IELTS General Writing: 'accommodation' letter

I haven't done a lesson about the General Writing test for a while, so here's a recent exam question that a student sent me. I'll share my answer next week.

Remember that the examiner is looking for the following things:

• The tone must be appropriate (formal or informal)
• The purpose of the letter must be clear
• You must cover all of the points
• The letter must be well-organised
• You need to use some good (and relevant) vocabulary

Comments

[Lin]

Hi Simon
I bought your ALL reading lessons video and ALL writing task 2,and I found it is extremely useful.
So I decided to purchase your ALL writing task 1 lessons.
However,after I went through the single payment of 'ALL writing task 1 lessons'. Now I have access to all lessons except wr 1, lesson 2. Does this mean I should pay for that lesson separately?
Thanks
Lin

[Lin]

Sorry Simon. It's Lin, again.
I just refreshed that page. Now I have access to all of your lessons.
Please ignore my last comment. And sorry for any inconvenience, I should refreshed it several times before I left the message. ;)
Regards

[Marco Labaro]

Simon I know you are a busy person but I would like to ask if would I be penalized if I use the exact idiom for task 1 and task 2 of the writing module? I do not know if this is the right venue to ask. Thank you and I hope to hear from you soon.

[Ali]

Dear simon
I would like to ask you about speaking
I had my exam yesterday , but I could not use your techniques ( idea, explain, example ).
I think the examiner frequently interept me and is that normal ?
To illustrate
Q: adventurous people put other peoples lives in danger ?
A: I think its just like other sports , if they get good training and equipment and governments should support them , therefore the risks will be minimal just like crossing street.
He asked
Why government suppor as
They are just minority?
How you know about risks?

[sun]

a poem : in somewhere like thou

If someone like me losing everything, giving what I having.
in somewhere like thou seems God blessing upon ,having everything,
If thou know in somewhere like me who were suffering with the circumstances, it might be able to produce, bears the fruit now and then. it might be understanding what happened on you's

tomorrow is another day

[jiya khan]

Hi Simon.... I am a big fan of your blog.I need a suggestion.I need to improve my score at least 7.5 in all of four sections.At the moment I am in 6.5 and 7.0 so what should I do. I really want to do some course for IELTS but it seems to me that it would only help in improving the exam technique.What I should do to improve my score.Please need help and guidance.
Regards

[Ali Sarshogh]

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to apply to rent an accommodation with the assistance of your agency.

My name is Ali Sarshogh, I am university professor ,and recently I got my work visa to UK. The nationality of my family and I is Iranian.we are three people,my wife, my son and I are going to arrive London next month.

We are looking for a newly-built house which we are able to let it for long-term about 5 years. we would like to have a house with big yard, private parking, fully-fitted kitchen, at least two airy room and large living room.

Also we prefer to settle in residential area,Bahar zone, in south London As I need to arrive Mohajer University quickly.I hope you can find a reasonable house there.

I look forward to see your prompt offers.
Yours faithfully,
Ali Sarshogh

[Juli]

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing this letter with regard to the interest of renting a house in Toronto in October 2015. My name is James Watson and I come from Malaysia. I am married and have four children, and they will be accompanying me.

As I have a big family, I would like to rent a large house that has five bedrooms and two toilets. And then I prefer the house to have a garage that could fit for two cars, as I plan to purchase them in the future. I also prefer to have a house that has a swimming pool and a small backyard for my children to play.

For the location, I want the property to be near to a school, a train station and shopping malls as well. As I have done research in the internet, I found that the suburb of York or Scarborough will be an ideal location for me.

I would be grateful if you could inform me for some potential houses that I could rent in the next two weeks.

Thank you for your kind attention.

Yours Sincerely
James

[paul]

Dear Sir or Madam

My name is Paul from China. I am a civil servant. Next week, I will travel to Australia with my parents both aged 65 for couples of weeks

Now we are looking for an accommodation and need your help to find out an appropriate one for us. The requirements for type of accommodation and location are given as below.

We favor living in a hotel with amenities provided like pools, Wifi, and restaurants so that we can take advantage of during our stay. Furthermore, we would like to live in a family room rather than two single room.

When it comes to the location of accommodation, the hotel next to the Chinatown will be preferred. It will be much more convenient for my parents to go shopping there as they can’t speak English. Moreover, we also hope the hotel is close to the subway station so that we are able to access the transportation easily.

Your faithfully

Paul

[niuxiufeng]

Dear Mr or Miss

I am writing to you for renting an accommodation, my name is Tina, I am from china, And I will go to your country at next month for first time with my family, my husband, and my 3 years old son.

I want to rend a house with two bedrooms with basic furniture, a kitchen I can cook food, and I have no car so the garbage is not necessary, I prefer to quiet place , but not far from bus or train station, I need it must easy reach to supermarket, If my child has a place like park to play near there is best. about the price, I can accept from 200 dollars to 250 dollars per week. If everything is matched, I will live there for at least 1 year.

Due to I will live there for next month, Could I ask you for response me quickly.

my sincerely

Tina

[ziaul Huda]

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to rent a house in Belfast near queens University. MY name is zia and i come from India. I am married with three children.
As the size of family is quite big, I would like to rent a 4 bed room house with attach bath. I would also like the house with a garden and a garadge.
As regards to location, I would prefer to have a house in the vicinity of Queens university because I am employed in the department of Bio-Chemistry of this university.

I look forward to receiving a reply soon.

Yours faithfully,
Ziaul- Huda

[shani]

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to rent a house in melbourne. As me and my parents will be arriving in melbourne on 12 of august 2015.

i preferred one storey 2 bedroom house with a kitchen and two bathrooms, where we can easily access to the shops and public transport services. As you may know it is winter time it is necessary to have heating system in the house.
Also if you could assist with me with other options that you have that will be great.

i am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

regards,
Sam

[Leo]

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter with regard to get some assistance from you about house renting. I was a primary school teacher in my home country, but now I am a newcomer to New Zealand without job. There are three persons in my family-my son, my wife and I.
As I will live a long time in the house till I will have bought a new one, I’d like to propose some requirements for the accommodation. Firstly, it should be supported with convenient transport. Because I will take a variety of interview to find a new job, it will make me easier to arrive any place. And then, it should be not far from the kindergarten for my little son. For the reason that my wife will take care of him and do some homework as well, it can save time for her to send my son to school.
Further to the type of the house, I’d like to rent an apartment which is not too much big, but it should be served with at least two bedrooms and one entertainment room for living. Anyway, it is much better to supply with gyms room in the building. My wife and I both want to keep fit as our health plan.
I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully,
Jack Liu

[Rashid]

Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Rashid and I am an information security consultant. I have a small family with two children’s,
I have a job contract for one year from Karachi, Pakistan. So I am looking for some suitable accommodation. I am looking for dream house. It will be great if we get the house with garden where I can enjoy with my family. My budget is maximum 40,000 PKR. I am travelling to Karachi next month.
Furthermore, I am looking for 4 rooms, two bathrooms and central area where we all can sit and enjoy our evening tea. Keeping in mind the weather condition I prefer ground floor.
I am interested to get the rented property in a city centre where I can reach to my office and my children school. I heard that there is a huge traffic jam during office times. It will be great if there is a park as well and a nearby market is plus point.
I look forward to hearing from you.

Your's faithfully,

Rashid

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Please advise on that

[Azita]

Dear Madam or Sir,

I am writing to ask your help for providing us with a well enough rented residence. My name is Azita Ahmadi. I, my twelve-year-old sister and our parents are moving to your city in October. My father's job as a trader made us to make this decision a couple of months ago. So, I applied for 'Brinston University' and I am awaiting their response.
Since we have never been there before we are somehow concerned about our living place.
We would like it to be a single-detached dwelling with a garage and a balcony with city view. It would be great to be an at least two-bedroom house to fit us efficiently.

We mainly insist on the location to be close enough to the city centre so I can commute to my university easily.

Please give us any clue about available options as long as they fully meet our conditions. My postal address and other essential information are attached below.

Please feel free to ask any other detailed question if needed.

Yours Faithfully,
Azita

[Feli]

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing with regard to need your help looking for about our accomodation in Jakarta.

My name is Danish, I worked in one of advertising company in London. This month, I got promote become a General Manager for our branch company in Jakarta. I have two childs, and we need accomodation during stay on there. My family and I will move to Jakarta as soon as possible.

We planed to rent a house complete with a swimmingpool for my children and a garden to my wife. The house must have minimal 4 bedrooms there are one-mainbedroom, two-bedrooms for my children and one-guestroom. We will get cars for mobile during stay on Jakarta, so we need a garage to keep at least two cars, and fullfurnished kitchen too.

I prefer to rent a house at inner-city of Jakarta because it makes me easy to reach my office. And usually in capital city such as Jakarta have a good school for my children education’s and have a lot of shooping center to fills day-to-day needs.

We need your information about that soon. Thanks for your attention.

Yours faithfully,
John Danish

[Danisa]

Dear sir/madam

My name is Danisa, I am writing this letter to ask your assistance for finding a suitable and comfortable rented accomodation for me and my family.In the next two months, my family and I will move to London for a year since my father is getting promoted and will get a training there. My family consists of four people, my parents, my older sister and me.

I prefer to not a really big house since we are not a big family. A house with 3 bedrooms, 2 restrooms, a living room and a kitchen would be best for us. It would be better if there is a mini garden since my mother loves to gardening.

Because we will not bring our cars with us, i hope it will be an easy access to any public transportation to ease us for mobilization.

I hope i can get a good news from you as soon as possible. Please contact if you have any information or questions.

Best regards,

Danisa

[A.F.Saberi]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to ask for your help in regard to finding a house in Ontario, Canada.

My name is Saberi, I am married and have a small Daughter. Next month we are planning to move to Canada permanently, therefore for time being, we are looking for a rented accommodation.

It would be great if you help us find a house with 2 bedrooms and a large living room with a small backyard for my daughter to play in. It should have a garage too and should be near to the city center. With regards to location, I suggest that you look for a house in Mississauga, as we have some of our relatives living there.

Awaiting your positive reply.

Your's Faithfully
A.F.Saberi

[Grace]

Is it right，if I write that my family and I would take our trip to Australia ? (The whole family is my husband and me.)
I mean , what's the exact meaning of the words "move to" here ? whether including a trip or a vacation ? or only means you would spent a long time in a new place, such as immigration or move from one country to another country for a new job ?

[Simon]

Grace,

"move to" means that you are going to live in that country, not just for a holiday or trip.

[Grace]

Thanks,Simon.^_^