If you look at the official band descriptors for writing task 2, you'll find this phrase in the band 9 description for 'coherence and cohesion':
"uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention"
So how do you connect your ideas (cohesion) without attracting too much attention? I think there are 2 possible ways:
- Explain your ideas in a logical order so that you don't need many linking words. This is probably what you do when writing in your own language.
- Use easy linking and referencing words like and, but, because, which, that, this, while, for example. These are so common that they attract almost no attention.
thanks
Posted by: K | July 11, 2019 at 04:28
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Posted by: Pachu | July 11, 2019 at 16:30
sorry, it should be like "I want to see the number one choice of every students".
Posted by: Pachu | July 11, 2019 at 16:36
Pachu
If you start studying from some years backthere are more than enough materials to learn from. I started from 2013.
Only downside is the arrangement of the site, an issue with the blogspot, if you select a label then you have to read from the post on the bottom and then continue up. ( from oldest to new)
This happens only if you select a specific label. Else you could just come from old one to the next.
Posted by: Iroshan464 | July 11, 2019 at 16:49
Sir, we have to do task 2 questions from Cambridge 14 also.So, here are questions:
1)Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
2)Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
3)Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
4)Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Posted by: Pachu | July 12, 2019 at 02:29
Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. some people believe we should buy food from the local farmer to protect the environment and help the local business. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
It is argued that people ought to purchase food grown in their countries in order to support the environment and many local businesses. While this is advantageous as this would boost the country’s economy, I think that the disadvantage of the rise in the cost of food items is more significant.
When citizens buy food from the local farmers, the income of their state will increase dramatically. This is because not only farmers but also sellers and distributors of food products will earn large sums of money due to the rise in the number of customers, and thus they would pay more tax to the government. Per a recent business survey, for example, about 15% of India’s economy depends on the local business of food products, such as vegetables, grains, tea, and others. However, I feel this benefit is less significant as people can earn higher profit by selling locally produced food to western countries, and this will also grow their country’s economy.
One of the potential drawbacks of men and women buying food from the farmers of their areas is the substantial rise in the cost of many food products. That is to say, the demand for such consumable items will increase significantly as a greater number of citizens will consume these products, which often leads to the shortage and hence hike in the rates of food items. In India, for instance, the price of cow milk has increased by 12% since 2017 due to the fact that its consumption has been on the rise now for over two years. I, therefore, think that this drawback is more challenging as it will cause poor people to suffer from starvation.
In conclusion, although the national economy will grow as people eat food which is grown in their countries, I would argue that the negative of the boost in the price of food clearly outweighs any or all positives.
Posted by: Vishaal | July 12, 2019 at 10:19
Vishaal ,
I think task is demanding that advantage is more than disadvantage .But you are saying that disadvantage is more significant which is opposite of task requirement.
Another point I have to say that you should write 2 distinct points/specific points for advantages and one point for disadvantage or you can write also 3 distinct points for advantages and 2 points for disadvantage which you have to explain and support with examples.This means that you have to fully develop your ideas otherwise TR score will be low.
I am not expert , but I think you have to do like this.
Posted by: Pachu | July 12, 2019 at 10:45
Thanks for your positive words Pachu!
Posted by: Simon | July 12, 2019 at 12:02
Pachu
"Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?". Surely we can answer yes or no to this question, agree or disagree.
Posted by: gigi | July 12, 2019 at 12:22
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Posted by: Pachu | July 12, 2019 at 12:32
Respected sir, the link for "common IELTS writing topics" here ( https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/02/ielts-advice-you-need-ideas-and-opinions.html ) is down. Kindly renew or update this link. Thankyou in anticipation.
Posted by: tkb | July 15, 2019 at 08:21
tkb,
Try this link:
https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2016/05/ielts-vocabulary-topic-list.html
Posted by: Simon | July 15, 2019 at 14:52
Hey! can you give some examples explaining the ideas in both ways? I just wanted to the difference .
Posted by: sim | July 16, 2019 at 19:06