I've almost finished the essay below, but can you write a one-sentence conclusion for me?
Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some leisure activities become fashionable for a short time and then disappear when a new trend comes along, whereas others seem to be perennially popular. I can therefore only partly agree with the assertion that hobbies reflect changing fashions rather than our true interests.
On the one hand, it is true that many hobbies are simply passing trends. Children and teenagers, in particular, are attracted to whatever activity is currently popular among their peers. My 10-year-old niece, for example, seems to have a new interest every month, as she joins in with the latest craze that sweeps through her primary school. Over the last year or so, she has been obsessed with Rubik’s cubes, fidget spinners, squidgies and slime. In a similar way, there have been several different fitness trends for adults over recent years, from jogging to yoga to circuit training, and I doubt whether the majority of participants continued to enjoy those activities in the long term.
On the other hand, many people spend their free time doing popular activities that are far from trendy. One good example would be the game chess. Children and adults who enjoy playing chess are certainly not following a new fashion or wasting their time on something that they do not truly like. On the contrary, they are passionate about a game that has existed for hundreds of years, and they find it inherently fascinating and absorbing. I would say the same about many other hobbies, from reading to swimming.
In conclusion,.....
In conclusion, Following trends and fashions or not, it is up to people. They choose the most suitable things for themshelve.
Posted by: Trung Nguyen | January 23, 2019 at 09:34
In conclusion, I argue that the changing of people's preference would depend on types of leisure activities that they chose.
Posted by: Hoàng Nguyễn | January 23, 2019 at 11:46
In conclusion, some hobbies can temporary popular while some can last for ages.
Posted by: paul | January 23, 2019 at 11:47
Dear Simon,
I have some confusion regarding the modal essay of 2nd March, 2016 about Task 2. Question is " More people migrating cities search of better life but face difficulty .
Explain difficulties & how government make urban life better? "
1) confusion no. 1 is thesis statement of introduction where
you have mentioned only one idea (solution) but missed to address difficulty . Conclusion is fine acvording to your tips in your blog. You only paraphrased the thesis.
Pls reply .
2) Amother confusion is the "Real content " Topic in your blog in which you have mentioned that to score 7 or more one must focus on "Real Content " rather than grammar, linking and structure. But somewhere I found that Impressive idea is not important; one should focus on .....
So I m really confused. Could you pls explain Simon?
Posted by: Jubino | January 23, 2019 at 12:05
Sorry . My querries have already been addressed .
Posted by: Jubino | January 23, 2019 at 12:12
Individual free time activities become fashionable for a limited time and then vanishes when a latest trend emerges, whereas other hobbies appear to be permanently famous.However,I agree with the idea that hobbies are reflection of changing fashions rather than personal true interests.
Posted by: Pachu | January 23, 2019 at 12:24
it is true that some entertainment becomes old-fashioned these days but there are other popular entertainments that trends have not affected on them
Posted by: Hossein | January 23, 2019 at 12:29
In c0nclusion, from the above arguments, I could conclude that some people are too much trendy in term of their preferred interests and hobbies in which they are not confined in for a long period whereas others are always very interested in some life-long interests so far.
Is it okay??
Posted by: Akter | January 23, 2019 at 13:44
In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my position that even though there have always been trendy hobbies temporarily appealing to people, the fact that any individuals choose their favourite activities based on their personal taste has stood the test of time.
Posted by: Roxana | January 23, 2019 at 14:30
I would appreciate it if any of you correct my mistakes😊
Posted by: Roxana | January 23, 2019 at 14:31
Akter:
In conclusion, from the above arguments, I would conclude['conclude/conclusion is repetitive: use agree/concur] that some people are too much [wrong word order: more? ] trendy in term [singular/plural?] of their preferred interests and hobbies in [wrong preposition] which they are not confined in for a long period [comma needed here] whereas others are always very interested in some life-long interests so far [always or so far: not both together].
Posted by: Oleg | January 23, 2019 at 16:33
Roxana:
In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my position that even though there have always been trendy hobbies temporarily appealing to people [Perhaps: ... hobbies which hold some temporary or transient appeal], the fact that any individuals choose their favourite activities based on their personal taste has stood the test of time. [..., the facts/evidence supports the view that ...]
Posted by: Oleg | January 23, 2019 at 16:37
in conclision hobbies which people enjoy doing is things in their spare time
Posted by: hakan | January 23, 2019 at 21:25
In conclusion, while some popular pastimes seem to be changed in order to reflect the newest trends, I believe that people choose their own favourite activities doing in spare time that best fit their abilities and interests.
Posted by: Chien DN | January 24, 2019 at 01:07
In conclusion, some people are more inclined to have spare time activities which are according to the current fashion but there are some others who ignore the recent trend and stick to their priority all the time. This means that the hobbies and interests are totally dependent on the type of individuals.
Posted by: Niraj Sharma | January 24, 2019 at 03:06
In conclusion, although I partially agree with the view that certain free-time activities are getting updating from time to time for some people, I believe that others are long-lasting, which genuinely mirror individuals’ personal choice rather than recent trends and fashions.
Posted by: Vishaal | January 24, 2019 at 04:13
Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree with this?
People have differing views about the criteria companies should consider while hiring employees. I completely agree with the idea that firms should give more importance to individuals’ character than their education and work experience because this would allow any organization to grow faster and keeping privacy.
First and foremost, companies can boost profit by selecting individuals having good work ethics, honesty, and loyalty. This is essential because such people are highly likely to be dedicated towards their company’s development and are mostly ready to stretch out of their comfort zone to achieve company’s objectives and goals, and thus their productivity would significantly be increased and because of this, such companies would earn higher financial success. Conversely, if any firm hired highly qualified or experienced candidate having a corrupt mind, it would massively fail in achieving targets, because such workers are usually selfish and prefer to only work for their personal gains. For example, it is often indicated in many newspapers that companies having stable and loyal employees grow tremendously in the current market.
Additionally, employees with higher personal values are crucial for any organization in maintaining privacy. That is to say, many directors and managers are well aware of their company’s future development and business plans, and if they shared these secrets with other competitors, their companies would lose income dramatically. Therefore, employees with greater ethical and moral values are always more crucial for firms than educated and experienced workers having lower personal qualities. For instance, a reputed pharmaceutical firm recently got sued by its rival and lost 1 billion rupees as a penalty just because one of its employees shared the company’s secrets to its rival for getting some money.
In conclusion, I think it is always better for firms to consider employees’ personal values first, and then education or experience or both for rapid progress and maintaining secrecy.
Posted by: Vishaal | January 24, 2019 at 07:07
in conclusion,some hobbies and interests are changable time by time according to individuals while some of them everytime are liked people doing.
Posted by: asuman | January 24, 2019 at 08:22
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In conclusion, even though some hobbies are ephemeral and people have them only to follow the fashion and make social contacts. There are some interests, which are developed by people’s true love and enthusiasm, can definitely go down in history.
Posted by: Eward | January 24, 2019 at 08:42
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Please help.
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Posted by: Onurlu-alp | January 24, 2019 at 08:44
In conclusion, I partly agree with the idea that some games and activities reflect the trends. However, some traditional hobbies are still popular among people who have true interests in it.
Posted by: Sabrina | January 24, 2019 at 08:45
In conclusion, I think that hobbies just partly reflect latest trends. As there are bunch of popular activities which are not trendy at all and stay popular for years.
Posted by: Maria Mirabella | January 24, 2019 at 10:13
Onurlu-alp,
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https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/archives.html
Posted by: Simon | January 24, 2019 at 10:18
Oleg
Thanks a million
Posted by: Roxana | January 24, 2019 at 13:24
In conclusion,some hobbies are never be obsolote whilst we clear understand that some hobbies maybe become trend for a while but as we know easy come easy go.
Posted by: Mahmut Emin Çiy | January 24, 2019 at 13:31
In conclusion, some hobbies change with incoming trends, whereas others become popular regardless of changing trend.
Posted by: ZIAUL HUDA | January 24, 2019 at 18:01
In conclusion, while it's true that some hobbies are popular temporarily, I believe that there are some interests which can last for long term.
Posted by: Claire | January 25, 2019 at 02:12
In conclusion, the varying fashion would no doubt influence the choice of people as to what leisure activities they love to do, our own interest is still playing an important role in finding out and developing our hobbies.
Posted by: he li | January 25, 2019 at 04:00
In conclusion, while some popular pastimes that change reflecting the new trend, I believe there are still some pleasures and interests that are not obsolete over time.
Posted by: Tom | January 25, 2019 at 05:41
In conclusion, while I agree that trends and fashion may have a huge impact on individual’s interests, I do believe that many people spend their time doing what they truly like.
Posted by: Hien | January 25, 2019 at 06:38
Here is my conclusion for your essay
In conclusion, trendy activities can cover popular hobbies, but real interests have existed for a long time to admit their position that is not inherently left behind by any of trendy. In my opinion, people should find one hobby that suits to them and permanently pursue it. Through true interests, they can realize who they are, what they want and why they live. People who change their hobbies consistently because of trendy would find their life messy and lose their direction in life.
Posted by: Nam | January 25, 2019 at 07:32
while I believe that some hobbies and games seem to be more fashionable and trendy, I would argue that other leisure activities would reflect individual real interest.
Posted by: Nora | January 25, 2019 at 10:16
People have differing views about whether young individuals, reaching adulthood, should live solo. While some believe that young adults should live with their parents to avoid financial problems, I would argue that they ought to live independently for learning crucial life skills.
The main reason why people think that young adults should live with their family is to avoid risk which comes due to the lack of money. That is to say, the majority of young people are either pursuing their third level education or searching for suitable jobs when they get mature. If they are forced to leave their home at this stage, they may have to deal with the severe financial scarcity or, in the worst case, participate in some criminal offenses just to pay their rents or university fees. For example, although my younger brother earns only 10,000 rupees per month, he never faced any financial problem just because he has been living with my parents since his childhood and gets instant help from my parents whenever he wants.
Despite the above arguments, I believe that young individuals should live solo to become responsible and mature adults later in their lives. Most of us have to take responsibilities of our spouse and children in our adult lives, and we could develop all the skills required to manage these duties effectively if we stay independently. Many young professionals, such as engineers, pharmacist or doctors, are often appeared as responsible husbands or wives as they have to live alone in different metropolitan cities or countries because of their jobs and manage all of their personal expenses and other duties from the start of their career.
In conclusion, although young people could avoid financial struggles by living with their family members, I think that they should live alone in order to prepare themselves for future responsibilities.
Posted by: Vishaal | January 25, 2019 at 12:43
Vishaal
..ought to live independently in order to learn crucial life skills.
third level education -> tertiary education
"when they get mature"?? Not clear what you mean by this in the context.
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/mature-student
deal with severe financial scarcity -> face financial hardships
pay their rents -> pay the rent
gets instant help -> receives financial support
take responsibility for our spouse and children
we would develop ... if we stayed independent. (No -ly)
engineers, pharmacists
are often appeared -> often become
Posted by: zsófi | January 25, 2019 at 16:56
In conclusion, I would argue that some hobbies become the vouge by following trends, but there are many people who have interests in something reflecting their own personalities.
Posted by: Chad | January 26, 2019 at 08:41
Thanks Zsofi!
Posted by: Vishaal | January 27, 2019 at 05:33
In conclusion, some hobbies and interests are popular for a period of time and become out of fashion soon, but some do stay over time and have a durable attraction for people.
Thank you.
Posted by: Jojo | January 27, 2019 at 07:58
Jojo
ephemeral: https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/ephemeral
Posted by: colette | January 27, 2019 at 17:56
HI,
I have rewritten the essay. I need you to comment.
Here is my essay:
Some time off activities become trendy for a short time and then fade away when a new style comes along, whereas others seem to be fashionable. I am partly agreed with the affirmation that hobbies reflect changing fashions rather than our true interests.
On the one hand, it is obvious that some hobbies are changing with the newly erupted trends. Children and teenagers, in particular, like to follow activities whatever currently has gain popularity. For example, a friend of mine has started doing motorbike stunt sport. He has been obsessed for more than two years. Similarly, there have been several other some sorts of sports activities such as yoga and jogging on the streets, but I am skeptical whether adults continued to work out on these fitness trends.
On the other hand, many people spend their leisure time playing untrendy games. For instance, a game that is far from trend is Carom board. Youngsters and children who play this game certainly do not follow new styles and even waste their time on other activities that they do not admire. In addition to the truly enjoy the game of their passion, and they find it amusing and fascinating. I am of the same view about other hobbies such as reading, listening to music and swimming. Hobbies from reading to swimming are with true interest. For this reason, they would not be reflected by changing fashion ever.
In conclusion, some hobbies disappear when the new fashion enters society, but others with true interest continue to be in the same style.
Posted by: ZIAUL HUDA | January 28, 2019 at 16:54
Hi colette, thank you for your reply, but it looks like you meant to reply to another person's comment since I did not use the word ephemeral in my answer.
Posted by: Jojo | January 29, 2019 at 05:18
Some people think that giving gifts and presents to friends and family is important to show them that we care. Others think that there are more important ways. Discuss both and give your opinion.
People have different views about the method of sharing care with their loved ones. While some argue that presenting materialistic things to our friends or family members is essential for expressing our care towards them, I firmly believe it is absolutely crucial to spend quality time with them to show our care.
On the one hand, giving gifts or presents to friends and family is one of the common ideas of expressing care. Many people are giving things like flowers, chocolates, gold jewelry and many other such things to their loved ones, as a token of love, to make them feel happy and being cared. My wife, for instant, presented me my favorite Sony’s music system on my last birthday, although she hated the loud music, in order to express her care for me.
However, in current busy lives, I think the majority of people feel being loved or cared only when their partner or friend spend an ample amount of time with them on many occasions. For example, even if any husband gave many gifts to his wife but he was unable to give her sufficient time due to hectic professional responsibilities, she would likely to feel being ignored or less cared by her husband. Hence, it is pretty evident that giving time to our parents, spouse or friends is a far better way to express our feeling of caring than presenting gifts.
In conclusion, although giving presents is one way of expressing care, I think this method is outdated and unworkable in recent times and one needs to spend more quality time with his or her closed ones to show true care.
Posted by: Vishaal | January 29, 2019 at 12:35
In conclusion, while many people take up hobbies to become fashionable or trendy in a short-term, Others regard them as an irreplaceable part of their lives.
Posted by: Đang | January 30, 2019 at 08:59
By way of conclusion, popular hobbies and interest can be more or less common due to many circumstances.
Posted by: cindy | January 30, 2019 at 09:07
In conclusion, although it's true that some hobbies are just a mere of fashions, there do exist activities that are truly enjoyed by people.
Posted by: tan | February 02, 2019 at 13:23
In conclusion, though people's mood and preference varies from time to time and with the influence of environment as the strongest factor, hobbies and activities that convenient are inheritable and modifiable to individuals.
Posted by: Eliza | February 04, 2019 at 16:52
Hi, Simon, My question is not related to the conclusion. I just a little bit concern that is that OK to write the main paragraph only with examples?
In this essay, the first main paragraph talks about children and adults' hobbies using example and the second main paragraph does the same.
Should we develop the topic sentence, then supporting points, and then add example?
Thank you
Posted by: Lois | February 04, 2019 at 18:10
In conclusion, based on the arguments above, I feel that we can not generalize the statement to all leisure activities after they become fashionable since their longevity truly depends on the nature of the activity and the age of the person interested in it.
Posted by: Parviz | February 06, 2019 at 07:00
Hi Simon, i think there is a little mistake in your essay, squidgies should be changed to squishies. Thank you for posting this sample essay!
Posted by: Toàn Nguyễn | February 07, 2019 at 07:31
Admittedly, as per time period hobbies and fashion interest is automatically change amid people .therefore most of people spent their recreational time on other activities rather than expend money on fashionable thing which interest not live for long time,.according to essay statement I would discuss agree point instead of agree .so I will explain my perspective notions in upcoming paragraphs.
Posted by: Kamal | February 08, 2019 at 18:00
Hi simon
I see that the 2nd paragraph is shorter and is not detailed like the first one.Doesnt my task response get affected as it may fall under band 6(some parts are fully covered than others)
Posted by: Apsara Karki | February 19, 2019 at 17:40
In conclusion, we can say that there are many people being involved in their hobbies for a long time taking their interest and personality into account, while others may define their interests to keep up with the fashion.
Posted by: Gunay | March 21, 2019 at 12:01
Below is my essay which indicates total disagreement with the view:
The line graph shows the comparison on average annual spending by American on mobile phone and landline phone services from 2001 to 2010.
Clearly, the spending on mobile phone services soared over the 10-year period, while residential phone expenditure dropped steadily. The year 2006 marks the turning point at which cell phone expenditure started going ahead of that for residential phone services.
In 2001, US consumers spent an average of just over $200 on mobile services, Which is much lower than around $700 expenditure for landline services. Over the following 5 years, average spending on mobile services kept increasing by approximately $300. By comparison, expenditure on residential phone services reduced by nearly $200.
In the year 2006, the average American paid out the same amount of money on both types of phone services, spending just over$500 on each. By 2010, spending on mobile phones had reached around $750. However, the figure for spending on residential services had fallen to just over half this amount.
The bar chart illustrates the proportions of Australian males and females in distinct age groups who were physical active on a regular basis in 2010.
Roughly speaking, about half of Australians did some kind of routine physical activity in 2010. Females in the age group of 45 to 54 were the most physically active, proportionally, while males aged 35 to 44 did the least physical active.
In the category of ages of 15 to 24, almost 53% men did regular physical activity, compared to the lower figure of 53% women who were physically active. But between the ages of 25 and 44, men were much less active on average than women. In fact, in the 35 to 44 age group, a mere 39.5% of males did some form of regular exercise, compared to 52.5% of females.
Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical activity rose to approximately 45%, while the proportion of active females remained around 8% higher, at 53%. Finally, the percentages of Australian women and men aged 65 and over who exercised regularly were almost identical at approximately 47.
With changes of public trends and fashions over time, some leisure activities become prevalent while others disappear in spite of personal preference and inner choices. I completely disagree with this assertion and argue that it is true personal interests that hobbies actually reflect.
First, the world has changed and more personal hobbies become generally accepted. People don’t need to meet the general public judgement of personal leisure activities. In contrast, some people do actually odd activities and really enjoy themselves. And most of us have more time and support from our family members on our hobbies. For example, I am a big fan of Transformers have a hobby of collecting Transformers’ toys. When my mother noticed that, she became unexpectedly supportive of my hobby and even asked me to buy some toys with more subtle and more sophisticated designs.
Second, people are educated to obey their true thoughts and choose to live in a lifestyle that they really appreciate. Modern schools now focus more on the cultivation of an independent personality of their students, which requires, especially, independent personal hobbies not subject to changes of public fashions. In addition, it is believed by more and more people that those true hobbies which are resilient, long-lasting and fascinating need true personal devotion, therefore they are not prone to the influence of the fluctuation of fashions.
To conclude, we have no need and no longer have to change our hobbies and interests according to public trends and fashions in such a modern era.
Nice of you if you take a look at it and help me check it!
Posted by: Cheng | March 24, 2019 at 13:47
Sorry, I mistakenly copied too much content.In fact, only the last of the comment is related to this writing task.
Posted by: Cheng | March 24, 2019 at 13:51
In conclusion, while it is evident that some leisure pursuits are only short-lived interests, it seems to me that people still spend their spare time doing things that they truly enjoy.
Posted by: Hoang Vu | April 01, 2019 at 15:34
Hi, Simon. Do we need to discuss the first part the assertion "Popular hobbies and interests change over time"?
Posted by: Ralph | April 18, 2019 at 00:05
Hi,
Can you guys help to explain why did he use "continued" not " continue" in this sentence "..and I doubt whether the majority of participants continued to enjoy those activities in the long term."?
Thanks a lot!
Posted by: Tracy | May 01, 2019 at 05:33
In conclusion, I argue that while fashions and trends influence our hobbies' tastes in the short term, in the long term they do not have strong effects on our leisure and pastimes.
Posted by: Reza | May 08, 2019 at 18:04
In conclusion, while some hobbies seem to be reflections of the latest trends, I believe hobbies based on people’s personal interests still persist.
Posted by: lin | May 26, 2019 at 13:47
Dear Simon,
I have a question regarding the use of personal examples. I think in this case your example of a niece worked pretty well, it seemed quite natural and made your idea quite clear. However, I am worried, when using these kind of examples, that it might sound less academic or less serious? Should i be careful when using them?
For example, in the essay in which it is discussed whether the way people dress has an effect on their performance, I wanted to give an example of a colleague, who although always poorly dressed, is one of the best workers. Would that be ok?
Thank you for your time.
Kind regards,
Valentina
Posted by: Valentina | September 07, 2019 at 20:23
in conclusion my opinion is that leisure activities reflect changing trends rather than our true enjoyment.
Posted by: zahra | November 03, 2019 at 10:05
In conclusion,while some people asserted that trends and fashions influence to indicate what sort of hobbies to fond of, others are passionate about inherited games and hobbies which were existed for many years.
Posted by: Shokhistakhon | November 23, 2019 at 10:11