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February 18, 2016

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1) Wrong: do not use that, it is not about the trend,
2) candidates should elaborate charts for someone who cant see the graph. so, the figures is wrong.
3) in the UK
4) the total amount of time spent on three types of call
5) shows, the amount of time ( not the amount if phone call), made , in ( not into), in three main groups which are .....

maybe i'm wrong, but it seems to me that the second sentence is pretty nice except that "splitted" should be split.

1- The bar chart illustrates the trend in call types in the united kingdom for 8 years, from 1995 to 2002.
2- The bar chart compares the figures in terms of minutes spent on telephone calls, divided into three types.
3- The bar chart gives information about telephone calls. It is in three types Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes from the year 1995 to 2002 in UK.
4- The graph compares the total amount of time in 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.
5- The bar chart presents the amount of phone calls, in billion of minutes, made in the UK over a period of seven years into the categories of local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

1.The bar chart illustrates amount of phone calls in terms of call types in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
2.The bar chart compares the minutes spent by people in the UK in terms of telephone calls, split into three types.
3.The bar chart gives information about the amount of time spent on telephone calls in the UK. It is in three types Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes from year 1995 to 2002.
(I still regard the second sentence as a strange one but I cannot find more mistakes. )
4.The graph compares the total amount of time in 3 call types in the UK over a 8-year period since 1995.
5.The bar chart shows the amount of time spent on phone calls made in the UK over a period of 8 years in billion of minutes in three categories, namely local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

1.The bar chart illustrates the trend of call types in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
2.The bar chart compares the figures in terms of minutes spent on telephone calls of three types.
3.The bar chart gives information about telephone calls from year 1995 to 2002 in UK. There are three types, Local, National & International and Mobile call.
4.The graph compares the total amount of time spent on three call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.
5.The bar chart presents the amount of time making phone calls in the UK over a period of seven years in three categories,local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

Hi Simon!
Many thanks for such informative websites , it makes me feel optimistic that obtaining higher ielts score depends on my hard work .
On the base of your e-book and useful tips I have wrote some writing
Task 2 .... So for checking my writing , shall I pay through your paybal then send them to your email ? Please .
That would be very kind of you .

The bar chart illustrates that the trend of call types in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
1.The sentence is fragment and miss information.
The bar chart provides information about the trend of the amount of call time on three different call categories in UK for an eight-year period, from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart compares the figures in terms of minutes spent on telephone calls, splitted into three types.
2.Miss some information
The bar chart compares the figures (in million minutes) of call time from three categories by people in the UK from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart gives information about telephone calls. It is in three types Local, National & International and Mobile call minutes from year 1995 to 2002 in UK.
3.Some grammar errors and meaning is not clear
The bar chart gives information call time from three categories in the UK between 1995 and 2002.

The graph compares the total using time of 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.
4.The meaning of the sentence is no clear.
The graph compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of telephone over an 8-year period from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart presents the amount of phone calls in billion of minutes make in the UK over a period of seven years into the categories of local, national/international and mobile phone calls.
5.“The amount of phone calls” is different from “the amount of time of telephone calls”
The bar chart presents the amount of call time (billion minutes), from three categories, spent in the UK over a period of eight years.

ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

The main problem seems to be that people are making the sentence too 'difficult'. If you read my introduction (at the bottom of the lesson), it's easier and clearer than the students' sentences. Just keep your introduction as simple as possible!

Here are the problems:

1. The main problem is the use of the word "that". Just write "The bar chart illustrates the amount of time / the trend" etc.

2. The main mistake is the word "splitted". The past and past participle are "split" and "split".

3. The main problem is the phrase "It is in three types Local..." I don't know what the word "it" refers to.

4. The phrase "the total using time of 3 call types" isn't right.

5. Problems with "make" and "into the categories.

FROM SIMON (continued):

Here are my suggestions:

1) The bar chart illustrates trends in different types of phone call in the United Kingdom over 8 years from 1995 to 2002.

2) The bar chart compares figures for UK phone calls in terms of minutes spent on three types of call (between1995 and 2002).

3) The bar chart gives information about three types of telephone call, namely local, national/international and mobile calls, in the UK between 1995 and 2002.

4) The chart compares the total number of minutes of three types of phone call made in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995.

5) The bar chart shows the amount of time spent on three types of phone call, in billions of minutes, in the UK over a period of seven years.

did not you say :namely: is wrong

1. The bar chart illustrates the time spent of 3 types call in the united kingdom for 8 years from 1995 to 2002.
2. The bar chart compares the time spent on telephone calls, splitted into three types.
3. The bar chart gives information about the time spent for telephone call in three types: Local, National & International and Mobile call from year 1995 to 2002 in UK.
4. The graph compares the time spent of 3 call types in the UK over a 7-year period from 1995 to 2002
5. The bar chart presents the amount time of phone calls made in the UK over a period of seven years into the categories of local, national/international and mobile phone calls.

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