In Thursday's lesson I suggested some phrases that could be used in a task 1 introduction sentence.
However, I noticed below the lesson that some students had used their own ideas instead of my suggested phrases. Unfortunately this led to some big mistakes in the sentences below:
- The bar chart portraits the three different environmental unfriendly techniques for recycling the waste management in various countries of Europe.
- The bar chart depicts data about the percentage of recycled waste that is put into a landfill, an incinerator, or have been disposed of in other ways which are done in various EU countries.
- The bar chart shows the percentage waste that is recycled.Meanwhile, put into landfill, incinerated, or disposed of in other ways in various EU countries.
Can you see the mistakes that could have been avoided if the students had used my suggestions?
I would prefer to write-the bar chart shows, gives information about or illustrates instead of writing-the bar chart portraits or depicts. Because in the ielts exam, you should only use one of them. However, it should be suitable
Posted by: utkirbek | October 28, 2017 at 14:13
Portraits/depicts should be removed.
Data about the percentage is mixed up.
Have been disposed or done?
The bar chart shows the percentage of waste that is recycled as well as put into the landfill, incinerated or disposed of in other ways in various countries of Europe.
Posted by: Ameet | October 28, 2017 at 14:46
1:the word "portrait "is a noun, not a verb.
2: I am not sure about "data about the percentage"and "that
is put into a landfill ,an incinerator, or have been...",but this sentence doesn't read smoothly.
3: maybe it's a typo "the percentage waste that..." it should be
the percentage of waste that ...
by the way,the word"meanwhile " means in the period of time between
two events, it's inappropriate to substitute "as well as"
The bar chart shows that the percentage of waste that is recycled,incinerated ,put into landfill and disposed of in other ways in various EU countries.
Posted by: Xiaohan | October 28, 2017 at 15:19
NO 1 ENVIRONMENTALLY INSTEAD OF ENVIRONMENTAL
AND WASTE PRODUCTS INSTEAD OF WASTE MANAGEMENT
NO 2 PERCENTAGES INSTEAD OF PERCENTAGE, NO NEED TO USE PRESENT PERFECT TENSE HERE
NO 3 MEANWHILE OF NO PLACE HERE
Posted by: ADEL | October 28, 2017 at 18:35
how big mistakes we have cause it how far to success to ielts Road
Posted by: poor | October 29, 2017 at 06:14
1 portraits Noun (X)
usage:
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/zht/%E8%A9%9E%E5%85%B8/%E8%8B%B1%E8%AA%9E-%E6%BC%A2%E8%AA%9E-%E7%B9%81%E9%AB%94/portrait?q=portraits
2 depicts data (X)
have been disposed of in other ways which are done ( unnecessary here it is against the task achievement )
3 meanwhile (X , is linking words )
Posted by: poor | October 29, 2017 at 06:31
correct the answer:
1 The bar chart shows /give the information about the three different environmental unfriendly techniques for recycling the waste management in various countries of Europe.
2 The bar chart shows the percentage of recycled waste that is put into a landfill, an incinerator, and other ways in various EU countries.
3 The bar chart shows the percentage waste that is recycled put into landfill, incinerated,and other ways in various EU countries.
Posted by: poor | October 29, 2017 at 06:36
I usually use illustrates instead of depicts,sometimes examiner is not in good mood to understand ur hard words
Posted by: jk | October 29, 2017 at 10:42
Getting it right:
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=chart+shows%2Cchart+portrays%2Cchart+depicts%2Cchart+illustrates%2Cchart+indicates%2Cchart+summarizes%2Cchart+compares%2Cchart+provides+information+about%2Cchart+gives+information+about%2Cchart+provides+an+overview+of%2Cchart+gives+an+overview+of&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cchart%20shows%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20portrays%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20depicts%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20illustrates%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20indicates%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20summarizes%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20compares%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20provides%20information%20about%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20gives%20information%20about%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20provides%20an%20overview%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cchart%20gives%20an%20overview%20of%3B%2Cc0
Posted by: M'ambo | October 30, 2017 at 02:17
FROM SIMON:
Most people noticed problems with the words 'portraits' (which is actually a plural noun), 'depicts' and 'meanwhile'. These are the problems that I noticed first.
My advice is to use 'shows', 'compares' or 'illustrates' only. There's no need to learn any more synonyms for 'shows' - most of them will be inappropriate in the context of an IELTS report, and they won't help your score in any way.
Posted by: Simon | October 31, 2017 at 14:17
Good evening sir , need to improve my writing .I want to get my tasks checked by you .Please suggest how's that possible?
Awaiting your prompt response.
Thank you very much .
Posted by: smarty kaushik | June 26, 2018 at 17:10