Some students learn to write two or three-sentence conclusions that contain future predictions or recommendations. Personally I think this is an unnecessary waste of time, and it may even have a negative effect on your essay (if the question doesn't ask for a prediction or recommendation, you're going "off topic").
I advise my students to write simple one-sentence conclusions, and spend more time perfecting the main body paragraphs.
Task:
Look at the question and introduction in last week's lesson. Can you write a simple one-sentence conclusion that answers both parts of the question? Avoid using "showy" language, but aim to make your sentence completely error-free!
In conclusion, I believe parents should not allow children to do whatever they want because this form of upbringing could have damaging effects on their personality and behavior.
Posted by: Adib | August 09, 2017 at 11:15
To sum up, it is very necessary for parents to arrange all basic amenities to their kids but under a watchful eye so that pupils cannot over dependant on parents and also can easily understand the value of bucks that are being spent on them.
Posted by: M saini | August 09, 2017 at 11:33
In conclusion, I believe this style is not a good choice for parents to teach their children since it can have negative impact on them when they are mature.
Posted by: Hai Nam | August 09, 2017 at 11:39
Hi Simon!
In conclusion, parents who satisfy their children's every wish as a way of raising them do more harm then good, because this will negatively impact their upbringing in the long run, in terms of social interaction and behaviour.
Hope you can give me a feedback on this!
By the way, thank you for your helpful lessons:)
Posted by: sara | August 09, 2017 at 11:58
In conclusion, spoil child is not a good way to educate them since it has a range of negative effect in the future.
Posted by: Ethan | August 09, 2017 at 13:31
Hi Simon,
Thanks for your great website.
Please I need ideas for this question from IELTS Cambridge book 12:
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely.
Posted by: Zezee | August 09, 2017 at 14:00
In conclusion, it seems to me that giving children whatever they want, is not good way that parents should use to educate their children. Because it may lead to serve impacts on children to become good manners.
Posted by: Elsa.hvn | August 09, 2017 at 14:48
In conclusion,too lenient parents spoilt their children and which would have a negative impact in the adult life of children.
Posted by: Achu | August 09, 2017 at 17:10
In conclusion, I believe parents should not overindulge their children as this might have damaging effects on their adult life.
Posted by: Adib | August 09, 2017 at 17:35
In conclusion, allowing children do whatever they want is not a good style of parenting because it will result in many impacts on them in long-term.
Posted by: MT | August 09, 2017 at 17:53
In conclusion, parents who fulfill all their children demands would ultimately spoil them as they and it's not a way of good parenting style
Posted by: Maryam Hassan | August 10, 2017 at 03:14
in conclusion, I think that spoil the child by badly parenting style always bring a long-term negative impact for kids' adult life
Posted by: jj | August 10, 2017 at 03:53
Dear All,
Please see my one sentence conclusion below and comment on it.
In conclusion, I would argue that indulgent parenting style is not a good way of raising children because of it certainly has long-term negative outcomes on their adult lives.
Posted by: Jeff | August 10, 2017 at 07:25
To conclude,in terms of child based parenting, to focus on the willings of child is not the key for nurturing them,furthermore in long term it has negative impacts more than imagined.
Posted by: tugba | August 10, 2017 at 09:03
In conclusion, parents who fulfill all their children demands would ultimately spoil them as they grow older and it's not a way of good parenting style
Posted by: Maryam Hassan | August 10, 2017 at 10:02
Excuse me Mr.Simon,
While I was studying about opinion type, I wondered whether or not 'partly agree intro' and 'balanced intro' are the same. Please let me know.
Huge thanks!
Posted by: Ngoc Ninh | August 10, 2017 at 10:26
In conclusion, the idea of this parenting method is unhealthy and it would definitely give a negative impact on children’s future.
Posted by: Tae | August 10, 2017 at 12:38
Maryam Hassan
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=an+effective+parenting+style%2C+*+way+of+parenting&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Can%20effective%20parenting%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2C%2A%20way%20of%20parenting%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bthe%20way%20of%20parenting%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bnew%20way%20of%20parenting%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20way%20of%20parenting%3B%2Cc0
Posted by: Oleg | August 11, 2017 at 01:53
Elsa.hvn
Punctuation !
https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22because+it+may+lead+to%22
https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22have+severe+impacts%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=MAKNWZPOKsnb8QXf6pzACw
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_ADJ+impacts&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Benvironmental_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bnegative_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Beconomic_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Badverse_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsocial_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpotential_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsignificant_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpositive_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmajor_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhuman_ADJ%20impacts%3B%2Cc0
Posted by: Oleg | August 11, 2017 at 02:04
In conclusion, I would argue that the lenient trend of some towards their children’s upbringing is not a suitable approach and will no doubt spoil them rotten in the immediate future.
Posted by: Amir Hossein | August 11, 2017 at 10:39
In conclusion, I would argue that the lenient trend of some toward their children’s upbringing is not a suitable approach, and will no doubt spoil them rotten in the distant future.
Posted by: Amir Hossein | August 11, 2017 at 10:47
Oleg,
Well-noted. Thank you so much.
Posted by: Elsa.hvn | August 11, 2017 at 18:35
tugba
"willings" (noun) is marked rare or obsolete here:
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/willing
https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22willings%22&lr=lang_en&tbs=lr:lang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=WUGOWa6gF4uY8wWa3b-IDw&start=50&sa=N
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=wishes+of+a+child%2Cdemands+of+a+child%2Cdemands+of+children%2Cwill+of+a+child%2Cwill+of+children%2Cwishes+of+children%2Cwants+of+a+child%2Cwillings+of+child&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cwishes%20of%20a%20child%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdemands%20of%20a%20child%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdemands%20of%20children%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwill%20of%20a%20child%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwill%20of%20children%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwishes%20of%20children%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwants%20of%20a%20child%3B%2Cc0
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=the+key+to%2Cthe+key+*_ADP&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cthe%20key%20to%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2Cthe%20key%20%2A_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20of_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20in_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20for_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20from_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20with_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20into_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20on_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20at_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20by_ADP%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20key%20upon_ADP%3B%2Cc0
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=in+long+term%2Cin+the+long+term%2Cin+the+long-term%2Cin+the+long+run&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cin%20long%20term%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20long%20term%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20long%20-%20term%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20long%20run%3B%2Cc0
google "comma-splice" :
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Posted by: oleg | August 12, 2017 at 00:59
Amir Hossein
"spoil them rotten" does come up in "popular" and self-help books, but apparently not in more formal or academic contexts:
https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22spoil+them+rotten%22&lr=lang_en&gbv=1&tbs=lr:lang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=F1uOWb3uN8ur8QWY_6uYCA&start=30&sa=N
Posted by: oleg | August 12, 2017 at 02:38
It's dangerous that parents allow their children to do whatever they want and to get things whatever they ask for, it may leads children to be selfish and lack of empathy which would be an issue in these kids's life.
Posted by: Ledo | August 12, 2017 at 04:29
Amir Hossein
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=lenient+trend%2Clenient+*_NOUN%2C*_ADJ+trend%2C+indulgent+approach&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Clenient%20%2A_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Blenient%20treatment_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20view_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20attitude_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20sentence_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20policy_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20sentences_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20terms_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20approach_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20standard_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blenient%20standards_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2C%2A_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bgeneral_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bupward_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bdownward_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bnew_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsame_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcurrent_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsimilar_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Brecent_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bterm_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpresent_ADJ%20trend%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cindulgent%20approach%3B%2Cc0
Posted by: oleg | August 12, 2017 at 07:22
Amir Hossein
"trend toward leniency" in a criminal context yes.
https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22trend+toward+leniency%22&lr=lang_en&gbv=1&tbs=lr:lang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=O6yOWezXEYWV8wX78rfQDg&start=0&sa=N
Posted by: oleg | August 12, 2017 at 08:24
Sara
Your conclusion seems to pass the "ngrams" test; checkout the alternative phrases:
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=do+more+harm+than+good%2Cnegatively+impact+their%2Chave+a+negative+impact+on%2Ctheir+every+wish%2Csatisfy+their+wish_NOUN%2Csocial+interaction+and+behavior%2Cadversely+affect%2Cunrealistic+attitudes+and+expectations&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cdo more harm than good%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cnegatively impact their%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Chave a negative impact on%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ctheir every wish%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Csatisfy their wish_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Csocial interaction and behavior%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cadversely affect
Posted by: Oleg | August 12, 2017 at 18:39
Jeff
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=writing+style%2Clearning+style%2Cis+style%2Cprevailing+style%2Chas+style%2Cparenting+style%2C+indulgent+parenting+style+&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cwriting%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Clearning%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cis%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cprevailing%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Chas%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cparenting%20style%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cindulgent%20parenting%20style%3B%2Cc0
"... I would argue that an indulgent parenting style is..."
Click on the underlined blue phrases on the ngram for examples of "style" both with and without articles, depending on context, whether it is viewed as one of a number of possible styles, or being viewed "in general" as uncount.
Posted by: oleg | August 13, 2017 at 03:27
It is true that some parents are overly permissive and tend to spoil their children. In my opinion, this is not a good parenting style, and it can have a range of negative long-term consequences.
It is not healthy for children to grow up without any boundaries or guidance, and parents certainly should not pamper their children with whatever they want. As children are usually not mature enough to determine right or wrong conduct, parents need to discipline them by setting standards of behaviour or even punishment. The aim of these sets of rules is to show them what types of behaviour are not tolerated. Furthermore, giving children everything that they ever wanted gives them a misconception that they are entitled to anything without working for it. These children will not learn to save money or the value of hand work, which will be vital skills in later life.
The lack of parental discipline certainly has negative impacts on the growth of a child. On of the problems with spoiled children is that they are likely to be materialistic and taking everything for granted. At the same time, because overly lenient parents have little expectations of their children, these children tend to display low achievement in many aspects of life. But perhaps the main issue with these parents is that their children are likely to lack self-discipline and make poor decisions as they grow older. This means that they will be prone to committing crimes, or drug and alcohol abuse, because their behaviour and misconduct were condoned by their parents when they were younger.
In conclusion, parents should be strict with their children in terms of behaviour and purchases, otherwise these children are likely to face serious consequences.
Posted by: Frankie | August 13, 2017 at 05:24
Sir,
Its my pleasure to inform you that i scored 7 in ielts writing because of your work. I followed all the instructions in your writing lessons. Thank a lot sir. This was my fifth attempt , but scored only 6 in the previous exams. Really thanks a lot for this great improvement.God bless you abudently
Posted by: Meenu | August 13, 2017 at 07:27
IF ANYONE CAN CORRECT IT. THANKS A TON
It is true that in today's society, the luxurious items and social image that a person holds play a key role in deciding his value and personal traits such as loyalty and generosity have lost its significance. I agree with this complete statement due to numerous reasons.
There are multifarious factors that why people pay more attention to the materialistic things. Primarily, every person is in the race of being successful because society considers the person prominent if he has gained some sort of social reputation. To get this preferential treatment, material possessions are the easiest way to show off others that one has accomplished enough in his life. For instance, people like to exhibit expensive lifestyles by using expensive cars, living in colossal mansions and venturing on splendid vacations. Most of the people use social-networking websites and they get encouraging compliments when they upload pictures to prove that how royal they are. Therefore, the aspects on people observe others have transformed substantially.
In the same way old-fashioned morals have also been dominated by demeaning characteristics of people. Mostly people take the help of dishonesty and dominance in their business deals, at work and even in their relationships. To satisfy the insatiable hunger for money and fame, modern people believe in exploiting others especially due to their self-obsessed temperament. It is putty that the inevitable disappearance of loyalty, respect and benevolence has been becoming more apparent for about past two decades. In marriage relationships, for example, the divorce rate has been elevated than ever before solely because the partners are not loyal with their spouse and they constantly cheat on each other. It is conspicuous that people perceive that they are more content with deceptive and degraded ways of life.
In conclusion, although this change in tge previous values and personal worth is not productive for everyone, it seems unrealistic to escape from the powerful influence of this.
Posted by: Rammy | August 13, 2017 at 08:31
IF ANYONE CAN CORRECT IT. THANKS A TON!!
A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values such as honour, kindness and trust no longer seem inportant. To what extent do you agree or disagree??
It is true that in today's society, the luxurious items and social image that a person holds play a key role in deciding his value and personal traits such as loyalty and generosity have lost its significance. I agree with this complete statement due to numerous reasons.
There are multifarious factors that why people pay more attention to the materialistic things. Primarily, every person is in the race of being successful because society considers the person prominent if he has gained some sort of social reputation. To get this preferential treatment, material possessions are the easiest way to show off others that one has accomplished enough in his life. For instance, people like to exhibit expensive lifestyles by using expensive cars, living in colossal mansions and venturing on splendid vacations. Most of the people use social-networking websites and they get encouraging compliments when they upload pictures to prove that how royal they are. Therefore, the aspects on people observe others have transformed substantially.
In the same way old-fashioned morals have also been dominated by demeaning characteristics of people. Mostly people take the help of dishonesty and dominance in their business deals, at work and even in their relationships. To satisfy the insatiable hunger for money and fame, modern people believe in exploiting others especially due to their self-obsessed temperament. It is putty that the inevitable disappearance of loyalty, respect and benevolence has been becoming more apparent for about past two decades. In marriage relationships, for example, the divorce rate has been elevated than ever before solely because the partners are not loyal with their spouse and they constantly cheat on each other. It is conspicuous that people perceive that they are more content with deceptive and degraded ways of life.
In conclusion, although this change in tge previous values and personal worth is not productive for everyone, it seems unrealistic to escape from the powerful influence of this.
Posted by: Rammy | August 13, 2017 at 08:35
In conclusion some parents are friendly and liberal to their children which is necessary for their children's grown up but this should not cross the limit as this may bring negative impact for the children life.
Posted by: Nazmul | August 13, 2017 at 08:54
Hi Oleg,
Noted with many thanks
Posted by: Jeff | August 14, 2017 at 06:17
Connectors show positive or no impact on the writing task 2?
Posted by: Ravv | August 16, 2017 at 13:13
Hi Oleg
Noted carefully.
Thank you very much.
Posted by: tuğba | August 24, 2017 at 20:49
In conclusion, parenting is not just listening to children, but having them controlled in an acceptable way of upbringing is a work of art.
Posted by: Kami | September 04, 2017 at 13:06
In conclusion,as far as I am concerned that permissive parenting is not a good way to raise a independent adults, it will undoubtedly cause lead to more harm than contribution.
Posted by: Eric Yu | December 02, 2017 at 16:38
Excuse me, I would like to revise my answer as below:
In conclusion,as far as I am concerned that permissive parenting is not a good way to raise an independent adults, it will undoubtedly lead to more harm than contribution.
Posted by: Eric Yu | December 02, 2017 at 16:39