IELTS Writing Task 2: correct the mistakes

Here are some sentences that people wrote in the 'comments' area below the lesson on this page. Can you find and correct the mistakes?

1. Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.
2. Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal with smoking ban.
3. Firstly, when people not respecting others privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
4. They go to these places for having a good time such as playing a game by smartphone.
5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have.

Comments

[Inca]

It would be much better grammatically, if they were written as follow:

1- Mobile phones are now wildly used through out the world.

2-Prohibiting mobile phones use in public, which I think, is not as similar as the smoking prohibition.

3- Talking too loudly on mobile phones in public is breaking the other's privacy and disrespecting them.

4-Some places provide a good environment for people to play with Android games.

5- Passive smoking has been considered as the main reason behind prohibiting smoking in public, whereas use mobile phones in public does not have the latter effect.

[Charlie]

My answers

1.Mobile phones have been widely used by the people around the world.

2.Prohibiting mobile phone usage in public places cannot be compared with l smoking ban.

3.Firstly, when people not respecting each other’s privacy by talking out loud or not using their phones in vibration mode while they are in public areas.

4 They go to these places to have some good time such as playing a game on a smartphone.

5.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places causes passive smoking, which has a negative effect on public health, whereas the mobile phones does not have the same effect

[Châu]

Here are my answers:
1. Mobile phones have been widely used by people around the world.
2. Prohibiting mobile phones in public places is not the same as imposing a ban on smoking.
3. Firstly, people may not respect others' privacy when talking too loudly on the phone or not using vibration mode in public areas.
4. They go to these places to have a good time through activities such as playing games on smartphones.
5. While smoking should be banned in certain places due to the negative effects that passive smoking has on public health, mobile phones should not be prohibited in the same way since they do not affect the health of the community.

[Eason]

The following is my answers

1.Mobile phones are commonly used in our generation.
2.Mobile phone prohibited in public places is unequal to smoking banned.
3.Firstly, people may not respect other's privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode in public areas.
4.They go to the places in order to having a good time which can play a game by smartphone.
5.The main reason to ban smoking in public places is because passive smoking has negative effects on health for others,but mobile phones have no problems like it.

[lynn.tk]

1. Mobile phones have widely been used around the world.
2. The prohibition of mobile phones in public places is unequal to smoking ban.
3. Firstly, people may not respect others' privacy by talking loudly or not using vibration mode in public areas.
4. They can have a good time by playing a game on smartphone in these places.
5.The main reason to ban public smoking is that it has negative influences on the health of both smokers and others, but mobile phones cause no such damaging effects.

[Tyler Jason]

Here are my answres;

1.Mobile phones are widely used by people around world.

2.Prohibiting using mobile phones in public place is not different from banning smoking.

3.Firstly, People may trespass other's privacy by calling loudly or not using 'vibration mode' .

4.They go to these places in order to enjoy their time under relaxed atmosphere,which they can play games with smart phones as much as they like.

5.The key reason why smoking should not be allowed in certain places is passive smoking that causes negative effects on people's health around smokers while using mobile phones not harm people at least for eason of health around smart phone users.

[Eddy]

Hi all,

1. Mobile phone has been widely used around the world.

2. Prohibiting using mobile phone in public places is different from banning smoking.

3. Firstly, people who talk aloud or do not use vibration model in public areas are considered as disrespectful to others.

4. They go to these places to have a good time, such as playing a game with their smartphone.

5.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is because passive smoking impacts on the public's health, while the use of mobile phones do not have such an implication.

[Cassie]

1.Mobile phones have been widely...
2.The prohibiting of moblie phones in public places is unequal to the smoking ban.
3.Firstly, people show no respect to other's privacy when talking loudly or not using vibration mode in public areas.
4.They go to these places for having a time rather than playing games by smartphone.
5.The main reason for smoking ban in certain places is that passive smoking has a negtive effect on public health which mobile phones do not have.

[Tom]

1.Mobile phones have been widely used by people around the world.

2.Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is not the same as banning smoke.

3.Firstly, the impolite activities such as talking loudly in a public area and ringing noisily disturb other people.

4.They go to these places for fun such as playing the games on smartphones.

5.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is that secondhand smoke has bad effects on human beings’ health while mobile phones do not.

[Hasan]

1. The mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.
2. Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal with the smoking ban.
3. Firstly, people are not respecting others privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
4. They go to these places for having such a good time as playing a game by a smartphone.
5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have that much side effect.

[Cyril]

1.Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.
Ans: Mobile Phone is widely used by people around the world.
2.Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal with smoking ban.
Ans:Prohibiting the use of mobile phone in public places is not equal with banning smoking.
3.Firstly, when people not respecting others privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
Ans:Firstly, people disrespect others privacy by talking aloud or not putting their mobile phones in a vibration mode while in public places.
4.They go to these places for having a good time such as playing a game by smartphone.
Ans: They visit these places with the intention of having a good time such as playing games using smartphones.

5.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have.
Ans:The main reason of banning smoking in certain places is that passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have.

[Lucy]

1.Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.

2.Prohibiting the use of mobile phone in public place is unequal to smoking ban.

3.Firstly, people do not respect other people as they talk loudly over the phone or do not put their phone on silence mode while they are in public areas.

4.They go to these places for having a good time such as playing games on smartphone.

5.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is that passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while the use of mobile phones does not have such passive effect.

[Jimmy]

1.Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.
->Mobile phone has been widely used around the world.

2.Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal with smoking ban.
->Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal TO smoking banning.

3.Firstly, when people not respecting others privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
->Firstly, people might not respect others privacy when talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.

4.The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not have.
->The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while the use of mobile phones do not have the same effect on people.

[phuong trang]

Dear Mr simon,
1- by people-can delete
2- unequal-can replace "unfair".
3- not respecting - don't respect
4- by smartphone -with smartphone
5- to ban is passive smoking has a negative effect- ban ...is that passive smoking has a negative effect

[Maximoff]

1. Recently, mobile phones have been widely used around the world
2. Prohibiting mobile phones in public places is not the same as imposing a ban on smoking
3. Firstly, some people affect others’ privacy by speaking aloud when getting the phone call or not using vibration (silent) mode in public areas
4. They go to these places to play games installed on smartphones for fun
5. The main reason for smoking bans in the certain places is that passive smoking has negative effects on public health while mobile phones do not have such impacts

[Sukhdeep Singh Deol]

My Answers:
Mobile Phones have been widely used around the world.

[Simon]

CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

First I'll explain the problems.

1. We need to use the plural 'mobile phones', and it would be best to use the present simple.

2. Use the plural 'mobile phones'. Also, we need to change the word 'unequal' - this isn't the right word here.

3. This is not a correct sentence: Because of the word 'when', there needs to be some kind of result at the end of the sentence (when people..... what happens?).

4. Change 'for having' and 'by smartphone'.

5. Add the word 'that' after 'the main reason...is'. Also, delete 'have' from the end of the sentence.

[Simon]

FROM SIMON (continued)

Here are my suggestions for improved sentences:

1. Mobile phones are widely used by people around the world.

2. Prohibiting mobile phones in public places is not comparable (OR: cannot be compared) with the smoking ban.

3. Firstly, when people talk aloud or forget to use vibration mode in public areas, it shows a lack of respect for other people's privacy.

4. They go to these places to have a good time; for example, they play games on their smartphones.

5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is THAT passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, whereas mobile phones do not.

[thu linh]

1. The mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world.
2. Prohibiting mobile phones in public places is unequal to the smoking ban.
3. Firstly, when people do not respect others' privacy by talking loudly or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
4. They go to these places for having a good time such as playing a game by their smartphone.
5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is that passive smoking has a negative effect on people's health, while mobile phones do not.

[Zhanxu Liu]

1. Mobile phone has been commmonly used worldwide.
2. Prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal to smoking ban.
3. Firstly, when people do not respect others' privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.
4. They go to these places for having a good time by, such as, playing a game on smartphones.
5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is that passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while mobile phones do not.

[Mina George]

Hi Simon,

When i study from Longman dictionary for phrasal verbs i find some of them have the word "formal" written at the beginning, while others, do not.

would you please tell me whether i can use the latter in my essay writing?
examples: (get along with, catch up with, bring about)?

Thank you.

[Uraif Umair]

1 - Nowadays, mobile phones are used by a large number of people around the world.

2 - Prohibiting the usage of mobile phones in public is different than the ban on smoking.

3 - It is a bad manner to talk loud over the phone in public as it annoys people in surroundings.

4 - People can spend good time by playing mobile games.

5 - Passive smoking is banned in public places because of it is injurious for the health, however, mobile phones do not have such severe side effects.

[KP]

1. Mobile phones have been widely used by the people all over the world.

2. Prohibiting smart phones in public places should not be as the same level as with smoking.

3. In some instances, some individuals, who ride in a public utility vehicle, usually talked very loud over the phone or play some games with its volume set up at the highest level without knowing that he or she is already a nuisance to other commuters. In order to prevent these from happening, these people should tone down the level of their voice when talking to someone over their phone and perhaps put off the volume or rather use a head set when playing some game applications.

4. Nowadays, some game applications in android phones require you to go out in an open field or public area for you to be able to play the game. For instance, "Pokemon Go" - a game application that demands you to catch a "Pokemon" - an animal-like character, in the streets. At the same time, with the use of Wi-Fi connection, you have to compete in a tournament with other individuals battling with them using these Pokemons.

5. Personally, I think that the main reason why smoking is banned in some public places is because it has this bad mixtures of chemicals that are emitted in the air and which can be inhaled by passive smokers. However, unlike smart phones, it does not have the capacity to eject smoke, which is not good for an individual's health.

[Ruby]

1. Mobile phone has been used by people around the world.
2. Prohibiting to use mobile phone in public places is not like smoking ban.
3. Firstly, it is the time that people don’t respect other’s privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode for mobile phone in public area.
4. They go to these places for having fun such as playing a game using smartphone.
5. The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is because smoking has a negative effect on people’s health, while mobile phone does not have.