IELTS Writing Task 1: line graph 'details' mistakes

Here are some sentences that people wrote below last week's lesson. Can you correct the mistake(s) in each sentence?

1. In 2000, oil price was slightly higher than food price.
2. Over 6-years later, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
3. The index of price rose by 36 points at the same period.
4. After the trough in 2009, food price indicate an abrupt increase in 2011.
5. The average oil price came to about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6. The food price index arrived at approximately 240 points.
7. This is the lowest figures throughout the period as a whole.

Comments

[Veda]

1,in 2000,oil price was higher than food price.
2. Over a period of 6 years there was dramatic increase in food price.
3. The food price index rose by 36 points in the same period.
4.After the drop in 2009,food price experienced an abrupt increase in 2011.
5.the average oil price reached to about $72 in the middle of 2006
6.The food price index reached around 240 points.
7.This was the lowest figure in the given period.

[Kami]

1.In 2000, the oil price was slightly higher than food price.
2. 6 years later, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
3. Price for both items rose by 36 points at the same period.
4.After 2009, food price indicates an abrupt increase till 2011.
5.The average of oil price came to about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6.The food price's index arrived at approximately 240 points.
7.This is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[sujit]

In 2000, oil price was slightly higher than food price
Over 6-years later, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
1.The index of price rose by 36 points during the same period.
2.After the trough in 2009, food price indicated an abrupt increase in 2011.
3.The average oil price came to about $72 in the middle of 2006.
4.The food price index averaged approximately 240 points.
5.It is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[sujit]

dramatic increase in oil price

[Sarafat Hossain]

1. In 2000, the oil price was slightly higher than the food price.

2. Six years later, there was a dramatic increase in oil price.

3. The index of price rose by 36 points at the same time.

4. After the trough in 2009, food price increased abruptly in 2011.

5. The average oil price came to about $72 in the middle of 2006.

6. The food price index arrived at 240 points approximately.

7. This is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[Lucy]

1.In 2000, the oil price was slightly higher than the food price.
2.Over a period of 6 years, there had been a dramatic increase in oil price.
3.The food price index rose by 36 points at the end of the period.
4.The food price index increased significantly in 2011.
5.The average oil price went up to about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6.The food price index reached to approximately 240 points.
7.This is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[Andrew]

1. In 2000, the oil price was slightly higher than the food price.
2. 6 years later, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
3. The index of price rose by 36 points in the same period.
4. After the trough in 2009, food price saw an abrupt increase in 2011.
5. The average oil price reached about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6. The food price index reached about 240 points.
7. This is the lowest figure throughout the whole period.

[Andrew]

I am so sorry to make my answer so strange.
This is the first time to use this way to make words bold.
It's interesting!

[Rio]

Hi Simon,

1. In 2000, [the] oil price was slightly higher than [the] food price.
2. Over [the following 6 years], there was a dramatic increase [in the] oil price.
3. The [price index of food] rose by 36 points [during] the same period.
4. [After dropping dramatically], [the] food price increased considerably [between 2009 and 2011].
5. The average oil price [was] about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6. The food price index [reached a peak of 240 points in 2011]
7. This is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[Rio]

Hi Simon,

I typed a comment without using HTML tag, but why I get all of my texts being bold.

Thank you

[anh thư]

In 2000, oil price was higher than food price
6 years later, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
the index of rose price by 36 points at the same period.
After trough in 2009, food price showed an abrupt increase in 2011

[Fan]

In 2000, oil price was slight higher than food price.
Over 6-years period, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
The index of price rose by 36 points during the same period.
After the trough in 2009, food price had an abrupt increase in 2011.
The average oil price came to about $72 in the middle of 2006.
The food price index reached approximately 240 points.
This is the lowest figure throughout the period as a whole.

[yan]

In 2000, the oil price was slightly higher than the food price.
Over 6-years, there was a dramatic increase of oil price.
The index of price rose 36 points at the same period.
After the trough in 2009, food price indicates an abrupt increase in 2011.
The average oil price came to around $72 in the middle of 2006.
The food price index arrived approximately 240 points.
This is the lowest figure throughout the period.

[Kami]

1.In 2000, the oil price was slightly more than the food price.

[binh]

1. ok
2. 6 years later, there was a dramatic increase in ild price;
3. The index of food price rose by 36 points over the same period;
4. After a sharp decline in 2009, food price indicated a significant increase in 2011;
5. The average oil price was about $72 in the middle of 2006;
6. The food price index reached a peak at approximately 240 points;
7. This was the lowest figure in ... thought the whole period.

[Simon]

ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

1. In 2000, THE oil price was slightly higher than THE food price.

(I think there is also a problem with the comparison between oil and food prices. The price units are completely different, so I don't think we can really say that one price is higher than the other).

2. Over THE FOLLOWING 6 years, there was a dramatic increase IN THE oil price.

3. The FOOD PRICE index rose by 36 points DURING the same period.

4. After FALLING in 2009, food PRICES INCREASED SIGNIFICANTLY in 2011.

5. The average oil price in the middle of 2006 WAS ABOUT $72 PER BARREL.

6. The food price index REACHED approximately 240 points.

7. THESE WERE the lowest figures SHOWN ON THE GRAPH.

[Duc Giang Nguyen]

Thank you!

[Coco Wu]

1. In 2000, oil price was slightly higher than food price.
2. Over 6 years, there was a dramatic increase on the oil price.
3. The food price rose by 36 points in the same period.
4. After decreasing in 2009, food price has a strong increase in 2011.
5. The average oil price was about $72 in the middle of 2006.
6. The food price index achieved approximately 240 points.
7. These were the lowest figures during the whole period.

[Dung.NT]

1. Cannot make a comparison beacause they are in different units

[Alice Zheng]

Hi Simon,
It is a good opportunity to see your blog,I learnt a lot from you and other students'comments,the sentences with mistakes are also the common mistakes I've had before,I will make full use of it,and thanks a lot for presenting such great blog and articles.May it will help me get a high score in writing.

[Nikki]

Hello, I have a few questions that hope if anyone knows the answers. How to use 'reach' in writing the graph, like reach a peak at..., reach approximately..., reach to....

Really thanks for watching and will be glad to see the reply! If Simon can reply me would be much better.