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October 28, 2017

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I would prefer to write-the bar chart shows, gives information about or illustrates instead of writing-the bar chart portraits or depicts. Because in the ielts exam, you should only use one of them. However, it should be suitable

Portraits/depicts should be removed.
Data about the percentage is mixed up.
Have been disposed or done?


The bar chart shows the percentage of waste that is recycled as well as put into the landfill, incinerated or disposed of in other ways in various countries of Europe.

1:the word "portrait "is a noun, not a verb.
2: I am not sure about "data about the percentage"and "that
is put into a landfill ,an incinerator, or have been...",but this sentence doesn't read smoothly.
3: maybe it's a typo "the percentage waste that..." it should be
the percentage of waste that ...
by the way,the word"meanwhile " means in the period of time between
two events, it's inappropriate to substitute "as well as"


The bar chart shows that the percentage of waste that is recycled,incinerated ,put into landfill and disposed of in other ways in various EU countries.

NO 1 ENVIRONMENTALLY INSTEAD OF ENVIRONMENTAL
AND WASTE PRODUCTS INSTEAD OF WASTE MANAGEMENT

NO 2 PERCENTAGES INSTEAD OF PERCENTAGE, NO NEED TO USE PRESENT PERFECT TENSE HERE
NO 3 MEANWHILE OF NO PLACE HERE

how big mistakes we have cause it how far to success to ielts Road

1 portraits Noun (X)
usage:
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/zht/%E8%A9%9E%E5%85%B8/%E8%8B%B1%E8%AA%9E-%E6%BC%A2%E8%AA%9E-%E7%B9%81%E9%AB%94/portrait?q=portraits

2 depicts data (X)
have been disposed of in other ways which are done ( unnecessary here it is against the task achievement )

3 meanwhile (X , is linking words )

correct the answer:
1 The bar chart shows /give the information about the three different environmental unfriendly techniques for recycling the waste management in various countries of Europe.
2 The bar chart shows the percentage of recycled waste that is put into a landfill, an incinerator, and other ways in various EU countries.
3 The bar chart shows the percentage waste that is recycled put into landfill, incinerated,and other ways in various EU countries.

I usually use illustrates instead of depicts,sometimes examiner is not in good mood to understand ur hard words

Getting it right:

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=chart+shows%2Cchart+portrays%2Cchart+depicts%2Cchart+illustrates%2Cchart+indicates%2Cchart+summarizes%2Cchart+compares%2Cchart+provides+information+about%2Cchart+gives+information+about%2Cchart+provides+an+overview+of%2Cchart+gives+an+overview+of&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cchart%20shows%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20portrays%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20depicts%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20illustrates%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20indicates%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20summarizes%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20compares%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20provides%20information%20about%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20gives%20information%20about%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20provides%20an%20overview%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20gives%20an%20overview%20of%3B%2Cc0

FROM SIMON:

Most people noticed problems with the words 'portraits' (which is actually a plural noun), 'depicts' and 'meanwhile'. These are the problems that I noticed first.

My advice is to use 'shows', 'compares' or 'illustrates' only. There's no need to learn any more synonyms for 'shows' - most of them will be inappropriate in the context of an IELTS report, and they won't help your score in any way.

Good evening sir , need to improve my writing .I want to get my tasks checked by you .Please suggest how's that possible?
Awaiting your prompt response.
Thank you very much .

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