IELTS Writing Task 1: overview practice

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

(Source: http://www.paulchefurka.ca/Food_Energy.html)

Task:
Using the advice in last week's lesson, how would you write an overview / summary of the information shown on the graph?

Comments

[Bikram]

The graph illustrates world's oil and food prices changes from 2000 to 2011. We can see that there are a lot of fluctuations in cost these years.

[Duc Ho]

The graph illustrates changes in worldwide food and oil prices over the period from year 2000 to 2011. It is clear that the overall prices of both food and oil have a significant increase in eleven years.

[amr]

The line graph demonstrates worldwide prices of oil and food over an eleven year period between 2000 and 2011.

Overall,it is clear that both trends increased steadily over the peroid in question. Additionally, the trends show almost similar figures throughout the period.

[hakancan]

The graph illustrates worldwide food and oil price trends for 11 years, from 2000 to 2011. Overall, Its clear that both oil and food prices follow nearly same trends within period.

[Daniel]

The diagram above illustrates the changes in Food Price Index and average oil price from 2000 to 2011. It is clear that both numbers are highly correlated and share similar trends of growth and decline trends during the 11 year period.

[Chaiane]

Overall, both goods increased theirs prices throughout the period shown. Furthermore they seemed to mirror each other during the fluctuations.

[Chaiane]

Overall, both goods had their prices increased throughout the period shown. Furthermore it is noticeable that their numbers seemed to mirror each other.

[Jenny]

Overall, we can see that both food price and oil price in the world grew during 11years, although with some fluctuations. It is clear that the price of oil is similar to the price of food in these years.

[Chaiane]

Simon,
Please, a simple question.

Should we use while or whilst on the writing?

Thank you
Chai

[Tony]

Overall, it is clear from the graph that alterations in the world food and oil prices followed almost a similar pattern over a period observed.

[Nam Anh]

Overall, the cost of food and oil both went up significantly between 2000 and 2008. However, from the midlle of 2008 onwards, sharp fluctuation can be seen in the price of each item.

[Phuc Thao]

Overall we can see that the price of both food and oil was similar over the period shown. Beside, there were rapid changes at the end of the period.

[Stephen]

It is clear that both graphs have a similar trend from the beginning to the end of the period. We can also see that between 2008 and 2009 there is a significant fall in both food and oil prices.

[Linh nguyen]

In general, the prices of the food and oil fluctuated wildly with the upward trend. at the same time the price of the food was higher than the one of the oilmost of the period from 2000 to 2011.

[Rahul]

it is clear that the prices for food and oil in the world rose gradually over a period of 11 years. it is also noticeable that the average oil price for a barrel overtook the cost of food by the end of the given time span.

[Mohammad Vicky]

The line graph compares the global price in terms of food index and oil from 2000 to 2011.

It is clear that the trend of world food and oil prices increased significantly over the 11-year period. In particular, the most significant rise was food price index.

[comet]

Overall, it is clearly seen that the cost of food and oil rose significantly despite fluctuations in the trend until 2008,however, the prices dropped sharply prior to a steady growth in price index of both commodities in the last two years

[Katherina]

The line graph compares worldwide prices of food and oil from 2000 to 2011.

It is clear that overal prices for both food and oil increased dramatically over the period shown. Also, the figure for food was higher for most of the period.

In 2000, the average price of a barrel of oil was around $95, whereas the figure for food price index stood at about $90. Over the next 8 years, there was a significant increase in the price of oil , to reached its highest level at approximately $230 per barrel, compared to about $220 for food in the year 2008.

Over the following three years, the figures for both food and oil fluctuated. By the year 2011, the food price peaked at around $140, By contrast, the figure for a barrel of oil fell to just under $100.

Kind regards

[Vivian]

The line graph compares the international food price index and average oil price from 2000 to 2011.

Overall, there is a strong correlation between the food price index and oil price. Both figures showed a significant increasing trend throughout the period and a peak in 2008.

[kuznetsova]

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[Kim Van]

The line graph gives information about the global prices of food and oil from 2000 to 2011.
It is noticeable that there was an upward trend in the prices of food and oil over the 11-year period. From 2007 to 2011, figures for food and oil experienced dramatic fluctuations in their prices.

[Vivian]

Hi Simon,
Should we use 'average oil price' according to the bar chart or 'oil prices(plural)' according to the question?
I think I made a mistake in my last post. But not sure.

[Ba Nguyen]

Hi Simon.

This is the first tine I made a comment on your website. I'm going to take the test in 3 months but I'm not quite confident about the chance of achieving 7+. Hopefully you can check my writing below because I'm not sure if I paraphrased the questions correctly.

The line graph illustrates different developments in food and oil prices worldwide over a period of 11 years.

It is obvious that food price index fell to the lowest points between 2002 and 2003. Similarly, the average price of oil also saw a plunge in 2002.

Thanks,

[JUNG]

It is clear that both food and oil prices increased over the 11-year period. It is also interesting to see that the prices of food and oil were closely related.

[quan]

Hi Simon,

I am wondering if it is correct to write "...The food and oil prices had the POSITIVE CORRELATION..." in this case.
According to my understanding, POSITIVE CORRELATION means food prices increase due to oil prices increase while NEGATIVE CORRELATION illustrates the opposite meaning.

Please kindly advise me.

Thanks with best regards

[Kevin Pham]

The line graph gives information about the food price index and oil price in the world from 2000 to 2011.

It is clear from the graph that both food price index and oil price increase significantly during the research period, despite fluctuations.

[Miao]

Hi Simon.
Here's my answer:

the line chart illustrates the trend of the worldwide price of food and oil during the following 10 years from 2000.

Thank you

[Siliang]

It is clear that both food and oil prices worldwide increased during a 11-year period

[Cuong Pham]

The line graph depicts the worldwide index of food price and oil price from 2000 to 2011.

Overall, the number of food and oil price increased significantly over the period shown, while the figure for oil price reached a peak in middle of 2008. In addition, the gap between them became more wider at the end of the period.

[saud]

the line graph represents fluctuations in global prices of food and oil over eleven years.

It clear that both increased gradually then a sharp drop happened before the prices reached their peak in 2011.

[Ahmed Abbas]

The line graph illustrates the relation between the food and oil prices between the years 2000 and 2011. it is clear from the chart that there is close correlation between the prices of oil and food staff.

[John keng]

Overview, both of food and oil prices mostly kept steadily and experienced a gentle rise in the first part of the period, while a huge fluctuation was showed in the second part of the period. Moreover, the price trend between oil and food was positive correlation and the correlation was very high.

[John keng]

Oho, the upside answer the first word is "Overall".

[rainman9t]

It is clear that there was a significant correlation between worldwide food and oil prices, and both of them saw an overall upward trend during the given period.

[[email protected]]

The line chart illustrates changes which took place in prices of food and oil in the world over a period of eleven years.
overall, the price of food and oil increased gradually year by year with an exception for 2009, which dipped.

[faeze]

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable increase in the price of both food and oil, and it is interesting that food price leapfrogged oil price.

[Heron]

The chart illustrates changes in global food and oil prices from 2000 to 2011.
Overall, it is clear that the changes in two prices saw the extremely similar trend: growing, soaring, slumping and growing in almost the same time and finally to stand at higher point than in the beginning.

[Lucy]

Overall,the prices for food and oil in general show upward trend over 11-year period.Similar patterns can be seen for both trends.

[jane]

The line graph provides information about the food and oil prices in the whole world form 2000 to 2011.
Overall, there was a significant correlation between food price index and average oil price in the given period, both of which were on an upward trend with some fluctuations in the later years.

[mary]

the line graph compares the international costs of food and oil during 2000 and 2011, a period of 10 years. Overall, it is noticeable that apart from vast fluctuations for both these items, they experienced increasing pattern during this decade. In addition, although the food price started a little lower than oil price, it ended up at far higher cost than oil,

[14317]

Generally, the price of both oil and food has been increased considerably during the period of 10 years. There is also a striking correlate relationship between the fluctuation of the two index.

[Simon]

FROM SIMON:

Thanks for sharing your overview paragraphs. I've do a quick "correct the mistakes" exercise using some of the sentences that people wrote. You can find it here:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/04/ielts-grammar-overview-mistakes.html

I'll show you my introduction and overview next Thursday.

[ALEX]

Overall, the two commodities followed a similar trend from the beginning to the end of the period, with food price index slightly higher than average oil price.

[Rose]

The graph illustrates changes in world's food and oil prices during the period of 2000 to 2011.Overall we can see that the prices increased significantly, especially in 2007, though a big fall in 2008.

[Suwijak]

The graph illustrates the changes in global food and oil price between 2000 until 2011.

Overall, It is clear that the price of food and oil had same trends. They had increased since 2000 until the mid of 2008. And drastically decreased till 2009. Besides, after 2009 they have rapid changes until 2011.

Look in more details, There are three significant changes over the past 11 years. Between 2000 to 2004 there is a nearly constant changes at 30 barrel of oil price and around 90 FPI. In 2004 to 2008, the prices of oil and food were drastically increased three times price and doubled points respectively. Within approximately half-year after 2008, the prices of both dramatically fell down but in 2009 it seems that the food price has smaller ratio in decreasing than the oil price , which is almost the same (40usd) as in 2005.
However, the prices in the following period increased gradually and oil price reached the highest record, while food price remains almost the same as in 2008.

[zt]

The graph below illustrates that both oil and food prices increased over the 11-year period shown. The trend of these prices shows that these two are highly correlated.

[Nourhan]

The line chart illustrates the total price variations of the two domain products,(food and oil) over the 11 year- period. Overall we can clearly see that there are significant transformations in 2008 and 2009.

[VyLee]

The line chart compares global prices in food and oil and how these rates changed from 2000 to 2011.
In general, the prices of both food and oil increased over the period of 11 years. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general growth, the world prices of food in most years was higher than that of oil.

[Tine]

The line graph gives information about the trends in food and oil prices worldwide over the 11-year period. Overall, it is clear that the world food and oil cost increased significantly, with some fluctuations, from the year 2000 to 2011. Moreover, we can see that the growth of the two entities were correlated.

[A]

Hello Simon,
I have a question.can I write the overall right away after the introduction. because it is more orgnized for me, so I can know what I can to say in the main body. also as a matter of time.
thanks a lot

[Vino]

Info relating to the increase in the worldwide prices of food and oil is shown in the graph. From the comparison it is clear that both figures show a similar trend with slight fluctuations.

[RA]

The graph shows the changing of average oil price and food price index during 2000 to 2011. Both of commodities had risen for a decade.

[Joan]

The graph displays the pattern and correlation of global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

2011 witnessed the overall rise of global food and oil prices over the past decade, from approximately 90 points to almost 140 points and $30 per barrel to $100 respectively. Notably, there’s a sharp hump in the middle of 2008, reaching 220 points for food price index and $120 for oil price. However, this upsurge did not last long and was followed by a major setback. The lowest figure occurred in 2009 with the number at 140 pts and $40. However, since 2009, the trend kept going upward.

It can be inferred that food price index is highly correlated to average oil price with the correlation figure at 93.6%.

[Nguyn762]

Are there any subjects else that we can use for this text?

[Toufiq Ul Alam]

Dear Mr.Simon,
I am Toufiq from Bangladesh. In one 'task 1' answer of yours a table (regarding few countries spending on tobacco/food/drinks etc, clothing/footware) was explained.

I want to know when article 'the' in front of 'most' is used.
Regards,
Toufiq Ul Alam.