons why locally made films are less popular than foreign ones.
5. This following essay will discuss about the issue in detail.

My answers.
1) More could be used with than.
Global film making companies have more budget for action, special effects and spectacular locations than local movie making companies have.

2) Governments should financially support local film industries.

3) If governments could help local film industry, it would help in creating employment opportunities.

4) There are several reasons why locally made films are losing popularity against foreign films.

5) The following essay will discuss the issue in detail.

ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

First, I'll try to explain the problems:

1. 'budget' is usually a countable noun, so instead of 'more budget', we can write 'bigger budgets' or 'more money' ('money' is uncountable and therefore 'more money' is fine).

2. We need an "ING" form after "by". So, we should write "by financially supportING".

3. This is a 'second conditional' sentence. We need to write "If governments helpED".

4. "lose popularity to" seems strange. Let's just make a normal comparison e.g. "are less popular than".

5. "in details" should be "in detail". I would also change "discuss in detail about this issue" to "discuss this issue in detail" - this is a more natural phrase.

FROM SIMON (continued)

Now here are my corrected sentences:

1. Global filmmaking companies have bigger budgets for action, special effects and spectacular locations.

2. Governments should support local film industries by financially supporting the film makers.

3. If governments helped local movie industries, they would create employment opportunities.

4. There are several reasons why locally made films are less popular than foreign films.

5. The following essay will discuss this issue in detail.

Simon,

Thank you very much for the valuable grammar lesson.

Thanks Simon, This is a very useful information.

Simon,
thanks so much for this useful information

Thanks Simon,

Hi simon, I was given the writing question on 30 june, general training writing topic as follows: People are using credit, debit cards frequently, rather than using coins or papee based money. In future there would be no paper based money. Whould it be a positive or negative developement?

My answer was like that:Plasit money transaction has both positive and negative effects on people,s spending habit. positive topic: easy and convenient to transfer money from account to account.No need to carry bags or luggages for money and coins to business transaction. Negative cosequence: increases spending habit,not easy to access Atm machine in rural areas, village , so bank and paper money is the solution to them.

1.budget for: budget on
2.financially support: financially supporting
3.help:helped; local movie industry: local movie industries
4.lose popularity to foreign films: lose popularities compared to foreign films
5.The following essay will discuss in details about the issue.: The following essay will discuss about the issue in detail.

its very helpful

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