IELTS Writing Task 1: population pyramids

Have you ever tried describing this type of chart?

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
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[Jasur]

That is tough one!

[Ahmed]

It is a bar chart
There was equal sex proportion for each countries . There were more young generation in India .
The proportion decreased by about 0.5% per age group in india , while the highest figure was for those age 30- 35 in France .

I think it is very difficult chart

[amitc005]

feeling less confident now I really need to do more concentrate on my IELTS preparation.

[Big Money]

Here is my introduction.
The charts compare France and India in terms of the age proportion of population in 1984.

[Ahmed]

Introduction
Overview

The bar char illustrates the difference between India and France in regard to the percentage of 18 distinct age populations .

Overall, India had more young populations and equal sex proportion ,whereas in Frane there were more aged people , especially females .

[Jing]

Dear Simon,

Thank you very much for the graph task, which is very challenging.

This is my answer to this task ( completed within 22 minutes):

The charts compare demographic data collected from France and India in 1984.

Overall, the population in France had longer lifespan than that in India, where younger generation accounted for a greater proportion. It is noticeable that females tended to live longer than males in France.

In France, there were approximately 2% of females who lived up to their 80s, and around 1.5% of them aged 85 or more. Men had relatively shorter life longevity than females, at around 1% of them in their 80s. The similar pattern was showed in people aged between 60 and 80. The percentage of females at this group was around 0.5% higher than males. In this country, the rest of the population saw a similar age distribution between the two genders, with around 2 to 3.5% of the population in each half decade of life, except for teenagers and younger adults ( with around 3.5 to 4%).

In India, younger generation accounted for the majority of the population. The percentage of people in each half decade of life declined with age by around 0.2 to 0.5% . There were around 6.5% to 7% of the population aged between 0 and 5. However, less than 1% of people lived in their 60s. It is interesting to note that there were a slightly higher percentage of people (1-2%) who lived to their 70s. In addition, males and females had a similar age distribution.
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[Andy]

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[mir]

The charts represents the differences between the populations of France and India with respect to their age group for the year 1984.

It can be clearly seen that in France almost in every age level women are more prevalent than men.In india, women and men are in alomost equal ratio throughout their life time.

Focusing on the informations in more details we can say France has higher life expectancy than India. Around.5% males and 1.5% females live more than 85 years.But the number of children in India is around 7% for both boys and girls which is much higher than France where it is just above 3.5%. Up to 20-25 years age group India has more percentage of people compared to France. However, after this age mark France is more dominant than India.

In addition except one point, there is a gradual decrease of percentage of the number of people in India with respect to the increasing order of age group. On the contrary, France shows a plateau of percentage in three different stages namely from 10 to 40, 40 to 65 and and 65 to 80 leaving only 2% people who are more than 85 years old.

[fiona]

Here my introduction,
The charts illustrate the comparison between the population of France and India based on their age group in 1984.

[Alan]

The figures show information about the percentages of life expectancy for Indian and French people in 1984.

It can be seen that the population of France both male and female by far lived longer than Indian.The largest proportion of children and young adult were in India.

In France, the percentages of females lived over 85years was approximately five times higher that males, around 1% and 0.2% respectively. Between the ages of (10-30), the rate of life expectancy for both man and women was approximately similar, around 3.5% each. Middle age and older females between the ages of (40-85), lived significantly longer than males by around 1% for each age limit.

Looking at the age limit of both males and females in India, their upper age limit were 70 years in contrast to French which was 85 years. The rates of Indian children and young adult between the ages of (0-15) were approximately twice that of French, about 6% to 3% respectively. The percentages of Indian live expectancy for those between the age of (25 -70) were similar.

[Aria]

the bar charts weight the age and sex distribution of the populations in France and India in 1984.

or

The graphics show the distribution of age groups in both sexes in the population of France and India in 1984.

or

the graphic compare France and India populations' age pyramid in 1984.

or
the bar charts compare France and India age structure in both sexes in 1984.

Any comment is appreciated.

[Sharmin]

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[Minh Nghia]

Two bar charts compare France and India in terms of their people's age in the year of 1984.

It is noticeable that while India had a young population, France suffered from aging one. However, there was a same trend in both nations that is that among the young generations, the proportion of males were slightly higher than that of females, but among the middle-aged adults and the elderly this situation reversed.

Looking at the information in the details, we can see that in India, infants and small kids up to 5 years old accounted for the largest group of population, boys were more than 7% and girls were around 6.5%. In France, this youngest group were a little smaller than the age group of 30-35 where both men and women were nearly 4% of total population. In the seven first groups, there was a little difference among them in France, while there was a steadily decline in the number of people as they got older.

As regards to senior citizens, both male and female elderly in France had longer life expectancy with more than 2.1% and 2.0% of them respectively, compared with only 1% for men and 1% for women of the same age in India.

[Wasim]

The given charts illustrates how French and Indian population was divided into different age groups in the year 1984.

It is clear that the male and female population in both countries was generally in equal proportion in different age groups. India has a higher percentage of youth, whereas, French has a higher life expectancy when compared to India.

The Indian population shows slightly higher percentage of males compared to females with children under the age of 5 being highest at 7% and 6.5% for males and females respectively. The percentage of population in older age groups decreases steadily up until the age group of elderly between 65-70 standing at 1% for both males and females. By contrast, the French younger children in the age group of 5 or under stood at about 3.5% proportionally equal in both males and females. The age groups from 10-15 up to 30-35 shows a stagnant 4% of male and female population alike in France.

The French population show a decreasing trend from age group 55-60 as the population grew older with age group 80-85 having about 1% of male and 2.5% of females respectively. The Indian elderly above the age of 70 has 1.5% of males and females. By comparison, the French population above 85 years of age have only 0.25% of males and 1.25% of females.

[sun]

hi Jing,
I double checked the essay, there are some of mistakes as below:
articles: had a longer life pan/ had a relatively (syn: comparatively)
tense: was shown (past)

however,(adverb) the figure was /It was
propsition: in this group
verb phrase: live (syn:having life/alive/live long)
lived up
lived to be ( V to-inf )
Cheer

[Sadi]

okay, this one is difficult and I tried to give it a shot.
here's my essay.

This chart helps us study the average aging span of Men and Women in France and India during the year 1984.

It is clear that France has the longest aging cycle as compare to India. 1.5% Women in France lives upto 85years and around 0.8% Men reached the age of 85year. But, when it comes to India the maximum aging rate of Men and Women is 70years, about 1.5% of men and women aged 70years which is comparatively 10years less than France.

The population rate of new born's in India is almost from 6.5% to 7% whereas on the other hand in France the average of toddlers is 3.5%. There is no doubt that the population of India is more than France but the aging span of France is longest than India.

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I know my essay is short. I`m working on my writing skills.
can someone please read my essay and help me where I need improvement?
P.S: I guess I need improvement throughout my essay.

[Jing]

Sun,

Thank you very much for your corrections. I really appreciate your help.

[Jing]

Dear all,

Please could anyone help me answer the following reading questions:

The original passage (extracted from Cambridge book 9, test 2, passage 3):

"The best way to see things differently to other people is to bombard the brain with things it had never encountered before. Novelty releases the perceptual process from the chains of the past experience and forces the brain to make new judgments. Successful iconoclasts have an extraordinary willingness to be exposed to what is fresh and different. Observation of iconoclasts shows that they embrace novelty while most people avoid things that are different.

The problem with novelty, however, is that it tends to trigger the brain's fear system. Fear is a major impediment to thinking like an inconoclast and stop the average person in his tracks. There are many types of fear, but the two that inhibit iconoclastic thinking and people generally find difficult to deal with are fear of uncertainty and fear of public ridicule. These may seem like trivial phobias. But fear of public speaking, which everyone must do from time to time, afflicts one- third of the population. This makes it too common to be considered a mental disorder. It is simply a common variant of human nature, one which iconoclasts do not let inhibit their reactions."

(Question type is Yes/No/Not Given)
Question 34: most people are too shy to try different things. (NG)

If you look for the answer in the first paragraph the last sentence 'Observation of iconoclasts shows that they embrace novelty while most people avoid things that are different.'....the answer should be NG
However, if you look the answer in the second paragraph the first sentence 'The problem with novelty, however, is that it tends to trigger the brain's fear system.'.... The answer should be NO, because it is fear that cause ordinary people' s objection to novelty.

Question 35, if you think in an iconoclastic way, you can easily overcome fear. (NO)
You will expect to see something like 'you can not overcome the fear even you think in an iconoclastic way....' However, I can not find the opposite statement in the text .

Please help me solve these puzzles. I would really appreciate your explanations.

Many thanks

[dyc]

@jing for me both of your answers are correct.

#34. is NG, the key word in the question is 'shy', and the sentence in the paragraph is only partly correct, which means its neither Y/N.

#35. is No, i think you can find the answer in public speaking part 'time to time'. Meaning they just can't get rid of fear easily.

[Simon]

Andy,

Yes, I do send essay templates with the ebook.

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Sharmin,

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[Wasim]

@Jing,

#34 - I think it is 'NG' because the paragraph states most people 'avoid' different things. This may not necessarily be due to there 'shyness'.

#35 - From the paragraph ' There are many types of fear, but the two that inhibit iconoclastic thinking...'. I think this text is enough to establish that even iconoclastic people may have two types of fear which contradicts the statement in question. Hence the answer is 'No'.

[mir]

#34- NG (Most people avoid things that are different. But the causes are not given-e.g. shyness)

#34- NO (1. Fear is a major impediment to thinking like an inconoclast, 2. There are many types of fear, but the two that inhibit iconoclastic thinking ...)

[rei hino]

The charts show the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. In general, both of them indicate clearly about 4 stages of age structure: infant and children, the adult, the senior and the old with 2 genders (female and male). The average longevity of the old in India was just over 70 years old, but following to the information i see from the chart of India, the average longevity of the Indian was about 70-75 years old in 1984 while the longevity of the old in France was over to 85 years old. From that, we can see that in that time the Indian didn't have plenty of the old and almost they were died early, i guess the causes derived from the condition of living.
In France in 1984, the total of the people had the age under 20 years old accounting for from 3-4% with 2 genders. The total of the adult had the age from 20-40 years old having a quite steady level with 3-4% in male and 4-5% in female. Especially, the biggest percentage of female occupied 5% at the age from 30 to 35 yeas old. From 40 to 65 in senior age, both male and female accounted for 3.2-3.7%. From 65 to over 85, the percentage of the male just only took account for 2.8% and the female with 2.9%. From 70 and more than, the female occupied a higher percentage with over 2% while the male just accounted under 2% or 1%. The old women in France were more than the old man there in that time.
In India, both the male and the female were quite stable in all ages. The old in India were lower than in France albeit the longevity in France was higher than in India. The total of the young people in India was so plenty in 1984. The lowest percentage in the age from 65 to 70 with both of genders was 1.2%.
All in all, if having more young labor forces, that leads to the developing of that country, but if not responding fully about employment or jobs for the young workforce, that leads to depression. However, the subsidy for the old also accounts for a big amount in budget of country regarding countries having plenty of the old people.

[Dar Dar]

The two charts compare the two countries, namely France and India, in terms of their population distribution by different age and gender in the year 1984.

Overall it is clear that the proportion of people aged 70 and over was far higher in France than that of India, whilst the under five population was the largest group of all in India. Females over the age of 70 lived longer than their male counterparts in France, whereas there was not much gender difference in almost all Indian groups.

With regards to age distribution, approximately 10% of people in France was aged 70 and over, whereas just around 2% of Indian people fell in that category. The proportions of people in each and every middle aged groups between aged 30 and 50 were quite similar, raging from around 5% to 8% in both countries.In contrast, nearly a seventh of the whole population in India was aged under five, at around 14%, which was two times as large as that of French population, that was around 7%.

In terms of gender distribution, women over the age of 70 tend to live longer than men in France. The figures for women and men who lived beyond the age of 85 and over were 1.5% and under 0.5 % respectively. However, there were not much discrepancies between men and women in the rest of age groups in France and all age groups in India.

[Jing]

Hi Wasim and Mir

Thank you very much for your explanations. Your help is much appreciated.

Best wishes

[Jing]

Hi Dyc

Thank you very much for your explanations. Your help is much appreciated.

Best wishes

[good]

The pyramid charts compare France and India in terms of age structure of the population in 1984.

Overall, the majority of the population in India were children, in which there were almost accounted for 20%. Whereas, on the other hand, In France were young age group and children in which there were around 40% of the younger age group and almost 35% of Children respectively.

It is clear that the demographic toll in India, where rapid population growth. The plot of toll group in France was scarcely less. However, the figure was 2 % of the older age group in France. in India it was 2.5%

The population rate begins reproducing in India was a young age group, who was under aged 15-20. By comparison, in France each group was given the birth rate about 4 %. Who were 30-35 years or less. In addition, It is noticed that the population of India was a greater number than France. but, there were statistic shown that the French live longer than the Indian
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[Ahmed]

http://www.ielts-exam.net/images/graphs/g9.gif
Any one knows the name of this chart please

[seywan]

here is my introduction.
This age picture diagram (population pyramid), covering the year of 1984 and France and India as a case study,graphically displays the distribution of various ages group in a population. Generally, excluding the more ageing population in France, India enjoyed of a soaring level of young people.

[Thientrang]

Hi, Teacher Simon!

This is my answer!Please read and correct it, thank you so much for reading! Have a nice day, teacher Simon!

The charts displays the clear differences of the population structure between India and France.
Based on the shape of the chart, it is possible for guessing that the Indian triangle-shaped chart shows the young trend for the population starting from 0 to 85 year-old, or older, and the French trapezium-shaped chart represents the old trend in the population structure from the 0 to 70 year-old, or more a bit.
As can be seen from these charts, there are no big differences of the percentage among the age group from 0-5 to 35-40-year-old in France, especially in the 10-15 to 30-35-age group keeping about more 50% of the total, while the 0-5-age group in India takes up the highest percentage compared with the rest age groups.
In addition, the top of the Indian chart stops at the 70-age group, but the top of the French chart stops at the 85-age group, which illustrates the population of France is older than India.
Eventually, the percentage between female and male also breaks any similarity among the two country when females in France take up higher percent than males in all the age group, but in India, this is totally opposite.

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[Malek]

The age picture diagrams below compare two countries, France and India in terms of the distribution of various age groups in population.

In France, and as can be seen, young people aged between 10 to 35, represent the majority of the population, at approximately 4% for both genders, while the old ones who are aged over 85 appears as the minority, at 0.5% ans 1.5% for males and females respectively.

As regard India, it takes a lance to notice that the pecentage of people life period falls down as time goes by.
At roughly 7%, toddlers and kids aged betweeen 0 to 5 years are the overwhelming majority in India"s population map, whereas people who are aged between 65 to 70 represent the minority group in India's population, at barely 1%.

Overall; it seems like couples in India are way more than their counterpart in france, which explain the large proportion of youth that abounds compare to france.

I will be grateful if anyone from you guys give me a feedback! :)

[soma]

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[Amber LAU]

The charts show the percentage of men and women at different ages in India and France in 1984.

The proportions of young men and women to older generations are relatively balanced in France while there are much more young people in India than older people.

[jimmy]

i cant even describe them in my mother language.

[Alexander]

Bar charts demonstrate the age structure in the societies of France and India by gender in 1984.

It is clear that the number of people over 70 prevailed in France while the percentage of persons under 25 was higher in India. It is also noticeable that more women lived in France in 1984 while in India both genders were represented equally.

Looking at the age groups first, merely 10% of the population of India were aged over 50 while in France this figure was much higher in 1984 – around 25%. By contrast, the percentage of children, teenager and adults under 25 is much higher in India – approximately 50% against 35% in France in the same year. Finally, the proportion of population aged 25-50 was similar in both countries at nearly 40%.

With regard to gender, the structure of the population of India had no difference between the proportions of male and female in 1984, while in France adults aged 50 and over were mostly women.