Can you correct the mistakes in the sentences below, or rewrite the sentences to improve them?
- I would like to talk about a change in my local district which is building a hospital.
- I'd like to talk about the development in education system which I really hope to see next time in my hometown.
- There would be some changes as building new high rises in the area.
- The actual system is to blame of the chaotic traffic.
- Moreover it is also environment friendly so I recommend for park.
- Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about that. I think our community needs the park.
1. I'd like to talk about a change about a hospital building in my local district
2. I'd like to talk about development for an education system which I really hope to see next time in my hometown.
3.There would be some changes as the number of new high buildings are rising in the area.
4. The actual system is chaotic traffic which are blamed
5. Moreover, it is also environment-friendly, so I recommend park.
6. Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about that. I think our community need the park.
Posted by: Seoyoung | August 07, 2015 at 10:06
1. I'd like to talk about a change brought by the hospital building in my local district.
2. I'd like to talk about development of the education system, which I really hope to see in my hometown next time.
3.There have been some changes as a result of the increasing number of new high rise buildings in the area.
4.Actually, the system is to be blamed for the chaotic traffic.
5.I recommend park as it is environment-friendly.
6. Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about it. I think our community needs the park.
Posted by: Shweta | August 07, 2015 at 10:18
1. I would like to talk about a change in my local district, building a hospital.
2.I would like to talk about the development in education system which I hope to see next time in my hometown.
3. Building high rises will be the new changes in the area.
4.The chaotic traffic is blamed for the Actual System.
5. Furthermore, it is also environment friendly so i recommend it for park.
6.That is a very tricky question, let me think about that. In my opinion, we need a park.
Posted by: Kenny | August 07, 2015 at 10:43
1. I would to talk about a change in my local district where a hospital is being built.
2. I'd like to talk about the development which I really hope to see next time in the education system in my hometown.
3. There would be some changes as a new high building rises in the area.
4. The actual system is to blame for the chaotic traffic.
5. Moreover, it is also environmentally friendly, so I recomend for the park.
6. Well, it is a very tricky question, let me think about that. I think our community needs a park.
Posted by: greenbamboo | August 07, 2015 at 10:45
1. I like to talk about a change that I would like to happen in my local district would be a new hospital.
Posted by: NS | August 07, 2015 at 10:57
2. I like to talk about a development that I would like to happen in the education system in my home town and I hope it will become a reality during next year.
Posted by: NS | August 07, 2015 at 11:02
1) I would like to talk about a change in local district which is a hospital building
2) I would like to talk about development for an education system which i really hope to see next time in my hometown.
3) There will be some changes as new buildings are rising high in the area
4) The chaotic traffic is blamed for the Actual System
5) Adding to the previous points, parks are also environemtn friendly that is why i recommend them.
6) That is a very tricky question, let me think about that. In my opinion, we need a park.
Posted by: Ankur | August 07, 2015 at 14:02
5) Adding to the previous points, parks are also environment friendly that is why i recommend them.
Posted by: Ankur | August 07, 2015 at 14:03
1- I would like to talk about a change in my local district which will be building OF a hospital.
2- I'd like to talk about the development in education system which I really hope to see IN THE NEAR FUTURE in my hometown.
3- There would be some changes as building OF new high rises in the area.
4- The actual system is BLAMED FOR chaotic traffic.
5- Moreover, it is ENVIRONMENTALLY friendly, so I recommend for park.
6- Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about that. I think our community needs the park.
IRRELEVANT ANSWER WITH SOME MEMORIZED CLAUSES.
A question: How much really this kind of mistakes in speaking can down our score?
Posted by: Aria | August 07, 2015 at 14:40
Dear doan :
ABOUT YOUR 6TH AUGUST ESSAY. MAY BE YOU WILL FIND IT HELPFUL.
please do not mind my comments.
I think you will get 6, because your essay addresses all parts of the question. You supported your ideas very well. Although cohesion is not well managed, We can see progression in your essay which is a positive point.
We can see some grammatical errors.
1. Check third line of your essay . you should not use also and too together.
2. Check fourth line of the second paragraph . very simple is not correct there. In same line the ball seem is not correct (subject verb agreement)
3. Check the fifth line in same paragraph . he doesn’t have to train too , is wrong
4. Last sentence in the second paragraph. when someone want to , wrong
5. Third paragraph several different ways at first so. Is not proper
6. Last sentence in third paragraoph. are also the necessary too . wrong
7. Conclusion is wrong completely. You used while and then you started another sentence by but
good luck
Posted by: NEE | August 07, 2015 at 15:52
maybe
Posted by: NEE | August 07, 2015 at 15:55
1. I would like to talk about a change in building a hospital in my local district.
2. I would like to talk about the development/progress of education system in my hometown in which I really look forward to seeing next time.
3.There will be some changes in the area of new high rises building.
4.The chaotic traffic is to blame in the actual system.
5. Moreover, I would recommend a park for being environmentally friendly.
6. Well, it is a very tricky question, but I think our community needs a park.
Posted by: ena | August 07, 2015 at 17:51
1.I would like to talk about a change that a hospital is being built in my local district.
2.I'd like to talk about the development in education system which I really hope to move better in my hometown.
3.There would be some changes as the new high rising buildings in the area.
4.The actual system is to regulate the chaotic traffic.
5.Moreover, it is environmental friendly. So I recommend it for the park.
6.Well, it's a very tricky question, let me see. I think the park is needed in our community.
Posted by: Leo | August 07, 2015 at 21:10
5.Moreover, it is environmentally friendly. So I recommend it for the park.
Posted by: Leo | August 07, 2015 at 21:16
I would like to talk about a change in my local district，which is building a hospital.
Posted by: Leo | August 07, 2015 at 21:41
1. I would like to talk about a change in my local district. There is a building a hospital.
2. I'd like to talk about the development in education system, and I really hope to see next time in my hometown.
3. There would be some changes. People are building new high rises in the area.
4. The actual system is blamed of the chaotic traffic.
5. It is also environment friendly. That is why I recommend for park.
6. Well, it's a good question, let me think about it. I think our community needs a park.
Posted by: YuDang | August 08, 2015 at 02:44
dear simon
i am extremely happy to share my result
L-7.5
R-8.5
W-7
S-7.5
I was struggling with my writing for long time..this website helped me to achieve my goal.
thanks a lot for your great lessons and motivating words...God bless you..
Posted by: lil | August 08, 2015 at 05:19
1. I would like to talk about the change of my local district which is building a hospital.
2. I'd like to talk about the development of education system that I really hope to see next time in my hometown.
3. There would be some changes as the high new buildings rise in the area.
4. The problem of actual system is the chaotic traffic.
5. Moreover it is also important being environmentaly friendly so I recommend for building a park.
6. Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about that. I think our community needs a park.
Posted by: herry | August 08, 2015 at 11:56
FROM SIMON:
Here are my sentences:
1) I would like to talk about a change in my local district, which is THE building OF a hospital.
2) I'd like to talk about A development in THE education system which I really hope to see in my hometown.
(I deleted "next time")
3) There would be some changes, SUCH as THE building OF new high-rise APARTMENTS in the area.
(use "high-rise" as an adjective, not a noun)
4) The CURRENT system is to blame FOR the chaotic traffic.
5) A new park would also be good for the local environment.
(I changed this sentence completely)
6) I think our community needs A park.
(Try not to use large 'filler' phrases like "Well, it's a very tricky question, let me think about that.")
Posted by: Simon | August 08, 2015 at 12:04
Congratulations lil !!
Posted by: Simon | August 08, 2015 at 12:11
Thanks,Simon.
i benefit from it a lot.
Posted by: starq | August 08, 2015 at 14:22
I need someone to practice a speaking part with him/her. Is there any one would like to do so that???
Posted by: noor | August 08, 2015 at 17:01
yes i would to practice with you if it is ok for you
Posted by: melad eid | August 08, 2015 at 20:09
Why simon does not write conclusion for task 1?
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