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June 24, 2015

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A great model essay, thank you very much, Simon.

Domestically produced films
Promote local film-making
Subsidising the industry
Established film industries
Shoot scenes in spectacular locations
Global appeal
Star the most famous actors
Most accomplished producers
Suffer in comparison
Talented amateur film makers
Prove themselves
A rise in tourist numbers
Funded by government subsidies
Compete with
Dominate the market
.....

increase in employment
income from film sales
a rise in tourist numbers

Dear, Simon

I'd like to ask about the grammer that you used in the sample essay.

"Hollywood blockbusters like 'Avatar' or the James Bond films are examples of such productions and the global appeal that they have."

Can you explain after 'and the global~'?
Thanks in advance!

Hi Simon,

It is correct to write " shoot scenes in spectacular locations"??

Many thanks

Hi Hana,

That phrase is a little confusing now that I'm reading it again! I'll make a small change to improve it. Well noticed!

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Bright side,

Yes, that phrase is fine. Film-makers use the phrase "to shoot a scene".

Thanks Simon! This kind of topic is really not my cup of tea! :(

investigate "Information Technology" but you will need to narrow what area is your focus. For example "Information Technology Security". I noticed when I searched the U.S. Bureau of Labor Statistics for Computer Information Systems it listed an average pay of $79,680 per year. Then when I searched for "Industrial Manager" the median pay is $89,190 per year. There is much discussion about the conditions and stress involved in these different occupations. IT Security is very different from IT Analyst.I got this topic can anyone write for me

Surya,

That isn't an IELTS topic.

Dear Simon
I found this sentence below confused

" If governments did help with these costs, they would see an increase in employment in the film industry "

Is this type 2 condition sentence.? And I think government support can happen in the present. Why did you use type 1 condition sentence in this case

Hi Jenny,

I used a 2nd conditional to imagine what would happen if governments helped. However, you could also use a 1st conditional: "If governments help, they will see..."

Thank You more Mr Simon for great educational work which makes us more carefully thinking on IELTS

Hi Simon,

I'd like to ask you about the sentence in your essay "There are various reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries".

I think the clause after "than" should be passive. Can you explain why you use active sentence? Thank you so much!

Hi Tien,

It is the passive, but I used a "reduced relative clause". Instead of "films THAT ARE produced", I missed the words "THAT" and "ARE" and just wrote "films produced".

This is a normal thing that we do in English. Have a look at this grammar website to learn more (especially example 3 about the passive):

http://free-english-study.com/grammar/reduced-relative-clauses.html

Hello Simon,
Thank you a lot for sharing this useful sample essay.

I'm a bit confused of showing my opinion in essays. I thought that I should not use some words like "In my opinion", "In my view", ...in the introduction and in the body paragraph as well.
I only can use the facts in the essays.I even don't use any words like "my" "me" "I" throughout essays. I did wrong, didn't I?

Please help me! Thank you so much!

Hi simon,

I also want to ask a similar question.Whether I should write "it is believed" or "it is said" in the essay instead of "i believe" or "in my point of view..."...?Please guide me...!

Thanks...!

Hi Simon,

In the essay, you wrote "firstly", but I can see that there is no "secondly" which was obviously replaced by the phrase "Another reason". Is it also correct to write like this?

Thank you so much.

Thu and Qaiser,

Some teachers make the mistake of thinking that IELTS follows the same rules as 'university writing'. It doesn't.

It's normal at university to avoid "I" and personal opinions, because you quote research in order to express views.

In the IELTS test we don't have any research, and many questions ask for YOUR views.

If the question asks whether YOU agree or disagree, you MUST express a personal opinion using "I" or "my". Otherwise you're not answering the question. "It is believed" usually means "people believe", so that's not a phrase for expressing your own view.

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Ann,

Yes, it fine to do that.

Hi, Simon,
The sentence"...actors and a host of other costs related to producing high-quality films."
Could you explain why are u using "producing" instead of "to produce", is it correct to use "to produce".
Thank you! :)
Wenjun

Hi,Simon,

I've practiced this topic before analyzing yours.You developed ideas closely related to MOVIES,while I emphasize the incentive to learning foreign languages and "sightseeing" exotic scenery in first body paragraph,and the implication of culture presentation and conservation in the second body paragraph.Will I be punished for off-topic?

Also,as you can imagine,there were not too many movie-related vocabularies in my essay.Will I be punished due to lack of the topic-related vocabulary(one of the criteria in speaking part)?

Thank you very much for your patience.

It is true that nowadays, many people tend to watch foreign movies than locally produced films. In this case, this essay would examine some substantial reasons behind this emerging trend before outlining the appropriate measures that authorities can adapt to cope with situation.

Hi Simon!
Thanks for your sample answer. Your site is very interesting for reference and reading feedback. I wrote this one for my student (yes I am also a teacher!), hope it won't hurt to share with everyone here (-;


These days more and more movie-goers and TV watchers in general prefer foreign films, so should the government provide the local film industry with financial support? This essay will discuss the phenomenon and the matter in question.

As a matter of fact, through foreign movies people can see exotic landscapes and lifestyles around the world, whereas domestic movies often portray familiar ones that to some extent become boring. For example, many movies in the US that were considered flops became profitable overseas because there are plenty people around the world fancying the glamour and wealth of America. Besides, thanks to the Internet and cable TV, people can watch almost any movie to their hearts’ content, unlike a few decades ago when we could only enjoy what was playing in the cinema or on the local TV station. With such a wide range of choice, it is natural that people will not limit their entertainment to domestic movies.

Thus, I think it is ineffective to support local film industry financially. One vivid example is that many of the state-financed movie projects to commemorate historical events had resulted in audience’s disappointment. On the other hand, films made by independent and private movie studios became successful in the domestic market albeit being frowned upon by critics. There are many wise alternatives to financial support to the domestic movie industry, for instance, the government can establish movie awards to motivate local filmmakers, or promote local movies abroad in order to attract the curiosity of foreign audiences.

In conclusion, I do not agree that the government should finance the local film industry because the fact that is people will be apathetic towards domestic movies if the local filmmakers do not catch up with their audience’s taste.

(289 words)

Hi Simon ,
In this essay,you wrote "In my view" in third body paragraph, Is it because the question had asked for,"why could this be"?
I'm bit confused because you told not give our own opinion until the question has asked for it .
Please guide me .

Hi Vinodha,

It's because the question asks: "Should governments give...?"

This question is definitely addressed to YOU, even if the word "you" isn't used.

Thank you so much Simon.
I understood and it's very clear now .

Hi Simon,

I find the conclusion is neither a rephrase of the introduction nor a summary of the points you made on the body paragraphs.

You mentioned raising the quality of locally made films in the conclusion, but this idea does not appear in the introduction.

Do we need to paraphrase the introduction more strictly?

Mik

Hi Mik,

For me, the conclusion is (loosely) paraphrasing the introduction in the sense that "help to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete" is a form of "promotion" of local film-making.

The word "promote" doesn't only mean "give publicity to". It can also mean "further the progress of". This meaning of the word "promote" is similar to the idea of "help to raise the quality".

I hope this helps!

Hi Simon,

Thanks for your reply.

Having another look, I feel the conclusion is more like a reason to prove the introduction.

In the introduction, you mentioned "governments should promote local film-making" and in the conclusion, "increased financial support could help to..." so it's answering why governments should promote local film-making.

In the second body paragraph, you give the reason that amateurs have the need to cover those costs, and you mentioned "to compete" and "producing high-quality films" in the explanation. Are you actually repeating this explanation and using it as a reason in the conclusion?

If this is the case, can I use the consequence in the second paragraph and write a conclusion in the following way?


In conclusion, I believe increased financial support could potentially lead to an increase in employment, income and tourism in the film industry that is currently dominated by foreign productions.

Thanks

Mic

Hi Mic,

Yes, I agree with your explanation, and your conclusion would work too.

Thanks Simon..The conclusion is somehow difficult to me, I am always confused about what to include and what not to. Maybe you can write a post on it in more detail.

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Hi Simon,

Sometime I read a sentence with two "verbs to be" and I get confused. Moreover, I want to know this kind of grammar, I tried to find it in many books and websites and I didn't find it.
You mentioned that For example,
1- Three main factors are to blame for the way young people are finding it difficult nowadays.

2-Another reason why these big budget films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses.

Hi Simon,
Thank you for your sharing.
I have a question about a phrase in this essay.I notice you wrote the 'To compete with big-budget productions FROM OVERSEAS'. FROM is a preposition while OVERSEAS is either the adjective or the adverb. Is FROM OVERSEAS right?
Look forward for your reply. Thanks again.

Lydia,

For me as a native speaker, "from overseas" is a very normal phrase, but I can see why you're confused from a grammar perspective - this is one of the problems with learning grammar rather than "acquiring / absorbing" a language by "living" it.

Anyway, here's a discussion on a grammar website that might help you:

https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/168652/why-is-from-overseas-grammatical

"increased financial support could help to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with the foreign productions that currently dominate the market"

Hi, have a good day Simon, Increased financial support - allow
Have you taken "increased financial support" as plural notion or leaving the "s" out at the end of "allow" is just a minor slip.

Dear Simon,

Thank you for all your effort and your time,

When I first read the question, I understand ' foreign films ' as french films, german films, turkish film etc. The Academy Award for Best Foreign Language Film is also consist of films that aren't english and made in outside of the USA. I wouldn't give the example of Avatar but I would say something like, (A Fantastic Woman, Sebastián Lelio, 2017) Chile*

So if this was asked in the exam I would probably say people choose foreign films because they are more likely to be better on choosing topics and more reformer in terms of the language of the film. Would it be wrong?

All the best,

bm,

Unless you're living in the US, I don't think you should classify foreign films according to the Academy Awards' definition.

However, as long as you make it clear what 'foreign films' means to you, it should be fine.

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